Wow, I like this song alot, but the recording is a bit lacking. Just want to point out a few things I noticed:
1) The drums are really sketchy. The drums sound really off time every now and again and really electric for this type of song.
2) I'm not quite sure if the chorus on the electrics is suitable for this tune.
3) The acoustics need to come up quite a bit in the mix and could use a helping hand from some compression.
4) The reverb on the vox is way too much. Back it off a good bit if not completely. The song is very Floyddy, IMO, and I think dryer vocals would fit better.
5) I think you should try using a reverb on the master effect bus instead of an insert effect. This will make the effect spread over the stereo field instead of being only where the instrument is in the mix.
The reverb on the solos is really cool and fits the part, but I think it would be more effective still yet if it were a master effect rather than an inserted effect. I really like this song alot and think it could really be a killer track if these and some other things were addressed or at least looked over. Just trying to help.

Nice work though, man.
BTW, I think the ideas are there and you've almost got the sound that I believe you were trying for.