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Jessica_X
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https://soundcloud.com/jessicazin/the-noise-revised
I am pretty new to this, so I appreciate any feedback.
Last time I posted, a lot of people said the chorus needed background music so I added that.
I still don't like the stomp sound either. I spent some time looking for another sample and messing around with the one I had, and I couldn't get it to sound any better. Not sure what to do about that.
I tried doing some EQ on my voice and on a few other things.
Thank you if you can take the time to give me some more pointers. I know I have a long way to go.
Here are the lyrics:
The Noise
Chorus
The bell
The bull
The line
The walk
The bell
The bull
The line
The walk
The yard
The bull
The line
The walk
The noise
The noise
The noise
Verse 1
Well your friends forget
And your mother cries
And your girl gives up
And your father dies
And the days drag on
But the years race by
In a worn steel mirror
Are a younger man’s eyes
Chorus
Verse 2
Saturday morning
Plexiglass
Your boy grew up
In stop action
Flowers bloomed
And flowers died
With a spinning sun
And a strobe light sky
Chorus
Verse 3
Well the record skipped
In mid drum roll
Yeah the stitches hurt
When the needle’s cold
And you start alone
And you leave alone
I’ll have lots to say
In the exit poll
Chorus
I am pretty new to this, so I appreciate any feedback.
Last time I posted, a lot of people said the chorus needed background music so I added that.
I still don't like the stomp sound either. I spent some time looking for another sample and messing around with the one I had, and I couldn't get it to sound any better. Not sure what to do about that.
I tried doing some EQ on my voice and on a few other things.
Thank you if you can take the time to give me some more pointers. I know I have a long way to go.
Here are the lyrics:
The Noise
Chorus
The bell
The bull
The line
The walk
The bell
The bull
The line
The walk
The yard
The bull
The line
The walk
The noise
The noise
The noise
Verse 1
Well your friends forget
And your mother cries
And your girl gives up
And your father dies
And the days drag on
But the years race by
In a worn steel mirror
Are a younger man’s eyes
Chorus
Verse 2
Saturday morning
Plexiglass
Your boy grew up
In stop action
Flowers bloomed
And flowers died
With a spinning sun
And a strobe light sky
Chorus
Verse 3
Well the record skipped
In mid drum roll
Yeah the stitches hurt
When the needle’s cold
And you start alone
And you leave alone
I’ll have lots to say
In the exit poll
Chorus