hoping to get some feedback from you all about my songs

[Leslie Ell]

Hey,

I am a long time reader of these boards but until now have never registered.

I am very grateful to many of you for some fine information I have received when I had questions about something. I have learned to value the opinions posted by the users of this site.

Well this time I would like to get your input about my songs. I have them posted here Leslie Williams Singles on NoWhere Radio

Thanks

An *old* newbie
Leslie Ell

 

[jamal buchet]

hey i tried to listen to this...now mind you it was only on "low-fi"..that said the guitar sounds fine but the vocals are almost unintelligible...WAY to loud or something..just so you know....

try downloading this yourself in lo-fi maybe its just my crappy computer....but i suspect it not...

make this sound better and you will get a ton of feedback!!!

good luck

jamal

 

[jjtcorsair]

I responded to another one of your posts about lyric writing. I've just listened to both of your posted songs. You have potential as a songwriter don't get me wrong. I think you need to write and re-write your lyrics. They are somewhat simplistic and lack imagery. As far as your recordings go, the arrangements are distracting, especially the drums- stop playing so many fills. The guitars need to be simpler too. Pare everything down to it's basic components. You have a very nice voice. Please keep working on it, listen to your favorites and analyze them. Good songwriting is a marriage of poetry, melody, rhythm and imagery and most of all, hard work.

Keep at it,
Jon

ps- I'm no Paul Simon, just pretending to be.

 

[Melody Lane]

I replied to another post of yours about your lyrics for "are simple songs coming back again". Then I found this site and went and listened to your songs. "You were always there for me" is a really good song, but your backup needs a little help.
I mostly sing backup and the most important thing is being able to harmonize correctly. All in all they were both really good.

 

[Leslie Ell]

Thanks for listening Jamal... uhm not to be a smart *ss, but try turning down the volume?

Thanks JJT.. I do appreciate your opinion. you think the drums are distracting? I thought I was making them too simplistic.. it IS a computer generated sound and I had to write them note for note, and well... I am NOT a drummer by any means... Hey are there any drummers out there want to colllaborate?... The whole recording was done in a day.. although I do have other version of the song that are quite a bit different than this one... I am not really satisfied with any of it yet.. including the vocals but that is what this forum is all about... putting it out there and getting feedback...


Thank you Melody. that was my wife singing back up on the first verse... I did the other back up at the end and also on the other song... I would like to hear some of your stuff... have you ever collaborated over the internet?

 

[stump]

well I listened to the first song on there... and while it's not my cup of tea musically, I really do like the lyrics and I think with a little tweaking that song could sound really good. I like your voice by the way too. It reminded me of what Roger Waters would've sounded like if he'd been from Texas.