My 1st Love Song

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erichenryus said:
hey dres. this song grew on my like a weed! god i'm a sucker for a good love song!
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Weed ? ... really... I'm touched (better than fungus I spose ;) )

it's late and i had like one minute to tinker with it, and my voice is totally shot right now, but i think this kind of harmony might sound cool in your chorus:
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Hmmm not bad. You certainly have the gist of it... and I kinda like the 'produced' sound. But it's not really a harmony... I mean it's only 1 note as far as I can tell ! :) make it 3 and I'd say you have a winner ;) needs to go a little higher on the word "anchor" and a little lower on "soul" ie
"(F#)Your love is an (G#)anchor (F#)to my (D#)soul"
hope the notes are right (not my forte), the very last note would need to be an E I think...maybe you can leave what you got and add this too ?

p.s. i can do lot's more if you like it, i can shut up and go back to playing my washboard if you don't.
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Anything but the washboard ! ... no seriously, I like what you've done, the chorus does need a little "support" .... how high can you sing ?

p.m.s. it's 1:30 am here and thanks to you i just stayed up way too late and will pay dearly when my kid wakes up at 6.
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Well my kid just went to bed and so I already paid my due today ;) I'm pleased I've inspired you. I have the evening ahead of me so I'll try and post a new version with a different reverb in about 12 hrs.

dres
 
I meant 'weed' in a good way (but not the one that you smoke).

I did a really bad job mixing that (mixing is my week spot) cause there is a high harmony that's obviously not coming out. I was suspending the F# throughout and singing '(B)your love is an (A#)anchor to my (B)soul.'

i'll get back to this when i get a chance, possibly tonite, that is if you're honestly interested.
 
Great performance!

Great performance I like this song. You have to have a good voice and know hoe to use it to sing with just a guitar or piano and you nailed it. Great job!
 
I enjoyed the tune immensely. lots of heart and coochie coochie. I feel sorta like some of the rest on the piano thing, like a little echo of the hook riff you play every time it turns around, maybe a soft upright bass for cushion. Rythym is good and tone is full..
 
Ok people,
I spent some time last night trying to incorporate some of the suggestions from yesterday. I've now remixed this with a different reverb and replaced the distorted vocals with new ones. The chorus now has doubled vocals. and the guitar is also a bit more stereo thanks to a trick I read on this forum.

erichenryus: there's now a nice 'hole' in the chorus for your extra harmonies to go. Indeed they are growing on me too ... more please... I'll think they'll go well

scottboyher : Thanks for your encouragement. Indeed this song isn't finished yet....

Toki987: Thanks ...do you know a good pianists up for some collaboration on this one ?

Anyway check out the new version

www.nowhereradio.com/dres/singles

"Love Song MkII"
 
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very nice....




for a love song... :p



The vocals were too separated during the chorus. It's goes from being dry/dead-center, to being wet/way off to each side. I think nice harmonies on each side (during the chorus) would be great, but I'd keep the melody in the center and (relatively) dry. Other than that... sounded fine... decent mix. I like the vocal bit at 4:40.


WATYF
 
Hey Dres...you might wanna' edit your last link there to include the ".com" after "nowhereradio."

Going to listen now.
 
WATYF: Yup, agreed... the chorus thing was an experiment and does sound a little extreme. Mr erichenryus seems keen to do harmonies so I'm going to wait and see what else he comes up with. When I have more to play with I can do what your suggesting.

Decent Mix
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well how hard can it be with just voice and guitar ? ;)

Thanks for your comments, I'm a big fan of your stuff.
dres
 
BIG improvement on the reverb. I think it's perfect.

But I have to agree with the WATYF guy on the splitting of the vox in the chorus. I think the doubling is a great idea, and I think it'll work even better with some sweeeet bg vox, but I think you should take one of the doubled lead vox and pull it down (level-wise) so it's not really "noticeable" as a doubled, then run both of the leads right up the center.

Man, this is coming along very nicely.

[edit] - use the one on the left as the louder lead.
 
dres said:


well how hard can it be with just voice and guitar ? ;)
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Oh, lol... I seem to be able to make it VERY difficult. I'll say this, b/c you've listened to some of my stuff. "AWAY" was about 1,000 times easier to mix ('cept for the drums) than any of the acoustic stuff. Getting the acoustic tone ALONE seems to be a big obstacle...one that you've conquered, in my opinion.
 
Hey Chris,
Whew....glad I passed the Reverb test [sweating profusly :)]. FYI I started with the default "Chunky Space" preset on the MPX-500 and tweaked it a little. Interestingly I had to really keep the low pass filter thingy pritty low (can't remember exactly.. below 1k?)... the attack of the guitar strums becomes a mess if it's added to the verb itself.

Yea that guitar tone is a pig to get right.... I still wish I could get the tone that others do on this forum... but I'm still saving up for some small diaphram condensers... so the little 2$ electret omni's will have to do for now ! They don't sound great by themselves... but neither does the NTK... together they get close.
 
Well darn, I listened to only the first mix so I just will pop in and say that I loved the song.
 
dres. didn't make it to the basement to do those bgv's last night. probably tonite though.

just wanted to tell you that the reverb in the second post is a tremendous improvement on my ears! and i didn't think i heard any clips this time around either.
 
erichenryus : No worries, I look forward to your contribution.. I'll pm you...

Yes I fixed the clipping... it all occured in the choruses in the first take. It's really tricky to see the level meters when your singing ! Esp when your standing and your preamps on the ground.... and I was going without a pop filter to get a better sound so I was being really careful not to 'pop' into the mic... and holding my words up in my right hand.... OK enough whinging :)

Terriel : Thanks for your comments. Glad you like the song. Keep checking this thread cause the song will improve I hope as the collaborations progress.
 
dres:

I really like your voice, and the guitar sound. Since I am listening with cans, the hard panning of vocals during course (?) seem kinda empty. Maybe you could track one more vocal and put it in the middle subtlely.
Really god work, man

AL
 
Hi A1A2, thanks for your comments. As I pointed out previously the vocals in the chorus are in a state of change... they won't stay like this... there should be a new version within a week ?
 
Nice tune dres.The only thing that jumps out at me is the doubled vocal.The hard panning left/right is making it really noticeable.Pan them straight up and down and back the volume off on the overdubbed double to make it less noticeable.Some harmony vocals during the doubled section would set it off also.

Good song.
 
New Mix + Harmonies

Hi people,
well I've just posted a new mix of this song and this one includes some excellent harmonies supplied by erichenryus. There are also several minor tweaks to the mix.

Tell me I've gone forward not backwards :)

All comments appreciated. The verses and breaks now sound a little empty so if you can think of additions feel free to join as a collaborator.

www.nowhereradio.com/dres/singles

"Love Song Mk III"

Cheers
dres
 
Gee wizz this board moves fast !!! - Worth a second listen (or first)....... really
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