I fall down...

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Personal quirk~ I find it obnoxious when the song plays "automatically".
If I decided I wanted to hear, I would hear.
It's just kinda annoying IMO.
 
cellardweller said:
Personal quirk~ I find it obnoxious when the song plays "automatically".
If I decided I wanted to hear, I would hear.
It's just kinda annoying IMO.
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No, I am annoying. :D :p
 
I like the song. It has a heartgrabbing feel to it. I like the lyrics too.

I hear (in my music mind) a distant vocal (echoing both of your voices perhaps)with some powerful and haunting emotion.

I think it would be nice with a longer instrumental intro.

I like the lead vocals and the harmony...her voice sets good with yours.

The mix sounds pretty good to me. :)
 
opensky said:
Here's a first mix of a new song, so i know there will be plenty to critique. Fire away. Thanks for your fresh ears.

http://www.soundclick.com/opensky
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The female vocals are sweet nectar, the male vocals are a little pitchy here and there, not much, just a few little areas.
The guitar in the verses has a nice warm welcoming tone, but the guitar in the chorus (slightly distorted guitar) is very harsh. The highs need to be dragged down and boost the lows to mid lows just to take the edge off.
The guitar panned to the left during the verses would benefit the whole mix if it was boosted in volume by a few db's. The whole mix seems to be over-balanced on the right hand side.
Also the heavier guitar that is played during the chorus would open the tune up if that was panned hard left "AND" hard right. It would give the whole mix some strength in the body of the song.
The guitar tone in the solo however was great, very emotive, I would of liked it to stretch out a little longer!

A nice relaxing tune opensky, I enjoyed it very much. It has a slight Pearl Jam type aura to it, which is a good thing! :)

Thanx for sharing.

Gorty :)
 
Hey, that is a nice song.

The only improvement I can think of is some kind of increased dynamics. I seem to hear too much "constantness" in volume/energy in HRs these days (including mine), which is probably a result of too much "automation" at our hands. It'd be nice to hear some fluctuation in this song.

Interesting comment on the "autoplay". I don't find that a problem -- I like it. If I'm going to a music site, I expect to hear music. If I went to a text site and it returned a button saying "click to read what is on this site" I think that would be annoying.

Have fun
aspiring
 
listed to and downloaded i fall down, very nice song.
 
cellardweller said:
Personal quirk~ I find it obnoxious when the song plays "automatically".
If I decided I wanted to hear, I would hear.
It's just kinda annoying IMO.
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First time i heard that comment. Thanks anyways.
 
true-eurt said:
I like the song. It has a heartgrabbing feel to it. I like the lyrics too.

I hear (in my music mind) a distant vocal (echoing both of your voices perhaps)with some powerful and haunting emotion.

I think it would be nice with a longer instrumental intro.

I like the lead vocals and the harmony...her voice sets good with yours.

The mix sounds pretty good to me. :)
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Thanks! Do you hear (in your musical mind) a distant vocal of both voices in the verse or chorus? That's a good idea. Thanks for the suggestions and comments.
 
aspiring said:
Hey, that is a nice song.

The only improvement I can think of is some kind of increased dynamics. I seem to hear too much "constantness" in volume/energy in HRs these days (including mine), which is probably a result of too much "automation" at our hands. It'd be nice to hear some fluctuation in this song.

Interesting comment on the "autoplay". I don't find that a problem -- I like it. If I'm going to a music site, I expect to hear music. If I went to a text site and it returned a button saying "click to read what is on this site" I think that would be annoying.

Have fun
aspiring
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Thanks for the comments and suggestion. I think what your talking about as far as constantness is the compression that is so easily misused and i am guilty of that. At one point, you like the "glueing together" of the instruments for a fuller sound but then you sacrifice dynamics. It's always a tough call when you've gone over the edge. Thanks for the wake-up.

Steve
 
Gorty said:
The female vocals are sweet nectar, the male vocals are a little pitchy here and there, not much, just a few little areas.
The guitar in the verses has a nice warm welcoming tone, but the guitar in the chorus (slightly distorted guitar) is very harsh. The highs need to be dragged down and boost the lows to mid lows just to take the edge off.
The guitar panned to the left during the verses would benefit the whole mix if it was boosted in volume by a few db's. The whole mix seems to be over-balanced on the right hand side.
Also the heavier guitar that is played during the chorus would open the tune up if that was panned hard left "AND" hard right. It would give the whole mix some strength in the body of the song.
The guitar tone in the solo however was great, very emotive, I would of liked it to stretch out a little longer!

A nice relaxing tune opensky, I enjoyed it very much. It has a slight Pearl Jam type aura to it, which is a good thing! :)

Thanx for sharing.

Gorty :)
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Thanks for really good observations. I'm making my notes for the remix so thanks a lot. BTW, thanks for the comment about Pearl Jam, I love them.
 
opensky said:
Thanks! Do you hear (in your musical mind) a distant vocal of both voices in the verse or chorus? That's a good idea. Thanks for the suggestions and comments.
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:D I hear the distant vocal in different places. You would have to work it out to as you like it.

You are very welkom. :)
 
Nice tunes and words.

The biggest suggestions I would make are to have the lead vocal be the lead.

To me this might make a better impact on the song.
 
follow up, i put "I fall down" on a mix cd which i've been listening to quite a bit. The song is very catchy, Some comments would be that i feel the guitar in the chorus is to distorted and sounds a bit muddy. the snare could do with some bite, maybe a little compression. also how about the drummer starts off playing a rim shot in the verse?

I'd love to hear some string pads in this song too.
 
KEVIN1600 said:
Sounds Great! What was this recorded on? :) :) :p
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Thanks Kevin! I used the following in my recording process of this song:

Gateway 3.4 hyperthread
Cubase SX2
Delta 66 I/O break out box
Waves bundle
Vox Tonelab SE
Line 6 AX212
Guitar Rig 2
Beta Monkey drum loops
Fender Strat plus w/DG EMG p/u's
Martin C-14RGTE
Har-Bal 2.0
 
David Artis said:
Nice tunes and words.

The biggest suggestions I would make are to have the lead vocal be the lead.

To me this might make a better impact on the song.
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Thanks for your idea and opinion.
 
fasterthanu said:
follow up, i put "I fall down" on a mix cd which i've been listening to quite a bit. The song is very catchy, Some comments would be that i feel the guitar in the chorus is to distorted and sounds a bit muddy. the snare could do with some bite, maybe a little compression. also how about the drummer starts off playing a rim shot in the verse?

I'd love to hear some string pads in this song too.
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Thanks for the feedback and suggestions. That's a good idea about the rim shot in the verse beginning. I agree with you about the distortion/muddiness in the chorus. I plan on improving that in the soon-to-be done remix. thanks again.
 
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