Critique plz :)

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Hi everybody, this song isn't quite finished yet but i would like to get your feedback on a few things.

living in a small apartment using my electric guitar isn't really an option and using an amp sim on an acoustic can be difficult, plz tell me how i did on the distorted parts and if anybody has tips on getting a better sound that would be great.

i'm also looking for some feedback on the length of the chorus. does it draw on too long? currently this song doesn't rly have an ending (well it ends, but...) any ideas there would be rly appreciated too. thx for your time.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7249875
 
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Hmmm, the link works for me when i click on it. maybe the site was down?
 
No opinions on this song? Don't be afraid to hurt my feelings...
 
Sometimes it can take awhile for someone to chime in. I would give it a shot, but I am on a government pc and streaming and downloading from this site are blocked for some reason.

If you can put it here: http://www.lightning.com

I can give it a listen.

EDIT: I don't understand why it is blocked. I have an account there and just accessed it... :confused:
 
Rokket said:
Sometimes it can take awhile for someone to chime in. I would give it a shot, but I am on a government pc and streaming and downloading from this site are blocked for some reason.

If you can put it here: http://www.lightning.com

I can give it a listen.

EDIT: I don't understand why it is blocked. I have an account there and just accessed it... :confused:
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well what the hell? i previously posted a song from soundclick and it worked fine. i wonder what i'm doing wrong.



maybe this one will work?
 
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Hi string, I got it to work for me. :cool:

Pretty cool tune, with a minimalist approach. Guitars sounds real good, but maybe a touch too loud. Vocals also good, but buried by the guitars. Guitars down a bit should solve that. Drums could be improved, in my opinion. No problem with the playing, but the kick and snare sounds are a bit harsh to my ears.

A little tweaking is all you need.

Thanks for sharing.

Chris
 
bigmahon said:
Hi string, I got it to work for me. :cool:

Pretty cool tune, with a minimalist approach. Guitars sounds real good, but maybe a touch too loud. Vocals also good, but buried by the guitars. Guitars down a bit should solve that. Drums could be improved, in my opinion. No problem with the playing, but the kick and snare sounds are a bit harsh to my ears.

A little tweaking is all you need.

Thanks for sharing.

Chris
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ty for listening bigmahon.
 
Hi StringTheory...

First let me say I'm new to forum, but not entirely new to recording/mixing/mastering.

The song is very Beatles-esque and I love the simplicity.

My comments would be the individual quality of each instrument is really great. Guitars sounds clear and crisp. The vocals have a nice timbre to them. The drums don't seem to stand out and I usually prefer to hear the kick and snare pretty nice and loud. Now as a whole, the vocals don't seem to sit in the mix very well.

Since the vocals aren't covering such a wide range, you could just carve out a nice spot in the guitar's eq for the vocals to sit in. This way you can have the guitars as loud as you have them now and still hear the vocals clearly. This will also help integrate the mix.

The song is really good. I've listened to it a few times and its got a nice flow to it.
 
tminus3 said:
Hi StringTheory...

First let me say I'm new to forum, but not entirely new to recording/mixing/mastering.

The song is very Beatles-esque and I love the simplicity.

My comments would be the individual quality of each instrument is really great. Guitars sounds clear and crisp. The vocals have a nice timbre to them. The drums don't seem to stand out and I usually prefer to hear the kick and snare pretty nice and loud. Now as a whole, the vocals don't seem to sit in the mix very well.

Since the vocals aren't covering such a wide range, you could just carve out a nice spot in the guitar's eq for the vocals to sit in. This way you can have the guitars as loud as you have them now and still hear the vocals clearly. This will also help integrate the mix.

The song is really good. I've listened to it a few times and its got a nice flow to it.
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ty tminus3. im excited to try the vocal mixing technique you described. i'm a mixing noob so i rly appreciate your insight, thx for listening :)
 
it's an interesting mix. things are panned differently from whats the norm. i don't think it really helps though. i like the kick drum sound, really low snare though. for my taste, maybe cuz im boring, but i like the vocals in the center and guitars on either side of the panning spectrum. i would pan the rhythm guitar harder to the left and disburse the other guitars on the right. it sounds kinda mushed together. i like the song though. tone wise everything sounds ok. maybe cut out some low frequencies off the rhythm and add some bass guitar. the distorted guitar didn't really stand out to me, but i don't think it's vital to the song. also i think there was a portion of the song where i think i heard some clipping.
 
Where is the bass guitar in all of this? I can't hear it at all.


I agree this is very Beatles-like, but there is a serious lack of Paul McCartney! The drums lack clarity, and it is probably due to a lack of compression on them. The guitars drown out the vocals.
 
Rokket said:
Where is the bass guitar in all of this? I can't hear it at all.


I agree this is very Beatles-like, but there is a serious lack of Paul McCartney! The drums lack clarity, and it is probably due to a lack of compression on them. The guitars drown out the vocals.
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unfortunately i don't have or play a bass :P thx for listening.
 
Easy to listen!

Nice flow.

I would just turn up the snare a bit.
 
my thoughts:

I am not a fan of panning the leads. It can be an interesting effect at times, but I don't think it is good sound as a rule.

Your chorus is not distinctive from the rest of the track. It is clear you are taking the minimalist approach, and that is fine, but I would think about using different textures for your sounds there, and maybe more dynamics. Also, it is quite melodic. There are many things you could do with simple melodies from another guitar.

Everything sounds well constructed, and the voice and the guitar are a good match. I like your track, overall.
 
Hi Stringtheory - I like this song. It has a good feel to it. For my ears, the mix seemed fine. It does need an ending, as you said. For me, although I really liked the melody of the song, it seemed a teensy tiny bit too repetitive for my taste. I would have liked it to go somewhere more defined, if that makes sense. Perhaps a bigger differentiation between the verses and chorus. It almost flowed a little too easy in that regard. But I think it's great. Thanks for sharing.

Jen
 
anselm said:
my thoughts:

I am not a fan of panning the leads. It can be an interesting effect at times, but I don't think it is good sound as a rule.

Your chorus is not distinctive from the rest of the track. It is clear you are taking the minimalist approach, and that is fine, but I would think about using different textures for your sounds there, and maybe more dynamics. Also, it is quite melodic. There are many things you could do with simple melodies from another guitar.

Everything sounds well constructed, and the voice and the guitar are a good match. I like your track, overall.
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ty, i'll try to work on some of the things you mentioned, but my mixing skills are very weak! :/ thx for listening.
 
lga5824 said:
Hi Stringtheory - I like this song. It has a good feel to it. For my ears, the mix seemed fine. It does need an ending, as you said. For me, although I really liked the melody of the song, it seemed a teensy tiny bit too repetitive for my taste. I would have liked it to go somewhere more defined, if that makes sense. Perhaps a bigger differentiation between the verses and chorus. It almost flowed a little too easy in that regard. But I think it's great. Thanks for sharing.

Jen
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thx for listening Jen! i agree the chorus does need a little more separation or "UMPHFFF" as it were. i think a backing vocal w/ some sort of effect could do nicely or maybe just a melodic bass track could help fill it out, and help change up the track a bit.
 
the vocal sticks out to much they don't sit well in the mix. They could use some reverb, they clipped twice in the song. I dig the minalistic aproach. I like the guitars. I love the kick drum. I'd like to hear more snare drum and I'd like to hear a standardish panning arangment. It helps with getting things to sit well in the mix. and it could use a bass guitar part and diffrent aproach to background vocals. I'd add more in the verses and less on the chourus but thats just me. I'd add background vocals to the second she dont mind and as long as i treat her right that feels like the hook of the song to me cool tune :)
 
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