How's This Song?

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Warning, this song is highly depressing, or at least aspires to be:



It is slow to develop, but I wanted that, to gradually set the mood. I know the vocals have to be top notch for this song to succeed, so I'm still sweating them here and there. One of my main goals was to have a lot of space in the mix, not cluttered like so many of my other tunes.

Thanks in advance for the candid feedback. Criticism is totally welcome, just try to be specific.

-Todzilla
 
Performance + tone (all instruments - voice) is excellent.

If I could " put my hands" i´d try another "stage" for the guitar (a bit more hard panned and use a delay or another (maybe longer) reverb.
And a better dinamic control of voice in the different parts.

Balance "Bass guitar (great tone), drums and piano" is perfect IMO.

Quality is top, Congrats. :cool:

Ciro
 
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CIRO said:
Performance + tone (all instruments - voice) is excellent.

If I could " put my hands" i´d try another "stage" for the guitar (a bit more hard panned and use a delay or another kind (maybe longer) of reverb.
And (probably) a bit less volume in the voice - it will depends of guitar).

Balance "Bass guitar (great tone), drums and piano" is perfect IMO.

Quality is top, Congrats. :cool:

Ciro
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Thanks, Ciro!

Is your opening line parenthetical a minus sign (indicating vocals are not excellent) or a dash (indicating instruments through vocals are excellent)?

I can take it either way.
 
No :D are instruments AND voice . All sounds great

*I did an edit right now (3 minutes ago) about the voice (dinamics).

Ciro
 
Well I was going to say this is perfect but then you left me hanging.

This is such a tired old trick. For gods sake just let it resolve and go home.

Its gets a little boring in places. I think the Beatles would have added some BGVs to spice it up.

It’s a very good song. I like the chord changes.
 
Generally well performed and things sound good.

Liked how you did the double tracking on one syllable at 1:15. Cool idea. You did that in other spots too.

A couple of things pop out from time to time. There's a quick surge at 1:53 that startled me a bit. The "cleanish" rhythm guitar that comes in at :29 is a little abrupt too. It's a little heavy in the high mids - maybe around 2400hz.

Real good ambiance to the mix. Nice singing. I liked how you dried up the vocal for a line here and there.

Song starts out a little "sleepy." It drags a bit until things get going.

Caught some background noise at 1:14 between the words "blood stains" and "left behind."
 
TripleM said:
Generally well performed and things sound good.

Liked how you did the double tracking on one syllable at 1:15. Cool idea. You did that in other spots too.

A couple of things pop out from time to time. There's a quick surge at 1:53 that startled me a bit. The "cleanish" rhythm guitar that comes in at :29 is a little abrupt too. It's a little heavy in the high mids - maybe around 2400hz.

Real good ambiance to the mix. Nice singing. I liked how you dried up the vocal for a line here and there.

Song starts out a little "sleepy." It drags a bit until things get going.

Caught some background noise at 1:14 between the words "blood stains" and "left behind."
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Thanks for the detailed feedback, MMM. I will review each of those items on remix.
 
Hey there, not really my style, but i have to say... your voice fits perfect to that kind of song... amazing... I could see myself with a glass of whisky on the rocks.

Very very good man, congrats.
 
I feel the vocals should have more reverb or delay your really good though. cool song and tone. :)
 
Sounds great. I thought you missed a golden opportunity for a great guitar solo during the slow musical interlude. You know, bluesy with enough tremolo to make a grown man cry. Vocals on the bridge are louder than the rest, kind of startling. I'd turn that down. Like the vocal doubling in spots. Great job.
 
Pretty cool.

The vocals were a little loud relative to the rest of things in a few spots. Generally near the beginning of choruses.

"You're killing me... not willingly, but not unknowingly." Is a pretty good line.
 
Thanks so much for all the feedback!

I've made a number of tweaks to
based on feedback from this, and other forums (forae?)

Intro is shorter
Doubled vocals pulled way back in mix
Put a final "yourself" to it.

Does this help enhancercize this tune?
 
One nit at 2:17...the bass note conflicts with the chord.

I really like this song...and like some others, think it's unfinished. What's there is really good.

BGV...bluesy wailing guitar fills. Something.

Voice rocks.

Some of the words could use work...like the bridge: quarter-note syllables would punch, where too many awkward word-parts steal impact.


The opening line is not far from lame. Phrasing. The remainder is good...some lyrics really really excellent.

I think the intro should be nixed....come in singing....grab 'em right off the bat.

Like it a lot. Needs TLC.

Oh yeah...I can hear a few double hits on various 2 and 4's throughout....a little editing to tighten it up........
 
Not bad at all, I like the voice and the song has a good hookline. The pause between verses is a bit too long as is the intro. Build this around your voice, it would sound better. I like it, kind of empty club, late at night, just one light switched on and all the chairs on the tables. An alto sax solo would have gone well with this. Nice work.

Joey :)
 
Really like this, so many different kinds of influences in there. reminds me of Floyd and Alan Parsons meets Elvis Costello's Ship building.

A Gilmourish clean solo would have sounded amazing on that track or maybe even a lap steel solo
 
i love your snare sound! what mic did you use to record it?
 
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