fearfeasog
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here's song numero dos. please enjoy the "autotune" effect! thought it went well with the theme...tell me if i'm WAAAAAY off here...
thx! mark
thx! mark
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Hey Mark, sounds good but to me it sounds like trying to copy Tool 10,000 days. Just my 2 cents.
Pretty interesting tune. Some more chord variation would do it good, it tends to sound too long.
Voice is pretty good for this style. Drums are very low in the mix. Can't get too friendly with that synth (is it a synth or a lead guitar?) in the verse, it sounds too much like a Casio.
Sorry fearfeasog, it is pretentious and distant.
I take its your friend is doing the instrumentation on this again?
The good part is your vocals...they sound much better on this track, the effects suit them too...good job, the backings good as well
Im not keen on the instrumentation...the actual tune is fine, even the relentless monotony of the song is attractive to me but it sounds like presets on quite a basic synth or softsynths have been used...
theres no bite to the organ, a saturator and/or some overdrive would give it a bit more bite...the drums could do with a bit more EQ work and it all needs a little more layering/depth..
whenever i make a synth tune there are very few patches that play on their own...nearly every track has a layered track either slightly detuned or in a different octave...it gives them much more meat and presence in the mix..and investing in a decent filter(s) can really help sound manipulation...theres a moogfilter plug in thats only 19 euros and its excellent on softsynths
Some panned FX noises coming and going also helps this kind of track retain interest
but Im surprised its the same person singing...this is much better imho
Hi fearfeasog,
I was a bit harsh (it was late here... that's my excuse ). I just had another listen and I still think it has a "detached" sound, but that actually suits the lyrics and general intent.
When I'm listening, I can't help anticipating that a crisp, dry, upfront vocal is about to burst out. As it stands, I feel the vocal is a bit buried in effects, but perhaps that's what the song wants.
I can hear the lyrics, but my personal taste just wants some contrast. Perhaps it's not the vocal but the song that needs some sudden impact.
I'm not sure if this will make much sense, but I am thinking of "Let it die" by the Foo Fighters, when they break from a repetitive groove with the line "Do you ever think of me?"... the vocal treatment doesn't change much, but it is the kind of face slapping contrast that I am "anticipating" when I listen to your song.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=63NiS3uZaTA