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B.SABBATH

B.SABBATH

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hello

I am in need of being ripped about my vocals..

This is my first time recording a nylon string guitar...and the song eventually changes...it gets a bit heavier..

It's a simple tune..

Please spare no insult... I find it quite funny...:D


Thanks as always...and please let me know if it's bad, because I wrote it for someone...

I have no problem redoing any part of this, and I plan on redoing the drums if there are negative comments about them....

rip the vocals hardest please..:)

thanks if you bother...


'dead man walking'

www.nowhereradio.com/samij/singles
 
phew!! I've got a lot of things to say about this one. Very nice music.... I'll be baaack!!
 
Simple question... do the vocals sound like ass?:D

C'mon, you can tell me, I wont be offended in the least
 
First of all, I LOVE those heavy guitars. You should pay attention to the drum track much more, since it's a straight beat the whole song. At least put some changes when it gets heavy. The effect would be more dramatic. But you wanted vocal comments. Ok, I can't find anything wrong with them, honestly. I just don't like the alice in chains type vocals in every song. At least you don't use them in the whole song, but anyway. The nylon guitars are nicely mixed. The song moods vary dramatically, as usual in your songs. The song could use at least one part more somewhere. It tends to get a bit monotonous. It's an ok song, but not as good as your usual output, but I guess it's kinda hard to outdo yourself constantly.
 
Hey Dude,

I think I heard some extraneous low end in the intro, could just be me.
As for the vox, I'd say you can sing just fine. Accept that little fact, don't take it for granted, don't let it define your mixes, keep what you know is solid in you voice and push the potential of all other front. Enough worries with your vox.
I dig the mellow portions of the tune but, felt it was a tad choppy and in want of flow and reason in the transitions (What a bloated and self-righteous opinion that was!). You're quite versital and use this to a colorful and fresh advantage.
So...who did you write the tune for and what does it all mean?

Peace and inner evolution,
Theron.
 
Cranky One - I was worried it would get tooo repetitive... this tune was an accident that happened when I was testing out levels.. I just put a preset drum beat on and went with it.. The drums are very boring, I'm not sure if it's worth redoing or just work on a new one. I should have used a better drum beat...It's too basic...I should have known.... Thanks as always for the comments..





theron - The begining seemed bassy? I thought I may have pushed it too hard, thanks for confirming that. you thought the tune was "in want of flow." yeah, I hear ya... I was making up the parts as I was recording it.. I didn't really know how it was gonna turn out...As with most of my tunes lately, It doesn't make sense. Appreciate the comments bro..





mixmkr - I eat pizza about 5 times a week:D
 
Wow. THe vocals are really quite terrible. Here you have a good mix and clear sound, and then the vocals come in and sound like a karaoke mic into a karaoke preamp, using the karaoke echo. Let me ask, is this what you did?
 
ok sam machine...

I like the sound of your midi pno... came out nice. I'd would have panned the nylon off to the right a bit (but not as much like the upcoming acoustic part) during the pno, to keep it from being on top of it....maybe with some reverb off to the left..to create a fake stereo. The next acoustic (:30)coming in sounds nice and synthetic....I actually like that sound. I'll bet it is a Godin...eh? ..or at least it sounds like one. Your nylon soloing on top of it needs a tad cleaning up, but is very nice note choice. Good production with the vocals, sans bass, drums, starting out...then the 'band' kicks in, the next round. The drums sound just fine to me at this point. Nice and simple work just fine. And damn...ya got the vox volume up!!..wadda ya know!! I hear those invisable backwards(?or quick fade in/outs) cymbals...nice!. The second verse needs something new introduced...even something very little...like a percusion diddly, slight string sound change...ya get the point....even a drum roll between verses. Again, at 2:05..the nylon is not up to par with your gtr playing....nice, but the timing seems a bit rushed. AND IS COMPLETELY OVERSHAWDOWED by the kick ass lead and chords, vox coming in!!!!!!!!!!! The lead gtr ventures in some interesting areas and sounds. Just great. and your 'insecure' vocal abilities kick butt here too. Nice Randy Rhodes riffing there too on the rhythm crunchies/ harmonic feedback whammy stuff. The transistion at 3:13 sucks...like a bad tape splice. I'd even take a cross fade over what you did..but I understand you wanting to do it....as the idea of returning to something done earlier, to end the song is good, but isn't played out properly for some reason...it's like you just cut and pasted, then faded...and faded too early at that. Oh..the drums during your kick butt part lack too....As stated, they sound ok with me on the mellow parts, but lack when you get motivated.
You're a nice kid to write a song for someone, btw!:D
I like all your stuff, and this is starting out to be another killer sam attack..
 
Cyan Jaguar - Hey thanks! Thats exactly the honesty I wanted...I took the song off nowhereradio to continue working on it.... No it's not karaoke.:D ... I think the people around me just tell me what they think I want to hear....glad you didn't.... thanks



mixmkr - It took you long enough! :D (just kiddin') Thanks a lot... I took it off nowhere to work on it.. I wanted to see how it was coming so far... I'll probably re-sing it and redo the drums.. I figured I'd be taking it off the page after a few comments.. I didn't copy and paste the end though... I did actually play it again even though it doesn't sound like it... As I said before, I have become somewhat codependent on the feedback here.. I put songs here before I do anything with them just so I can find out the truth.... and it is not always pretty.... I really have no business playing a nylon string :D .. but I will try to do better...This song started as a level test and 'I thought' it became something halfway decent...Thanks again man...maybe I'll repost it in a few days after I try and fix it...

Thanks again dudes... Your ears were appreciated as always..:)


I might be back with this song...mainly because the electric guitar solo... I don't think I could capture that again... I kept the 3rd take..

Have a good one !:D :cool:


BTW - I can't seem to get my ideas in order lately.... So the feedback is sssssssssoooooooooo appreciated. Thanks for sitting throught that..:D
 
I went back, and wanted to see if I could resurrect it via telepathy...but I was unsuccessful... I really wanted to tell you about a new measurement system I'm devising, and try it out on you first Mr. guinea P. I think you ought to remove all the other songs and put up something like N-sync... I tried mind control on doing that for you too...but alas, you survived...

so..in "the hole situation" at 2:35...what did you really mean??

I mean......zzzzz "oh....what the fff.........what is this????"

ok potty thoughts....get that song back up there...I'll call Cleo...she'll do it...

mmmmm ...cold pizza...simply marv-O-lous...
 
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