New Song!

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Is my song any good?

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Che Frone said:
A) DO NOT be so self-depricating in your lyrics, honestly it makes everyone hate you
B) dude i see where where you are coming from. if you really love the music then keep trying as hard as you can
C) say something. that's all. something.
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I should have posted at the beginning, stating that the lyrics were written due to a previous thread, it was a 'joke' at myself. I was merely posting it for laughs, but I wanted input as well.

I'm not going to stop, I'm going to try harder than before, and keep going. I don't plan to post another song, until I know for sure, it's worthy of listening.. I need to take a day and just work on my lyrics, spice them up, and make 'em work.

Thanks for the advice. :)
 
haha man this song is VERY self-deprecating. it's totally fucking EMO!!


but seriously dude, you're better than this. the beats that you made that i heard were good. this song needs some talk about cutting yourself or something :rolleyes: . but anyway, i think it's time for you to get a microphone that doesn't distort as much. or maybe back off from the mic a few more inches. it sounds like in some parts you are moving toward and away from the mic, so the sound is a little inconsistent. but to me it doesn't even sound like a $70 microphone. how close are you while recording? what type of mic is it exactly? it just sounds really distorted to me.

keep working at it though, it's all worth it.
 
and for the beat... it would sound a whole lot better with more layers to the snare. it's just too plain and dry. maybe layer a tight snare over it, or a clap or something and it would be a huge improvement. just a thought, hehe...
 
Wasnt feelin it at all. Before I go on, Im going to give you honest feedback. I believe being truthful in criticizing is very important.

Beat:

Sounds to generic. You should change it up and speed up the tempo alittle bit. Add more intruments,etc.

Vocals:

Im not sure how you go by creating your lyrics, but you definetly need to rehearse them better, and come with a much more natural delivery. I know you have it in you to get better but you got along ways to go. When spittin on the mic, you might want to stand atleast 1 foot away because I can here some serious clipping, and pumping noises. You also need a wind screen. And whenever you do a song make sure you know your rhymes in your head without having to depend on a piece of paper for every rhyme you do.

It was an ok song. Keep practicin and you will get better. :)
 
zed32 said:
haha man this song is VERY self-deprecating. it's totally fucking EMO!!


but seriously dude, you're better than this. the beats that you made that i heard were good. this song needs some talk about cutting yourself or something :rolleyes: . but anyway, i think it's time for you to get a microphone that doesn't distort as much. or maybe back off from the mic a few more inches. it sounds like in some parts you are moving toward and away from the mic, so the sound is a little inconsistent. but to me it doesn't even sound like a $70 microphone. how close are you while recording? what type of mic is it exactly? it just sounds really distorted to me.

keep working at it though, it's all worth it.
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Well, it's a USB Condenser Microphone (Samson C10U) to be exact. It really is a wonderful mic, I just am way too close to it, I need to get use to the feel of it, and the volume and it'll sound alot better, I promise. I'll work up a song for you, to show you, i do have talent, and I will get better. but it won't be up for a month or so, I'm going to really work at it..

thanks for the input, alot.
 
qb2k5 said:
Wasnt feelin it at all. Before I go on, Im going to give you honest feedback. I believe being truthful in criticizing is very important.

Beat:

Sounds to generic. You should change it up and speed up the tempo alittle bit. Add more intruments,etc.

Vocals:

Im not sure how you go by creating your lyrics, but you definetly need to rehearse them better, and come with a much more natural delivery. I know you have it in you to get better but you got along ways to go. When spittin on the mic, you might want to stand atleast 1 foot away because I can here some serious clipping, and pumping noises. You also need a wind screen. And whenever you do a song make sure you know your rhymes in your head without having to depend on a piece of paper for every rhyme you do.

It was an ok song. Keep practicin and you will get better. :)
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Well, the beat wasn't mine, so I can't change it a whole lot since I don't have the original file. But, since I'm getting more into making beats, I'm having an easier time getting my OWN beats, for my OWN songs. So, that'll change and I'll be able to edit some. (Check my MySpace and hit the song ILL feat. Noddy), that's my latest beat. So I'm producin more as we speak, actually.. Listening to a tight instrumental i worked up out of bordum, couldn't be a hiphop instrumental, though. It's more for listening, but I bet I could pull a tight bassline into it, lower the highs and make it a nice hiphop instrumental never the less.

We'll see.

Also, I'm way too close to the mic, and i need to rehearse my lyrics more, memorize them, before I spit it, because that's my 'main' issue.

Thanks for the comments / advice. I'll keep at it, I'll get better. You'll see. :)

:D
 
yeah man you need to take a whole step back from the mic, keep around 12" away, like qb25k said. if it's not loud enough, you need more gain, don't just get closer and closer to the mic.

a friend of mine has done some recordings using that C10U with an acoustic guitar and vocals, and it didnt sound distorted like that. it didn't sound great, but it was at least useable.

well, keep working at it and know your gear and you'll do OK.
 
zed32 said:
yeah man you need to take a whole step back from the mic, keep around 12" away, like qb25k said. if it's not loud enough, you need more gain, don't just get closer and closer to the mic.

a friend of mine has done some recordings using that C10U with an acoustic guitar and vocals, and it didnt sound distorted like that. it didn't sound great, but it was at least useable.

well, keep working at it and know your gear and you'll do OK.
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Thanks :). i'll work with it, ;)
 
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