Here's a new original (unplugged) critique please

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Thanks Qenn.. Glad you liked it. Thanks for listening.

Crawdad. I do understand what you're saying. And I do value it because I know you know how to write a song. Replacing the "it's" with imagery would probably be a good idea. Even if the imagery were Dylan imagery and not completely understandable.

Anyway, thanks very much for the time you put into this. I really do appreciate "it" :) and your thoughts.
 
I believe the new testament story you are talking about is based on the old testament story in which the son rejects his father's teaching about God and becomes a "party animal" (just to keep it light folks). In the end he finally accepts God and his father's wishes. In the new testament it became a little more literal I think in which the son physically leaves home. But I think this parting is actually a metaphor for rejecting the father's ways. Anyway, I'm not suggesting changing anything because I like ambiguous lyrics that have more than one meaning. I just think there may be another layer of intrigue hidden in your song.
 
Thanks for your comments Ash. I really appreciate them. I think I may have misunderstood you originally. Yeah I agree that the prodigal son story is told on at least two levels. And primarily it is a metaphor for our relationship with God. I hope that people versed in the bible would recognize that in my song. But if they aren't, I hope the song tells them that there are people in this world that love and care for them.

Thanks again.
 
Hi there.

I have been listening to your songs just now. Very much enjoyed em. I really dig your accent and your song has a classic sound to it. Very much liked the guitar sound and the organ too. nice
 
Hey man...I'm trying this alternative approach lately where I don't read the comments before I post...they influence me...so here's me:

1. Liked it - I'm an acoustic junkie;
2. I'll bet somebody has (or will) mentioned a Dylan similarity. Good or bad, it's there. For me, it's good.
3. Maybe a little less reverb on the vocal would make it sound better, but it also might make it sound EXACTLY like Dylan, lol.
4. Organ = perfect. I bet people say to bring it up...I wouldn't.
5. That harmonica (the first time) takes my head off in a couple of places...higher notes...it either needs compression or some volume enveloping. **This is really my only Criticism with the mix, but I think I'm right about it, lol.**

"There's too many prayin' that you'll come home..." (cool) - I think I know what the tune's about, but I'm really insecure and stuff, so I'm not gonna' say it, lol. If you wanted to let the cat out of the bag, that'd get me off the hook. :D :D

Really nice work overall.
 
Thanks Earland. I appreciate it very much.

Chris... thank you too. I appreciate your comments. That harmonica is designed to wake you up in case my singing put you to sleep :)

As you read the thread you'll find we've had a pretty good discussion about the lyrics. I think I would say that I hope it is a song that people could maybe relate to on different levels for different reasons. That would be the ideal outcome for me.
 
Yeah, I was reading it. Actually, a pretty meaty thread.

(btw - I got it :D)

Take it easy,
Chris
 
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