Crack, that beat was maad amazin, nice beat, dope lyrics and mixing was very good, the lyrics kinda confused me tho, is this baout your brothers or a symbolic thing? GOOD WORK THO!
You're getting better lil homie!
But I gotta hit you with honest feed!
The mix needs lot of work. The vocals need to be treated to compliment the beat better. What are you recording at? I'm listening on my laptop, but it seems like it's damn near clipping. (If it hasn't already!) You should record dry and add effects in the mix, but don't OVER USE! (Reverb, Chorus, Flanger, etc....) Try doubling up your vocals at times. It doesn't sound like you are using the eq properly. Do you have monitors? What sound are you getting from your finished product compared to a commercial sound through the same monitors?
Lyrics are better!
Still sound a bit hesitant like you're reading. It's not flowing off your tongue with confidence. You need to establish a flow with all your lyrics. Spit like you wrote it! It's your work be proud of it! OWN IT!!!!!
Like I mentioned you're making progress. I love the concept!
Real good concept! I like the direction you went with the lyrics, but make sure it fits..........Don't over use vocab, just tell your story!!!!
Much better than your other stuff!
Keep at it, I hear progress...................