Did I accomplish what I was going for?

[7string]

Ok, I don't know why but I'm feeling really leary of posting this song. It's a song that I wrote about trying to write a song. I'll tell you up front that with the first two twin solo's I was going for a very haunting sound. Lots of verb. But if it's too much let me know. And any other thoughts/ideas you have will be much appreciated. It ends abruptly because it actually leads into the next song. And there is a 25 second intro that is basically nothing but noise, i.e., backwards guitars, shit like that. But this version picks up at the beginning proper.

 

[producerkid]

Wow, I like this song alot, but the recording is a bit lacking. Just want to point out a few things I noticed:

1) The drums are really sketchy. The drums sound really off time every now and again and really electric for this type of song.
2) I'm not quite sure if the chorus on the electrics is suitable for this tune.
3) The acoustics need to come up quite a bit in the mix and could use a helping hand from some compression.
4) The reverb on the vox is way too much. Back it off a good bit if not completely. The song is very Floyddy, IMO, and I think dryer vocals would fit better.
5) I think you should try using a reverb on the master effect bus instead of an insert effect. This will make the effect spread over the stereo field instead of being only where the instrument is in the mix.

The reverb on the solos is really cool and fits the part, but I think it would be more effective still yet if it were a master effect rather than an inserted effect. I really like this song alot and think it could really be a killer track if these and some other things were addressed or at least looked over. Just trying to help. Nice work though, man.

BTW, I think the ideas are there and you've almost got the sound that I believe you were trying for.

 

[chugheshc]

nice stuff,

+1 on the too much reverb, I can't speak with as many specifics as producerkid, but yeah a little strong on the reverb.

I can't really put my finger on it, but it seems like there is a little too
much lack of treble in the vocal parts; when the lead comes in it really sticks
out compared to the vocals, some of this is probably what you were looking for, but it seems too abrupt.

cheers.
Chris

 

[Garry Sharp]

Agree with everything producerkid said. You are almost there, and it is a very nice idea. You have a very commercial voice, reminds me of Neil Diamond (hope you don't mind me saying that). A bit less of everything, especially the electric stuff in the chorus, and better (fuller) drums. The bass line is very plodding and weighs it down.
The instrumental break with the sirens in and all that is excellent.

 

[7string]

Wow, I like this song alot, but the recording is a bit lacking. Just want to point out a few things I noticed:

1) The drums are really sketchy. The drums sound really off time every now and again and really electric for this type of song.
2) I'm not quite sure if the chorus on the electrics is suitable for this tune.
3) The acoustics need to come up quite a bit in the mix and could use a helping hand from some compression.
4) The reverb on the vox is way too much. Back it off a good bit if not completely. The song is very Floyddy, IMO, and I think dryer vocals would fit better.
5) I think you should try using a reverb on the master effect bus instead of an insert effect. This will make the effect spread over the stereo field instead of being only where the instrument is in the mix.

The reverb on the solos is really cool and fits the part, but I think it would be more effective still yet if it were a master effect rather than an inserted effect. I really like this song alot and think it could really be a killer track if these and some other things were addressed or at least looked over. Just trying to help. Nice work though, man.

BTW, I think the ideas are there and you've almost got the sound that I believe you were trying for.

Thanks for the tips! I've been tweaking on this for a year now. I don't think I'll ever get it to a 'finished' point. But for now I'm going to leave it alone for a few days and then start fresh with some of your pointers. Thanks again!

 

[7string]

Agree with everything producerkid said. You are almost there, and it is a very nice idea. You have a very commercial voice, reminds me of Neil Diamond (hope you don't mind me saying that). A bit less of everything, especially the electric stuff in the chorus, and better (fuller) drums. The bass line is very plodding and weighs it down.
The instrumental break with the sirens in and all that is excellent.

Neil Diamond?!?!?! I can hit you from here ya know. Where I live there are no musicians (including myself!) so I'm stuck with the Alesis. I'd love it if some drummer out there decided to collaborate. HINT HINT I'm not real clear on what you mean by "the electric stuff in the chorus." I thought the bass guitar was a bit high in the mix so I backed it off a bit. And the sirens were added last night. I wanted to bury them in the mix with some verb but again probably overdid it. I definitely need some new speakers. These Altec Lansing 3 way computer speakers that I have just don't cut it for mixing.

 

[producerkid]

Well if you must know i'm a drummer and if you want to whore tha bandwidth to give me the tracks to the song I'll try and throw some drums down to it. I'll even give you a mix of the the song how I heard it in my head so you can kind of get a feel for some of the things I pointed out. By all means this is YOUR song and I won't take control but even I like to hear what other people can do with my ideas. Just PM me about the details and if you have any messenger services you can IM me on one just use the little icons by my rank and location.

It may take a little while for me to be able to track the drums as I am majorly backed up with projects right now but I'll deffinately do it.

the kid

 

[7string]

Well if you must know i'm a drummer and if you want to whore tha bandwidth to give me the tracks to the song I'll try and throw some drums down to it. I'll even give you a mix of the the song how I heard it in my head so you can kind of get a feel for some of the things I pointed out. By all means this is YOUR song and I won't take control but even I like to hear what other people can do with my ideas. Just PM me about the details and if you have any messenger services you can IM me on one just use the little icons by my rank and location.

It may take a little while for me to be able to track the drums as I am majorly backed up with projects right now but I'll deffinately do it.

the kid

Are you kidding? I'd love to hear what somebody else can do with this. I'd love to hear some real drums on it too. I'll get with you. Thanks!