I wanna listen!

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tried to sign up to nowhere.com .. signed up fine.
mailer won't sent me my verification code.I tried a bunch of times from the page. The address is good. I take it that's the reason why the upload dies on me when I try to send a tune.

You may have an e-mail from me in you box begging for a verification code.

Anyhow ..

Give me your opinion when you get the chance.

https://homerecording.com/bbs/showthread.php?s=&threadid=43578

I"m laying down some vocals soon .
 
I posted a response to you in the 'mp3 hosting' thread. I'm hoping the issue gets resolved soon, but as you, my hands are tied.

W.
 
Okay, ear is ALMOST back to normal. Did the hot-water flush and hot onion trick, my low-end is a bit damp, but I think it'll suffice.

So, here goes -

mixmkr,

victory - The lead guit. is a bit far back, but if I remember, the original song I think it's from was also...

Low end clips on one or two key shifts. Might turn it down a hair.

It's still bugging me, can't think of what that intro is reminding me of ;)

The rest of it sounds beautifully done. Other than I might spread out the stereo spectrum a bit, sounds a bit too centered.

Nice work!

W.
 
gmiller1122,

From your post I take it you don't want me to do a mix critique, so I won't. If you want me to, just ask, I'll do so.

I hate having to download, but know you are signed up on NWR, so I went there to play back your tunes.

I Never Win - Rythm gives me an early swing feel, sounds like the type of bass rift Aretha would belt one out to ;)

Took me a bit to seperate the vocals enough from the mix to get the lyrical value. Still a bit tough to focus on them enough to pull out the whole bit. The flow of the song seems nicely matched to the lyrics. If you post the lyrics, I can critique them a bit more.

I would vary the bass a little bit more, it's pretty constant until about the 2 minute mark, after that it improves.

Sounds like a well written song, although I couldn't say that it would win any awards for 'uniqueness', as it appears to be written for an older commercial atmosphere. You (or the song writer), my guess would be, are a fan of early classic rock ;)

Real - Same early rock feel, with a bit of late 70's early 80's influence. I'd have to call it 80's pop. Almost that 'Life is a highway' feel... Now what was his name... hehe

Lyrically the song could be powerful, the mix needs quite a bit of balancing to push the lyrics into their proper spot. To bring up the power, I might also use an electric in there with a dist. effect with the heavy emphasis of the lyrics. Vocals are pretty disembodied.

It may just be the bass overpowering the rest of the instrumental value, but I think that's the section that needs the most work. Think of backing the vocals with an orchestra, where the orchestra could easily play without the vocals, and yet the song would almost sound the same...

At this point, you could put almost any lyrics in the song, and most people wouldn't notice the difference. Need some lead instrumentation in there to match the vocal and tie them together.

Once again, wouldn't mind seeing the vocals posted ;)

Good work for your first shot(s)!

W.
 
laj,

In Czentre, I don't see the bass as overpowering at all. I have some very nice original sansui prototype studio monitors (that I payed a hell of a lot for way back when) and it comes through clear and rich, as though it was a movie theme. I really wouldn't do anything to it.

If they claim it's 'overpowering', it's probably that they are listening on Cans (headphones), or a system with a subwoofer turned up higher than the rest of their set, or even a sound-card with an on-board bass-enhancement feature (or 3D effect) turned on. I'm fairly well balanced here, and it sounds right where I'd leave it for an ambient tune.

To decrease the supposed overpowering effect without scrapping the rich fullness of the bass, simply do not modify the wave-form, only lower the volume. Eq'in it could easily damage the smoothness the wave-form (as alot of digital eq's do), so I would advise against touching them knobs.

German wind - Warn me before you attempt to do the high-freq. crap (I can hear a dog whistle alot of times, and it's annoying as hell). BTW, high freq. doesn't come across in mp3's well at all.

As far as 'making it a bit more accessable'. Simple: Don't. That would be 'catering to the supposed public', which is not an art-form, but a cop-out. It's your art, you take it where you want to, not where everyone else wants you to take it.

What makes me enjoy music is when I can feel the performers emotion, and sometimes even their soul come through in the representation they have dropped into my ears.

If you can make me, or anyone else for that matter, feel the music, you my friend, have a success more than $$$'s and charts can give you.

W.
 
TrackRat,

Time to enter MY dungeon studio ;)

Back At You - Like the tune, I've been humming 'I'll get back at you' all day, with an evil look on my face :)

Good job, one or two things I'd do. Lead guits too far back, bring it forward a bit. What 'synthd' instrument is that? Oboe, low clarinet, low trumpet?

Hihat needs a bit of work at the intro, sounds like it was hit open, or it was very loosely closed. Too much of a thump (shh) thump(shh) to it. Maybe try it tightly closed? Sounds fine throughout the rest of the mix.

Vocals could be done a tiny tiny tiny fraction of a hair.

Finit!

