well, there's a few things about the sound I'll coment on.
The rythem guitar, a little crunchy, low in the mix. it was fighting the bass, IMHO.
The lead guitar, sounds like digital, thin distortion. kind of fuzzy sounding. not that it's a bad tone, just didn't fit the part well. The harmonized guitar tones worked for me though. reverbs a bit heavy in some parts. the shred style usually has many different tones fading in and out throughout the mix. one tone doesn't fit all the parts. Yngwie flips his tone switch (on the guitar) many times while playing, and records several tracks while recording.
The bass, the higher notes sound a little whiny, and the lower notes are booming. (is that a real bass?) try some compression, I havn't found a way to fix the whiny sound after recording though. you may need to re-record the bass.
The mixing clinic, a part of this board where you can get better advice than I can give.
oh, not bad playing either. I like the song, just not the mix.
