first full song recorded... kinda metal , kinda electronic - please criticize

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note: style isnt important , it just wont be for everyone so i put it in the title instead of wasting peoples time who wouldnt think about listening to this kind of stuff

this is my first full song recorded, and my first time using my computer to record (sonar , delta66 omni studio box)

i understand its not "radio" quality , and i understand i wont get those kind of results from my current setup

so please criticize be as mean as you want , im really just looking
for help on improving my ability... any thoughts given would be
appreciated....
thanks alot
gary

the songs called dissolve (the only one on there)
http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/10/1313/singles.shtml
 
gbav,

Just listened.
IThe vox track is there but is muddled. I couldn't make out a word. Maybe try some more aggressive panning with the electric git on one side and the synth on the other thus, opening up the middle for the vox. I don't have a great ear but, you might wanna try compressing the vox track as well to get it to sit better.

I liked the use of the delay on the vox track around 1:40. Cool effect!

I know it's not much of a critique but, I hope that helps some.

Peace.
Theron.
 
gbav,

I liked your production,cool theme,really spacy.

I'm no expert,but from what I can hear through my computer speakers I would suggest,
Lower the snare(s),raise the synth,lower or compress the lead vocals.

Hope this helps,
Pete
 
for a first computer attemt...wow! I like the guitar sound. the vocals are a tad out of tune ..especially in the beginning. In this type of music, I don't thing vocal *intelligebility* is really required. Gets pretty cool at 3:10. I'd take more of this attitude with your music. the vocals are not understandable, but serve more as an effect......hey..the line is buzzzy!!
 
hey wow thanks for responding... i didnt think anyone was gonna
respond...

i deff agree with the vocals, i dont sing i do everything else but i
have a friend sing for me , and i know its the production but sometimes you just cant understand this guy, he just likes it that way i suppose... besides the fact that his lyrics are usually a little "freaky" and poetic and sometimes what you think you didnt here is what you heard lol

i hope to criticize some of your guys stuff in the future , even though i hardly criticize considering im so new to this it feels odd to try and tell people what i think they should do when i barely know what im doing myself..

seriously your guys help is gonna make a world of difference , its always cool to see what others here have to offer.. i never would of thought of panning more aggressive to open the vocals or turning the snare down , you guys have been a huge help...

thanks alot
gary
 
While I think the vocal effect itself works with the song, the vocals are WAY out of tune -- even if you were going for a bit of dissonance -- it's too far off the mark....

The bed tracks seem ok - maybe a little bass shy... Overall sound is a bit mid-scooped fro my tastes....

Keep at it!

Bruce
 
i said before i really do agree with the vocals i wonder if subconciously i was trying to hide them a lil when mixing lol

with the scooped mids , this is gonna seem like a dumb question , but is this something i would do to the overall song or just go through track by track and slightly eq where is needed?

im still learning thanks for the replys...ill try and post another mp3 when i get things fixed

thanks alot
gary
 
the singing is alright, but definitely takes away from the track rather than adding to it...i genuinely like the music a good deal, though it sounds really tone heavy (lacking upper mids and highs) with this type of music, the singer has to go balls out...scream and be serious about what is being sung..we won't believe it, if he doesn't believe it..the acoustic guitar that comes in is bad ass, especially with the flutey feedback...great first attempt...the song would fly if the singer used more force...i didn't have problem with him being off key..like a previous person said, it suits the style...again, good job..keep it coming...if you have time. come check me out at


http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/2/1265/singles.shtml

any feedback appreciated..take care
 
Use your pan knobs more often. The whole song almost sounds mono. Since your doing lots of weird noise clips use those to give you more stereo space. Your sound is very manufactured sounding so you can go a little more nuts with the stereo spread.

Cool song and some cool sounds. I really like the quiter part at the end.
 
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