You're not the Sheriff

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RAMI said:
This is really great. Love the mellotron. Harmonies are awesome, and your productions are getting better by leaps and bounds with each song. This is very catchy. Musically, the arrangement works very well. The keyboard line fits perfectly.

I wouldn't worry about the rhyme scheme. Bob dylan, The Beatles and probably every great song writer has had odd rhyme schemes. If anything, it tickles the ear to hear a rhyme you're not expecting, or not hear a rhyme you are expecting.

I like all your songs, but they seem to be SOUNDING better with each new one.

First song I listen to this morning. I'm sure it will be in my head all day.
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Thanks Rami. On the inside I am feeling quite pleased and happy with the feedback on this one because it seems I finally got the mix sounding palatable enough for no one to mention it. :D

I wouldn't have gotten to this point without all the excellent feedback you guys have given me to date though, that much is for sure.

It's actually the first tune I've done that doesn't annoy the hell out of me. And it's been stuck in my head on repeat for about 2 weeks. Hope it's not the same for you...
 
Very nice. I enjoyed the song. Sounds were all good I thought.

I'm hearing some vocal artifacts here and there. One example is the word "less" at :41.
 
TripleM said:
Very nice. I enjoyed the song. Sounds were all good I thought.

I'm hearing some vocal artifacts here and there. One example is the word "less" at :41.
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Please can you explain 'artifacts' to me? I hear a wee click, is that what you mean? Well spotted, I never heard it, I don't know what caused it though. Could be a shitty cut of mouth sounds on the vocal track do you think? Let me go investigate...thanks for pointing that out.
 
RAMI said:
Funny how "cl" can look like "d" sometimes. :eek:
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I can't fix that wee click. :eek:

I had a quick read about it, sounds pretty complicated to remove an unwanted sound within a sound. I have to run some sort of noise gate/removal or something? Maybe I'll have to leave it, and call it a lesson.

Of course, I thought there was nothing I'd done that had caused it...but I'm 100% to blame. I glued that track when I thought I'd never have to go back to edit it. Who do I think I am, the next CLA? :D Lesson learned, I'm never gluing again. You can't undo that can you, a glued track?
 
FTG,
if you can export the vocal track, (if that's where the clicks are), and pop them in a drop box or somewhere - preferably as a wav file, (the better the file quality the better the result), I will manually declick it for you. I have a program that can do that sort of thing for vinyl and I've used it for the od we click, clack & clunk. I can run it on auto but would rather do it manually for a better result.
 
I don't have much to add to what's been said other than that I liked this one. Nice catchy melody and nice harmonies. It even sounded nice on my tinny laptop speakers. Good job!
 
rayc said:
FTG,
if you can export the vocal track, (if that's where the clicks are), and pop them in a drop box or somewhere - preferably as a wav file, (the better the file quality the better the result), I will manually declick it for you. I have a program that can do that sort of thing for vinyl and I've used it for the od we click, clack & clunk. I can run it on auto but would rather do it manually for a better result.
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That is so nice of you, thanks! I uploaded it for you in drop box. I rendered it at 44100, 24bit, I hope that's OK, if it's not let me know and I'll redo it at whatever you think is best. I feel a bit naked uploading just the vocal track. :D

https://www.dropbox.com/s/fes0prualw42tcy/you're not the sheriff vocal 01.wav

Thanks again Ray, really appreciate it.
 
jonny deep said:
I don't have much to add to what's been said other than that I liked this one. Nice catchy melody and nice harmonies. It even sounded nice on my tinny laptop speakers. Good job!
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No worries, I'm happy enough with just that for sure! Thanks a lot for taking the time to have a listen. :)
 
yeah this is really nice frits. t's like a sea shanty but i guess in your case a she shanty. oh stop me. but have you ever pondered the word sheriff? probably not, but those who are spell challenged use tricks to remember words. this one i particularly like because you can break it down to she riff, but again in your case, she riffs. go girl
 
Jeez... I look away for a week and you get another song up....

Guitar sounds nice - your mad producah skilz are coming along nicely...

And 2:38 - that's like an extended jam for you frits...:laughings:

Nice - as the others have said, you're getting better at this. Good song, nice words, expanding your options via the mellotron VSTi (which one are you using incidentally? I have a couple but I've lost one somewhere... will get this one if you tell me what it is).

Agree on the "vocal artificacts" ie. lip smacky noises.. they're usually edit-outable, depending upon how you sing, but perhaps just take a greater awareness of them into your next project - technique solves all usually (I can talk, I have exactly the same issue myself..).

Well done!

Next?
 
Manslick said:
yeah this is really nice frits. t's like a sea shanty but i guess in your case a she shanty. oh stop me. but have you ever pondered the word sheriff? probably not, but those who are spell challenged use tricks to remember words. this one i particularly like because you can break it down to she riff, but again in your case, she riffs. go girl
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I like it, she shanty, she riffs, very clever Mans lick. Uhh, OK that doesn't really work....
 
Armistice said:
Jeez... I look away for a week and you get another song up....

Guitar sounds nice - your mad producah skilz are coming along nicely...

And 2:38 - that's like an extended jam for you frits...:laughings:

Nice - as the others have said, you're getting better at this. Good song, nice words, expanding your options via the mellotron VSTi (which one are you using incidentally? I have a couple but I've lost one somewhere... will get this one if you tell me what it is).

Agree on the "vocal artificacts" ie. lip smacky noises.. they're usually edit-outable, depending upon how you sing, but perhaps just take a greater awareness of them into your next project - technique solves all usually (I can talk, I have exactly the same issue myself..).

Well done!

Next?
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I'm making up for 24 years of lost time. There is NO time to rest.:mad:

Gawd, the vocals. That's a never ending story. I've got a few things to try this time, I've been reading up about it some more. I might actually go back and re-do the vocals to some of my other songs, just for practice. I'll get it one day.

The mellotron I used is called Redtron.

2:38, epic right?! Bet you wondered if it would EVER end. It's like a musical equivalent of a Dostoyevsky book. :laughings:

Thanks for having a listen and the lovely compliments. Really appreciate it. I still can't believe you're only 10.
 
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It's a cute little melody with cutting lyrics, giving the impression that the guy in the lyrics is an overgrown baby. Where the harmony becomes a unison at the end of each phrase -- that is a nice device. I was waiting for a bit more of a lead break, a nice sarcastic emphasis on the theme of the lyrics.
 
Al618 said:
It's a cute little melody with cutting lyrics, giving the impression that the guy in the lyrics is an overgrown baby. Where the harmony becomes a unison at the end of each phrase -- that is a nice device. I was waiting for a bit more of a lead break, a nice sarcastic emphasis on the theme of the lyrics.
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Thanks heaps for checking it out and commenting Al. I find the juxtaposition of cute melodies & nihilistic lyrics very funny. I crack myself up when I'm writing them. :D

I get what you're saying on the lead break. I tried for a while to get that, but nothing came together. Basically I'm a pretty bad guitarist. I worked on the interludes in the hope that it would make up for it. But you're right, something equally sardonic to the lyrics would have been cool.
 
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