Reposting with ****Vocals****

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Hevy,
Every time I try to stream one of your tunes, the damn thing quits on me! What I heard sounded good to me though. Once again, I'll have to try later...sorry dude.


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Boogie woogie!

Have you tried the vocals without the male backing vocals? the reason I ask is this: the doubled vocals at 2.08 are magic. The other doubled vocals need a change. I think maybe cut the male backing on the main vocals 2 dB, or just axe them completely. I wanna hear *her* voice. If your voice enhances it, that's all to the good, but right now it's competing. You're married, right? :D There's one more possibility here (there's *at least* one more possibility here LOL) - no male backup for the first part, and then introduce the male backup on the latter part of the song. I'd still cut the gain a bit.

That outro guitar is magnifico. The drummer's someone you can count on. Bass ditto. But I got a question: how come the waveform looks like a recently mowed lawn or a marine's haricut? How'd you do that? Not only that - aw c'mon - you coulda let up a bit, surely? :D

Really nice tune. Your stuff makes me wanna go out to the bar and start drinking about 8.00. Good stuff.
 
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http://www.artistcollaboration.com/~hevyd47ca/

dobro - You got my wife just BEAMING.
I am definitely gonna redo my part, maybe I'll get my wife to redo my part as well and see which works better:D
You made a new friend with that post buddy:)
 
dobro's advice

I took out my vocal altogether and gave in to my wife's part.
 
'You Keep Me'

Very tight.
Great bump and 'tuck' with the bass, i'm rollin'

Cute VOCALS !!!
Clean.

The vocals sound a little to 'seperated', maybe you can work a little reverb on them some delay moving for right to left.

Also your vocal is very hot on the mids, hers is a smoother, silkier voice, so ... well I'm just sayin', it's tough to mix your two voices. Maybe you can lead a bit more, hate to put her further back, but that may be a solution. Double her too, and then bring her upper mids out.

Thank you for mixing the vocals OUT FRONT !

ROFL !!! , this tune tickles me.
Tasteful guitar fill ...

Tasteful guitar solo with interesting 'rythmic' thing to kick that off. Unique blues guitar approach, unique style.

OH, yeah, cool harmony vocals ...

I think it's a little tongue in cheek and i really like this effort, a keeper.

I hear a string arrangment for this consisting of about 88 measures of 'rest', cuz' I'd be dancin' baby !!!

Thanks for posting.
 
Lead female vocals

Yes, I'm agreeing with dobro, she should lead at first, you should state the 'hooks' at some point though. In a relationship, both are 'keep each other' ... right .

Maybe you could develop the male part to ask her ...

maybe a little motif like :

Do I keep, ya ? ... honey , well ... do I keep ya ... right.
 
studioviols HEY!!!

I REALLY appreciate the almost collaborative advice i am getting out of this post!!!
You've given me much food for thought.
I knew this song had something right from the start, I don't think it's there yet, but the help and advice I am getting here I can see some possible paths to take.
A call and response type vocal approach sounds like the way to get the story across to me.

Thanks again for the kind words and SAGE advice sv:)

Dan
 
Call and Response

Yeah, that's the term I was looking for , 'Call and Response' , definitely a time honored songwriting method.

Never to old to learn the blues.
 
After reading it was a husband and wife team, I wasn't expecting a rocker. Nice feel. Agree that the drummer is a keeper. Great timing and he doesn't overdo it.

The bed of this song is very good. I didn't get to hear it with both the male and female vocals, but I hear intonation problems with the female lead. Also, the style doesn't seem to suit her very well.

This has a very "live" feel to it. Nice stuff. Sorry, but the vocals are the weak point. Was this done in a studio or recorded live?
 
dachay2tnr,

Well, you sure know how to rain on a parade! To be truthful, it was done in our living room. I wasn't quite finished and was just wanting to show Dan what I had started. I didn't expect him to post it. He informed me that he posts EVERYTHING! He also just doubled my vocals and put a weird effect on them. We are getting new monitors in a day or two and should be able to mix different. ~sigh~

To everyone else...THANKS! :) Most here know I'm new to singing especially solos although I've done quite a few harmonies now. :)
 
Prozkgrl said:
dachay2tnr,

Well, you sure know how to rain on a parade!
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We all come here to learn. If I do nothing but throw flowers at you, you won't learn much from that.

There are going to be a lot of comments that you won't agree with. You have to start by not taking it personal. Then determine whether the comment has merit, and whether you agree with it or not.