W.
 
tvaillan,

Get them tunes uploaded to NWR lad!

Listened to 'Winter Blues' as was asked in your other thread.

Mix is a bit muddy, and the drums are a bit wet. Maybe slave all sliders and drop 'em a bit, tiny bit hot.

Very nice guitar playing, nice thumping on the drums as well. I might bring the ride down a bit (or is it a splash played as a ride?). Or eq. it a tiny bit lower to match the rest of the drums. Turn the snare up a hair, or eq. it higher. Kick needs to be a bit louder.

Guit. could be lowered one or two notches, to balance out. You may have to do this when vocals are added anyhow.

Bass needs to be a bit more up-front (too close to guit.), nice tone though.

Overall not bad so far! Let me know when you get some vocals on it!

W.
 
Waldo -

Whenever you're ready. You can't hurry constructive criticism, right?

:)
 
Waldo,

Just got my new mic, recorded 30 sec track with it. Please give me some suggestions on vocal, de-esser guide-lines. Thanks

A1A2
 
Thanks Waldo, your tips and ideas are infinitely appreciated. Let's all give Waldo a big round of applause *claps wildly*



Laj
 
gmiller,

Does that mean you want me to do a mix critique as well as the reviews I wrote above?

W.
 
a1a2,

It appears that the entire low end of your vocal is dead, and your vocals are eq'd way high. The 'esses' are a result of the high end (where the esses reside) being boosted.

First off, just use a spit screen (cheapo way is to use a pair of stockings wrapped around a bent coat-hanger).

Drop the vocals flat, then compress the vocals in that same high-range you boosted. Use no effect on the vocals until this has been done.

This should help a bit, but the basic rule, is back away from the mic on 'esses'!

W.
 
laj,

I just love music, that's all I know. Just wish I could enjoy it forever...

W.
 
Waldo,

Thank you very much, a few other people have pointed out the same problem with EQ, too.
I went back did some adjustments, then compare the 2, boy the first one (the one you heard) was lacking some serious mids/lows.
If you have time, please check out the revision I did. It's called "echo2" http://nowhereradio.com/a1a2/singles

Thank you
 
Waldo --

No, I just completely missed your response. Sorry. The flu makes you hallucinate sometimes, I suppose.

Thanks so much for the close listen and advice.

It's funny -- I really don't like classic rock, but I grew up w/it, so it stuck somewhere along the way. I agree about 'Real' -- the music doesn't seem to match the words. I think I kept the bass so high b/c I'm still not too confident in my voice.

Here are the lyrics for I Never Win. I like them, but 99% of my stuff is not "humorous."


I NEVER WIN

I try my luck every other day
'cause 2 is my lucky number
That's what the stars in my sign say

Monday, I play the numbers
Wednesday is sweepstakes day
On Friday I put my name into every single free giveaway

chorus:
But I never win anything
No I never win
I never win anything
But I try again and again

My girl says I waste my time
My mom says I'm obsessed
I think there's luck in every little thing I possess

Call me crazy, call it a waste of my money
But when my ship comes in,
I'll be leaving this town
And you'll be crying for me, honey (you'll be left behind)

chorus


(boy, on typing these out, I realize there's quite a bit of sadness there as well)

:(



Thanks again, Waldo
 
Give it a listen

OK Waldo,
Give this one a listen. It's the 3rd one I've added to your site. Tune name is "Temptation." http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/9/1292/singles.shtml
Comments on mix and the tune itself. Keep in mind the last 5 seconds are chopped off for some reason at your end.

Lyrics if ya want to see them:

Look at me, and I
See your face, and I
Know that pain, and I
Know that shame, as I
Reach my hand, hope you
Understand, that the
Price is paid, and it’s
Not me, that you’re
Looking for, something
So much more, than I
Have to give, than I can
Ever live, but you
Got to know, that the
Way to go, is the
Son of God, is the
Son of God

Can’t you see that your
Tyranny is just
Killing me, and I
Cannot stay
I cannot stay, not a
Another day, not just
One more day, got to
Get away
I’ve got to get away

I can see, that
When we touch, it is
Just too much, yes it’s
Way too much, and if
We begin, in this
Carnal sin, it can
Mean your life, that’s a
Heavy price, and I
Know it seems, like a
Little fun, but if we’ve
Just begun, then we’re
On the run, it can
Mean your life, it can
Mean my life, I don’t
Want to pay, I don’t
Want to pay

Chorus

I’ve got to flee
I’ve got to get away

Chorus

I’ve got to get away
I’ve gotta go
I’ve got to get away

Copyright 2002 – Martin Fischer, Jr.; David Salas, Jr.; Jim Durham
 
I be working today to make some much needed food money.

I'll be back to reviewing probaly Tuesday next week, as I have a recording gig this weekend.

W.
 
If you find the time here's a song that needs opinions. ;)


Hope you're feeling better,
Regards,
/Henrik, Luleå
 
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