"WITH OUT YOU"- CHORUS (NEW)

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SEREOUS

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Hey let me know what u think of this Chorus - This is my newest work
I have come up with. The song is gonna be called "With Out You"

Chorus X2

"With out YOU" -I wouldnt wanna Livveee
"With out-YOU" -I couldnt ev-enn Brea-thhe
"With out YOU" -no chance this life wouldn't-bee
"With out-YOU" -the life that it (this part is slow) -->
is tooo- ME-E-E-E


Well lets see what people think. With the melody i have for it Its really
cathchy and sounds pretty good. I will record it and post it soon.
(all feedback welcome) Thank You SEREOUS
 
SEREOUS said:
Hey let me know what u think of this Chorus - This is my newest work
I have come up with. The song is gonna be called "With Out You"

Chorus X2

"With out YOU" -I wouldnt wanna Livveee
"With out-YOU" -I couldnt ev-enn Brea-thhe
"With out YOU" -no chance this life wouldn't-bee
"With out-YOU" -the life that it (this part is slow) -->
is tooo- ME-E-E-E


Well lets see what people think. With the melody i have for it Its really
cathchy and sounds pretty good. I will record it and post it soon.
(all feedback welcome) Thank You SEREOUS
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I'd have to actually hear it, but it sounds like you're off to a good start.
 
Good chorus - like you said before - repeat the hook as often as possible to emphasize it. Good job....Looking forward to hearing the audio track.....

:) :D :) :D
 
SEREOUS said:
Hey let me know what u think of this Chorus - This is my newest work
I have come up with. The song is gonna be called "With Out You"

Chorus X2

"With out YOU" -I wouldnt wanna Livveee
"With out-YOU" -I couldnt ev-enn Brea-thhe
"With out YOU" -no chance this life wouldn't-bee
"With out-YOU" -the life that it (this part is slow) -->
is tooo- ME-E-E-E


Well lets see what people think. With the melody i have for it Its really
cathchy and sounds pretty good. I will record it and post it soon.
(all feedback welcome) Thank You SEREOUS
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Dude, the first two lines sounds really similar to a U2 song just reading it. :o
 
Anymore feedback.. Thanks for all the post so far I appreciate it.
Hmm about the U2 song- I have never heard any of U2's songs. I will check in to that though and make sure im not infringing.
If I do post the audio it will only be vocals, i dont have music to it yet.
I cant play the guitar or any instrument lol - so i usually get people to fill
that in for me.

Thanks SEREOUS

Idol how did that Everything I am song turn out? audio?
 
SEREOUS said:
Idol how did that Everything I am song turn out? audio?
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No music for "Everything I Am" yet. I'm working on another tune right now, which is taking a bit longer to gel...but hopefully I'll get to it soon...thanks for asking...
 
Okay okay - here is the quick and i mean QuiCK - audio version of the chorus. Now Its not mixed or any of that - n i dont mess with that stuff. I sung it even though i cant sing at all lol. Listening to it i hear some pianos, guitar, drums, and other instruments that would sound good in it.
I also hear a girl singing it, i think thats what would sound best, During the
repeat of With Out You- im gonna add a vocal varience every other time it is said.

heres the links, lets get some feedback
http://www.soundclick.com/sereous
 
Sounds good SEREOUS, catchy and original.....I'll keep watching for any updates you post...this is a good start....

:) :D :) :D
 
I like your vox on this. They go well with the catchy chorus. Now get back to work and finish it. :D
 
up-fiddler said:
I like your vox on this. They go well with the catchy chorus. Now get back to work and finish it. :D
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ido1957 said:
Sounds good SEREOUS, catchy and original.....I'll keep watching for any updates you post...this is a good start....

:) :D :) :D
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Wow i must say im very pleased, Especially from fiddler who likes the vox haha. Thanks alot for the feedback from both of you, im glad you like it so far. Now i just need the beat - or instrumental and then it will be ready. If anyone cares to do a guitar riff to it that would be awsome. IM glad you people like my praise music . DID HE SAY PRAISE MUSIC.. yes lol I wrote it in such a way it could fall radio-commercial or praise. If i got a girl to sing the vocals and made it about her past, alot of you wouldnt be able to tell she was singing about god. Alot of songs are out their like that - they sorta slip in the christian message.

*waits for people to say they dont like it because its a praise song- or is it ? hahaha

peace SEREOUS
 
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