Feedback on my song

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Keep your ass to yourself:laughings:

LMFAO!!! You bitter old washed up musicians who never made it are quite hilarious. It's pretty pathetic when you need an Internet forum to legitimize your sad existence. Listen Chik, I'm not the one to step to with that bullshit! You need to seek out some other dim witted idiot with an IQ less than yours to intimidate! I asked for constructive criticism, not an eSpat with an obviously ignorant old asshole who can't differentiate sarcasm from buffoonery! Step off!
 
Keep your ass to yourself:laughings:

LMFAO!!! You bitter old washed up musicians who never made it are quite hilarious. It's pretty pathetic when you need an Internet forum to legitimize your sad existence. Listen Chik, I'm not the one to step to with that bullshit! You need to seek out some other dim witted idiot with an IQ less than yours to intimidate! I asked for constructive criticism, not an eSpat with an obviously ignorant old asshole who can't differentiate sarcasm from buffoonery! Step off!

Right, I agree. Keep the comments to constructive.

Thanks,
 
LMFAO!!! You bitter old washed up musicians who never made it are quite hilarious. It's pretty pathetic when you need an Internet forum to legitimize your sad existence. Listen Chik, I'm not the one to step to with that bullshit! You need to seek out some other dim witted idiot with an IQ less than yours to intimidate! I asked for constructive criticism, not an eSpat with an obviously ignorant old asshole who can't differentiate sarcasm from buffoonery! Step off!

Chili is right I behaved improperly. But it is funny what you said particularly the line Its pretty pathetic when you need an internet forum to legitimize your sad existence. HELLO!!!:laughings::laughings::laughings:
 
OK...

Distortion. It's coming from the fact that you have the gain on the mic up too high, and it sounds like you are eating the mic. Works on stage, but in a recording, put the mic on a mic stand, put a pop filter on it about 6 to 8 inches from the mic, and stand about 6 to 8 inches away from that.

I won't give you any feedback on the performance, but I can tell you that the first rapper did take the vibe out of the track.
 
I won't give you any feedback on the performance, but I can tell you that the first rapper did take the vibe out of the track.

Thanks for the feedback. Do you mind elaborating a little on the point you made above? Thanks
 
The mix is ... not good. That said, the main? rapper is't bad, just needs to hone his skills a bit. He/you have potential. The beat is VERY stripped/raw and the rhyming sounds off to me, though that could just be me. Not sure if that is the aim. While raw beats are great IMO, it's unbalanced. The bass is too pronounced, the open hat becomes overbearing every time it hits, which becomes distracting. The vocals are obviously untreated: compression, pop filter? Not trying to insult/verbally assault you. Trying to constructively criticize. The song structure, idea, and theme isn't bad, it's the mix that hurts this track and the unhoned vocal skills...I'd go back and try it again and see how it turns out. You may approach it different and pick up on the weaknesses. Also listened to "Keep Pushin" and figured I'd throw a critique on it as well. Again the idea and theme, and structure is decent. I'd advise investing in a decent mic, as your voice is your main instrument in hip hop. A decent compressor/pre amp maybe an at 4040(mic) and a Eureka(pre-amp). The 808 on this track needs to be tamed as it is blasting the levels. Some basic panning, eq, normalization and compression could help this track alot.
After listening to "stairwells and porches" I hear a consistant unbalance of the vocals to intruments and too high bass levels. While I understand you want the bass to be thumpin' as it is hip hop. The best way to do it is through good mixing as opposed to high volumes. Just focus a bit more on your mixing each track and you'll progress.
 
Thanks DD. Nice critique! I havent revealed much about this material other than to say it was recorded a while ago. But since you gave one of the more in depth reviews, I will tell you the that this was recorded back in 2003. Just a rundown on the basic equipment used. A Zoom 1044MRS digital recorder (crap), Shure sm57 (which was ok but not great), Boss DR-202 drum machine, Boss SP-202 sampler and lots of marijuana (lol, which probably explains some of the shortcomings.) No pre-amp or outboard gear to help my mix. I left music alone for almost 7 years (had to dedicate more time to my family) but now I'm back at again and I figured I would try to determine what I did wrong back then before I go at it again. Obviously I've upgraded my gear and added the obvious necessities, plus I have read and studied alot. So now I just have to take the feedback I have gotten here and try to improve. Thanks for your input!
 
Thanks for the feedback. Do you mind elaborating a little on the point you made above? Thanks
I dunno, seemed a lot like that first rap was still searching for what he was trying to say and how to say it, so the rap is a bit disjointed from the rest of the song. And it's very raw in comparison to the backing vocals which, by the way, have way too much reverb on them and are distant in the mix.

I guess it just seems like the beginning wasn't written out and didn't flow like the rest of the song.

Was that clear enough? I don't know how else to put it...
 
Yeah I understand where you're coming from now. Thanks for the feedback! Your comments are appreciated!
 
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