I have had many a negative comment on my stuff that I said, thank you and left the mix exactly as it was. Then I have had other negative comments that first made me angry, but unfortunately were right on the money. Those are the ones you grow from.

Ultimately you only have to please yourself. And you have to have enough confidence in yourself to either accept or reject criticism as you see fit. All we are all doing is expressing opinions. And remember, almost every record company rejected the Beatles when they were getting started. :D Shows you what opinions are worth.
 
Cool vibe,guitars are great as always.

I think the doubled/effects on the voice need to go.
Is that a chorus on it?

You sound like you have a good voice,just drop the effects and I think you have a winner.

Pete
 
dachay2tnr,

I can take the comments on mix too loud, double tracks muddy, harmony is too different etc. what I can't handle is hearing "vocals too weak". Nobody likes to hear they suck, especially when just starting out. Some people either like my singing or they don't, I can't change that. :)
 
the bottom end of the mix is boomy and lacks tightness and punch.

nice music...can't argue with that.

the vocals...well...kinda sound like I grabbed my girlfriend and said..."hey...here sing this".(I know...because I've done that!!) The intonation is off, and I feel this style of singing is a mismatch for this kind of boogie music. But whether it is a mismatch, is a personal preference kinda thing...has nothing to do with what is "good" or "right" or "wrong". But the singing gets off pitch. It does have a character that I can see that potentially a fair amount of people will like it....because of that factor. People love Bob Dylan and Neil Young, but as singers, I think they suck. As writers ...that's a completely different story. As musicians...another story again.

so...... without trying to make it rain harder, I'd say keep at it...tighten up the mix, bring it to the front, get a good monitor setup going when you're tracking the vocals, and keep on posting.
 
Prozkgrl said:
dachay2tnr,

I can take the comments on mix too loud, double tracks muddy, harmony is too different etc. what I can't handle is hearing "vocals too weak". Nobody likes to hear they suck, especially when just starting out. Some people either like my singing or they don't, I can't change that. :)
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Actually what I said was:
I hear intonation problems with the female lead. Also, the style doesn't seem to suit her very well.
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Basically the same thing mixmkr is saying in his post above.

However, intonation is something that is fixable with practice. It doesn't mean you suck. It means you are singing off key. You are correct, some people will like your singing and some won't, but either way you should still want to work to make it better.

As for the "style" of your voice, well that has to do with song selection. I just didn't think your voice suited this particular type of material. Once again it has nothing to do with sucking. I don't really want to hear Sinatra covering James Brown material either (although I guess we don't have to worry about Frank covering anybody these days :) ).
 
Mix sounds pretty great, the playing is steller but I want to comment on the vocal.

I think she sings it OK but I think a few things will improve the entire song as a whole.

1) I'm not sure if this is a remake or a original but this vocal line has to be broken up, sing it diffently at least 3 or 4 times. It just has that main melody line that goes down, maybe start it down and go up every now and then. It just becomes very painful to listen to after awhile. Sort of like a kid going "nah-nah-nah-nah-NAH-nah" over and over :)

2) A different effect on the vocal, touched on already.

3) I never heard the first post but I think it would be cool to keep this as a guy/girl duet, as the vocals sort of warrant it, don't they?
 
There was some pretty good guitar playing in this, I like the overall feel of the tune (music-wise), it has a nice swing.
As was mentioned before, I think the vocal performance was lackluster. But it sounds like it could be pretty good with maybe a little more confidence. It reminded me of somebody who maybe just picked up a guitar. The notes are there (more or less) but there's no real expression or feeling. I think maybe if you just belt it out a little and don't hold back so much, you might capture something pretty decent. That's my biggest problem with singing. No confidence.

PS. this is supposed to be constructive criticism so don't flip out on me.
 
mbuster!

I think there might be hope for us after all.
We got off to a bad start when we first posted here, so it's nice for us to be able to start to talk. I believe the last reply I got from you was one word:D

Anyway, thanks for weighing in.
This is a work in progress that I just want to FINISH:)
Tommorrow night is studio singing all night!!!!
 
nice guitar tones and playing! cool ditty.. It's quite cool to be able to do this with your wife..

I agree with the previous comments regarding the vocals.. Whenever I see someone get real defense about criticism, it makes me want to be even more blunt.. The vocals have intonation problems right now.. period. It's not a matter of liking the voice or not because intonation problems are universal.. They can and will get better.. They are the weakest part of this right now.. very cool overall though! I would have liked to hear the duet version..
 
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