Rockin Jam Going Nowhere

[soundchaser59]

BROTHERS KEEPER

This so-called "song" is really just a jam session that ended up having some words slapped together and a quick synth sax thing. The working title is "Brother's Keeper" but it could be "Going Nowhere" because this "song" doesn't go anywhere. It just repeats over and over. Heck, it started out as just a riff I used to set the knobs on my guitar amp. : ;D

But maybe that's ok, because the words are about drug addiction. So maybe the form of the song fits the subject matter? ;D Anyway, it was fun, regardless..... I like the clav.

real guitar and bass, rough vox, sonik synth 2, ez drummer, synth sax.


The road to nowhere lines up with temptations
Shadows selling potions smoke and oil
Get in line be the first one to the party
Never know how high would be the toll

High at night I’m blinded to the danger
Middle of the road is just a narrow bridge
Voice inside reminds me of my wager
A losing hand I always played again

One more mile to go I’m running closer
One more game to play gotta count me in
Steppin on the gas gotta get there fast I’m slowly
Catchin up I don’t know when it will end

Not afraid to die my brothers keeper
The only one fooling you has lied to me
The way we live belongs to resurrection
The Father gave His Son to set us free

Gotta let it go give the glory to the maker
Gotta give it all away take it down to none
Fall away from the chain nothing worthy can we bring
Let my life testify to the One.

 

[guitar zero]

Wish my warm-up sessions sounded like that. That was great. Only one nit to pick. I didn't really care for the rapid panning of the guitar solo. The solo is good enough to stand on its own without it. Nice playin'!

 

[Greg_L]

That's some fancy funky guitar playing there. Guitars sound great. The drums are kind of dark. They could be snappier. The vocals...meh. Kind of bland. But whatever.

 

[soundchaser59]

I suppose this coulda been written by Phil Collins.......none of his "songs" have choruses either!

I didn't intentionally make the lead guitar pan, I think that was part of the plugin preset and I didn't notice it. Were you listening on headphones? It would be more pronounced in phones......

Nobody hates the sound of my voice more than I do, but singers aren't exactly lining up at my door......

Thanks for listening!

 

[Xeries]

I really like the jazzy movement of the song and the great guitar playing, SC. Really impressive. The lyrics, although "slapped together" are, for the most part, very good. I would change a few of the lines to roll off the tongue a little easier. You seemed to fight with the pace to deliver them in a few places.

The lyrical content is timeless and very effective given the high energy of the song. You feel that the singer is caught up in some kind of fast track lifestyle that is destined to destroy him in the end.

That's not an easy thing to do and you did it.

I don't like your voice for this song. It's not that I don't like your voice, but I don't think it's right for this song. There is that Phil Collins lack of range as well as the straining at what appears to be the limit of your high notes.

I think I could sing it better, and I know that Cam (Derek Cameron) could and this type of thing is right up his alley.

I liked the sax patch you used and you did it effectively so it sounds pretty authentic.

With some lyric tweaks (I would be glad to help) and a different singer, I think you have a real winner here. I think I've heard every song you've posted here and at SA over the last couple years and this really stands out. Have you considered having Em give the vocals a shot? Women get addicted also.

I hope this review is helpful to you and wish you a lot of luck with this song.

Wig

 

[soundchaser59]

Thanks Guitar, Greg, and Wig, grateful for the time and the listen.

I know what you mean about women getting hooked too, but I think the person singing this would have to have the actual experience under their belt to put the most emotion into it. Em is good, but definitely not gritty or (pardon the expression) ballsy enough to sing this. I tried to get Grace Slick but she was busy, as were the Wilson sisters...... I never have liked my own voice, but if I can hit close enough to the pitches to get a palatable rough cut, I'm in. All I have to do is remember all the classic rock "singers" who screamed and growled and graveled (or is it groveled?) their way thru the albums and I figure maybe I'm not so bad. If Dylan and Jagger and Cocker and Stewart and Morrison (my all time least favorite) can do it........ then I'll keep trying.

I may revisit this thing some day, it could use a tweaking. You got the point right away....... fast track to nowhere, outa control, under the dubious guidance of the inertia of dead weight, etc......

 

[Xeries]

Thanks Guitar, Greg, and Wig, grateful for the time and the listen.

I know what you mean about women getting hooked too, but I think the person singing this would have to have the actual experience under their belt to put the most emotion into it. Em is good, but definitely not gritty or (pardon the expression) ballsy enough to sing this. I tried to get Grace Slick but she was busy, as were the Wilson sisters...... I never have liked my own voice, but if I can hit close enough to the pitches to get a palatable rough cut, I'm in. All I have to do is remember all the classic rock "singers" who screamed and growled and graveled (or is it groveled?) their way thru the albums and I figure maybe I'm not so bad. If Dylan and Jagger and Cocker and Stewart and Morrison (my all time least favorite) can do it........ then I'll keep trying.

I may revisit this thing some day, it could use a tweaking. You got the point right away....... fast track to nowhere, outa control, under the dubious guidance of the inertia of dead weight, etc......

That's a hoot, SC, Grace was busy.

Maybe if you just tweak the lyrics a little, your voice will be right for it.

I sent you a PM. Good luck with the song. It deserves a little fine tuning.

Wig