Give a little listen here there anywhere.... BAM!

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edit: Really like the shaky vox as shaky.

This tune is really cool. Rockin'.

I like the shaky vox. I wouldn't recommend changing the vox at all. I like it as is.

The song is not complete? Cut off in the middle (1:42).

The dist. guitar sound a little hollow in the beginning (0:48) when it started. Like muffled or hollow. Can't explain. Sounded like it was played in a little box. But after it starts it sounds just fine. Maybe just boost the 5kHz or above a little. Just thought I'd mention that.

But the tune.... simply cool. Rockin'.

To quote VSpaceBoy who quoted you, "BAM!"
 
Thanks for the comments everyone.
I re-did the beginning vocals, as i thought they were a little *too* warbly.
The rest remained mostly the same... just some tweaks here and there... the mix needs quite a bit of work too... a lot of frequency fighting going on here... will post newer version tonight...

Thanks!
 
I'll be really really honest. I was just playing the last version and I was trying to figure out the guitar intro on my guitar and the passion of the vox was really nice.

But on this new one it sounds like the vox are clear and good good. But the passion is not the same as the last one. I just really liked the shakiness that added to some of the uncertainty expressed. And the uneven-ness gave this straight from the heart honest feel. Don't get me wrong, I really like the voice and the song. But the first take was vocally impressive. It expressed emotion without fear.

Great tune. :)

Oh something different about the dist. git now. I don't know if you did anythin but they sound OK.
 
Thanks for the comments, bubba
I'll think about putting some of the old voc takes in there, but to me it was a little too 'pitchy' at times.

BTW, the tuning is weird so it may be a little difficult in standard tuning.

The guitar (going from lows to highs) is FADECD, capo'ed on the 1st fret.

Intro: (all frets are relative)

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----3----0---------------------
-----3----3----3----3--3-------
-------0----0---------0--------
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JazzMang said:
Thanks for the comments, bubba
BTW, the tuning is weird so it may be a little difficult in standard tuning.

The guitar (going from lows to highs) is FADECD, capo'ed on the 1st fret.

Intro: (all frets are relative)

--------------2----0-----------
----3----0---------------------
-----3----3----3----3--3-------
-------0----0---------0--------
------0----0----0----0---------
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Well duh! I've been mapping it on standard tuning here and thinking, this is just not coming naturally to the fingers here. :)

Sometimes, people are composers so they only think music and it's expected of them to write something that sounds cool but would be hard to play. But a guitarist fiddling around finding a cool melody rarely involved weird fingerings unless the tuning is different. :)

Any specific reason for the different tuning? Other than to put together a cool song. :)
 
I usually mess with tunings to make stuff easier to play... no need to kill yourself for a simple melody like in this song... for example, 'Hard to Breathe' was almost like standard tuning, but with the B raised to a C. I cant imagine playing that with a capo or by fretting the whole thing... plus, oddball tunings make for some interesting open chords... no need to bind yourself to a certain tuning... use those tuners!
 
Good point. I simply slave over it, till I get it right or get bored and move on to the next piece. Since I'm would like eventually be able to play fast lead, I use that as an excuse to try to play everything no matter how hard.

I have to take out the adapter input from my Keyboards, invert it, and feed them to the guitar tuner, it's too much work. Often times, I'll record stuff with horribly out of tune strings, and even rusty strings, instead of hooking up the tuner and tune the guitar. :)
 
Wow this is like a monster thread... but here's a fresh review since I haven't heard this yet and read anything above.

Nice vocals and feel to the guitar. Gives me a goo goo dolls vibe.
Listening to the clip you posted today.
When things pick up at 0:55 sounds cool, but sounds a little thin on my system though. Specfically sounds like more bass there would do the job. Maybe you EQing things too much..
Cool song and singing, I dig the feel and emotion there. I like, look forward to hearing the full version of this :)
 
It may sound thin b/c there is no bass guitar in there at all... I am hoping that will fill things in quite a bit (once I get my hands on a decent bass). Also, the electric guitar parts are not final, and more may be added later for effect.

Thanks guys! Keep it up with the comments and feedback... gives me ideas of what to do and where to go with this piece.
 
JazzMang said:
Work in progress... keeping you all up to speed.

http://www.lightningmp3.com/live/file.php?fid=3291

I am not slacking! I promise! :p
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Very sweet Jazz,

The left guitar sounded out of context until everything else entered. I think maybe your vocals could come up a tad in the mix during the intro!

There is a lot happening in there Jazz, but very well done!

You are doing some nice work here Jazz, I really like your vocals!

Gorty :)
 
Gorty said:
Very sweet Jazz,

The left guitar sounded out of context until everything else entered. I think maybe your vocals could come up a tad in the mix during the intro!

There is a lot happening in there Jazz, but very well done!

You are doing some nice work here Jazz, I really like your vocals!

Gorty :)
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thanks!
I was thinking about the intro volume too, and i will definitely bring that up and try to fix some of those side-to-side balance issues ASAP. Thanks for the listen!
 
It's a little wordy to put "in my opinion" in front of every line. So here's the disclaimer: everything that follows is my opinion. :)

The dist. stikes before the drums kick in, are too loud. I liked them at the "hint" level as with the original mix with the shaky voice. (You'll never convince me that there's a better mix than the first one. By the way the same goes for hard to breathe. :)) But once the drums kick in, they're only a tad loud.

The rhythm guitar is just the right volume. It's the volume, it needs to be.

Vox: Raise the vol. In the intro the focus should be the vox. In this one they're too drowned out by the gutiar (great playing, BTW).

Dude, finish this piece. I'm starting to get annoyed at the song abruptly getting cut after the first verse. It's in a loop playing and I want it to go on for a while. So chop chop and finish this piece. And if you need a good solo, go ahead throw one in there. I figure with many people forcing you to go acoustic, you're probably craving for a little heavy sound. :)

Can you say that your creative direction is being hijacked? :p
 
JaZZzzzzz....

Love your intro...the vocals and guitar are smooth emotion, then the guitar teases in and out as your vox are still smooth....then both kick in when the drums are added ~ then back out to mellow...then of course, it cuts off! :(

I love the arrangement of the song...just anxious to hear the rest, with the bass.

Your vocals are magnificent as usual. The guitars are very good too! I never hear the issues of recording. But I do hear the music, I do hear the talent.

A gift of love expressed, shared in the gift of sounds. :)

You go JaZZzzzzzzzz!!!

TRue :)
 
Thanks True! Great comments, as usual.

Anyone else get a chance to listen to it?
 
Remember this post from back on page 2?
cellardweller said:
You're sure...
You are not now, nor have you ever been a member of a band that rhymes with "poo poo walls"?

Nice song, nice singing.

Good job Johny.... errr Jazz :D
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In light of recent posts, i just wanted to say I meant it in a good way! :)

Caught up on this thread today and I gotta say...again... You's a talented fella Jazz!
 
Hey man, I listened to it. Sounds good. Only thing is that when I was listening to this in the car*, the snare sounded a little too shrill. Like non-other-bands shrill. So maybe you can tackle that. The rest of the song is still pretty cool.

I'm more wanting to see how you finish this off. :)

Maybe a little solo in there somewhere. :)

* Yeah I burnt "Hard to breathe" (original and one with bass and drums and the bridge verse) and this song on a CD. :) Hope you don't mind. :)
 
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