What D'You Think of That?

[Thekesslerboy]

Original upload:

Version with some backing vocal (ahem) tuning issues addressed:

Radio friendly 4 minute edit:

Inspired by meeting a great lady, so obviously I wrote a song about her! Could probably do with a bit of editing of the instrumental outro. Will probably get to it.

Is it a crime, you're on my mind?
It's a matter of fact
Love you more than I did before
What d'you think of that?

I'm a wreck when I kiss your neck
And your stunning back
Nothing less, you're a Goddess
What d'you think of that?

On my knees for your mysteries
Undiscovered map
When you smile, I gotta stay a while
What d'you think of that?

Intelligent plans, elegant hands
And you love your cat
I rejoice your heavenly voice
What's the point of that?

You get no peace from the thought police
Least from where I'm sat
You're no fake, you're wide awake
What d'you make of that?

A cheeky cow, and a sweetheart now
The world's turned to crap
Fact or fiction, contradiction
What d'you think of that?

 

[Eric V]

"on my knees for your mysteries"....wish I had thought of that line myself. Great lyrics, catchy tune.

 

[RFR]

Yes, very catchy, upbeat. Definitely should take the listener to a happy place….. at least it did for me.
Very much a 60s vibe

 

[johny_r]

In general, I like it. I think I'll even play it again just to enjoy it. The mix sounds a bit like the Beatles. The guitars (and the whole band) are maybe a bit too clean and polished. Plugin or recorded? The problem is the vocal. It's out of tune, sometimes a lot. You can forgive when it's the Beatles, but not here. The backing vocal is a real pain to listen to. I would re-record the vocals. Vocal comping shouldn't be a problem here. Good luck, I'm gonna have another listen now.

 

[Thekesslerboy]

In general, I like it. I think I'll even play it again just to enjoy it. The mix sounds a bit like the Beatles. The guitars (and the whole band) are maybe a bit too clean and polished. Plugin or recorded? The problem is the vocal. It's out of tune, sometimes a lot. You can forgive when it's the Beatles, but not here. The backing vocal is a real pain to listen to. I would re-record the vocals. Vocal comping shouldn't be a problem here. Good luck, I'm gonna have another listen now.

Ouch, that was kind of brutal! You're not wrong though. There were some backing vocals that bugged me, but I just left them. I have gone back in and fixed what was bugging me. Thanks for prompting me to do it.

It's a totally solo, at home effort. Just me, all guitars DI'd into the Boss BR-800, but all played, no computerised creations.

 

[johny_r]

Sorry for that, it was not very considerate, thought I believe that's why we're here (not to hear the pleasant things only). You did a great job, it's way better now. To my liking, I'd shorten the long ending with the vocal chords, it's a bit repetitive and, to be honest, the vocals there are the weaker part of this but that's just my view. I really appreciate cleaning up the backing vocal. Maybe just one thing, I would check the endings of the main and paralel/backing vocal (such as at 0:47). Sometimes they don't match. But that's just my obsession. Being a singer myself and working with a choir, I'm sensitive to this.
Great job. My wife just asked what's what I'm listening to, probably interested

 

[K-dub]

Nice jangly pop! There's a lot to like about this. It's appealing. Interesting treatment of the vocal delivery. Big and wide, but not sloppy. Tightly rightly done. The song, itself, is all verses. Might knock things up a notch if you could perhaps create a bridge and a chorus. Just a suggestion from change up perspective. I hear a few things regarding where I'd go with it, but it's your piece. It stands fine as is for what it is.

 

[Nola]

Really good! I'd personally be less literal and direct with the lyrics when singing about something like this, but that's a choice I suppose.

 

[dobro]

I liked the moaning in the middle a lot.

 

[Thekesslerboy]

Nice jangly pop! There's a lot to like about this. It's appealing. Interesting treatment of the vocal delivery. Big and wide, but not sloppy. Tightly rightly done. The song, itself, is all verses. Might knock things up a notch if you could perhaps create a bridge and a chorus. Just a suggestion from change up perspective. I hear a few things regarding where I'd go with it, but it's your piece. It stands fine as is for what it is.

Thank you, K-dub. Yes this one is the same throughout, it just seems to work for this one. Experimented with adding some other parts but they felt tacked on to me. Would be interested to hear a snippet of what you would add to it, if you wanted to throw a quick sample together.

 

[Thekesslerboy]

Really good! I'd personally be less literal and direct with the lyrics when singing about something like this, but that's a choice I suppose.

Thank you, Nola. Yes, I usually try to be universal with my lyrics, use lines that can be applied to anyone. I always, stupidly I suppose, try to think of the songs being covered by other artists, and want them to fit other singers. But this one is about a very specific lady and I had to put the fun descriptions of her in there. Cheers.

 

[Thekesslerboy]

I liked the moaning in the middle a lot.

Thank you, Dobro. I presume you mean the bit where the guitars drop out and I was messing about with just overdubbed vocals, bass and drums.

That was the experimental bit that some others have had qualms about. Just added a version that cuts it out, and removes some repeated instrumental parts. 5 minutes 40 is far too long for a dumb pop song, so this hastily tweaked version is cut down to a much more manageable 4 minutes.