rayc
retroreprobate
I'll join in next month.
up-fiddler
Taming the World--for now
You may post on Monday!!!!!
Monday is the deadline. Try to get your entry posted by midnight local time. If you don't have the music ready remember that it is fine to post lyrics without music. If your music is ready then remember to post a link to where we can hear it. The mixes should be raw so that you can change them after the critique process is complete. I have had the lyrics ready but the music just isn't there yet. I have a guitar/vox take that I will put up if I wake up without inspiration tomorrow.
Daves Studio
Dave's Blog
Monday is the deadline. Try to get your entry posted by midnight local time. If you don't have the music ready remember that it is fine to post lyrics without music. If your music is ready then remember to post a link to where we can hear it. The mixes should be raw so that you can change them after the critique process is complete. I have had the lyrics ready but the music just isn't there yet. I have a guitar/vox take that I will put up if I wake up without inspiration tomorrow.
Daves Studio
Dave's Blog
cnix
New member
Your original post said songs are due April 1, thats Tuesday and not Monday. I believe we need some clarification on the date.
Charlie
PS Boy do I need all the time I can get
Charlie
PS Boy do I need all the time I can get
up-fiddler
Taming the World--for now
It looks like 'My bad'
Tomorrow at midnight will work just fine. Today will also be fine for those with a dominant impatience gene. (Like me
)
Tomorrow at midnight will work just fine. Today will also be fine for those with a dominant impatience gene. (Like me
)
Whatmysay
New member
Here it is folks 22.22 HK time
Its called Vampire Love
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6416395
It is as ropey as the arse end of a pineapple, but I really like it and it was one that wrote itself.
Look forward to feedback
Vampire Love
1
She was in love, she had a taste for danger
The smiling stranger caught her
It was the demon in his heart, the devil in his touch
That made her sigh
2
She took him, gave her heart to feed him
Her bleeding body wastes away
It was the hope that she might save, this angle from the grave
That made her stay
Ch
She loves the vampire love, his love
She loves the vampire love, and she’d give her blood
To make him stay
3
He left her bare, battered, bruised and naked
God forsaken in bloodstains
But the fire of their sins, the coldness of his skin
Eased her pain
Ch
Mid 8
With only pain for company
In a world where no one stays
It becomes a self-fulfilling prophecy
You feel the pain
You breathe again
Ch
Its called Vampire Love
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6416395
It is as ropey as the arse end of a pineapple, but I really like it and it was one that wrote itself.
Look forward to feedback
Vampire Love
1
She was in love, she had a taste for danger
The smiling stranger caught her
It was the demon in his heart, the devil in his touch
That made her sigh
2
She took him, gave her heart to feed him
Her bleeding body wastes away
It was the hope that she might save, this angle from the grave
That made her stay
Ch
She loves the vampire love, his love
She loves the vampire love, and she’d give her blood
To make him stay
3
He left her bare, battered, bruised and naked
God forsaken in bloodstains
But the fire of their sins, the coldness of his skin
Eased her pain
Ch
Mid 8
With only pain for company
In a world where no one stays
It becomes a self-fulfilling prophecy
You feel the pain
You breathe again
Ch
J
jdblessing1970
New member
"When You Get to Where You're Going"
Here's yet another long story song by yours truly. I'm not a singer/musician so any music I may have for it in my head stays in my head and is prone to change from time to time. Also, as I warned earlier, this is a first person from a third person kinda song. I just couldn't find a way to write it any other way, and didn't want to drop out of the challenge.
When You Get to Where You’re Going
©2008 J. Blessing
1
She came to him one morning, said, Honey, please sit down
I so desperately need to smile but lately all I do is frown
Things have gotten hazy and I feel I’ve lost my place
I hate asking you to leave but I just need some space.
2
It’s not that I don’t love you; it’s that I don’t know who I am
We got married way too soon; it wasn’t what I had planned
So now we need to take the time that we didn’t take before
To get to know each other before our marriage can be restored
He said
3
A few months down the road she said we need to talk again
Things were so much better in Ft. Worth, so I’m moving back again
The children were happier there and I had my career
But no matter how much I try I can’t create that here
She said
4
He said This isn’t the kind of leaving that I can take for long
I have learned that without you near, I am not that strong.
I know that you will do what you feel is best
I’ll give you the time and my love, and let God do the rest
Here's yet another long story song by yours truly. I'm not a singer/musician so any music I may have for it in my head stays in my head and is prone to change from time to time. Also, as I warned earlier, this is a first person from a third person kinda song. I just couldn't find a way to write it any other way, and didn't want to drop out of the challenge.
When You Get to Where You’re Going
©2008 J. Blessing
1
She came to him one morning, said, Honey, please sit down
I so desperately need to smile but lately all I do is frown
Things have gotten hazy and I feel I’ve lost my place
I hate asking you to leave but I just need some space.
2
It’s not that I don’t love you; it’s that I don’t know who I am
We got married way too soon; it wasn’t what I had planned
So now we need to take the time that we didn’t take before
To get to know each other before our marriage can be restored
He said
(Pre-chorus)
I’m taking my things with me
But my heart stays here with you
I’ll give you all the time you need
To do what you need to do
I’m taking my things with me
But my heart stays here with you
I’ll give you all the time you need
To do what you need to do
(Chorus)When you get to where you’re going
And you find out who you are
Let me know, I love you so
I won’t be very far.
And you find out who you are
Let me know, I love you so
I won’t be very far.
A few months down the road she said we need to talk again
Things were so much better in Ft. Worth, so I’m moving back again
The children were happier there and I had my career
But no matter how much I try I can’t create that here
She said
I’m taking the children with me
And we’re keeping your last name
Yes, I know, that once we go
Things will never be the same
And we’re keeping your last name
Yes, I know, that once we go
Things will never be the same
When I get to where I’m going
If you tell me you still care
I’ll call for you; you’re welcome, too.
Come and join me there.
If you tell me you still care
I’ll call for you; you’re welcome, too.
Come and join me there.
4
He said This isn’t the kind of leaving that I can take for long
I have learned that without you near, I am not that strong.
I know that you will do what you feel is best
I’ll give you the time and my love, and let God do the rest
You’re taking my heart with you
Where ever you may go
No matter how much time may pass
I’ll love you, you know.
Where ever you may go
No matter how much time may pass
I’ll love you, you know.
When you get to where you’re going
If you decide that you still care
Give me a ring, I’ll drop everything,
And come running to you there.
If you decide that you still care
Give me a ring, I’ll drop everything,
And come running to you there.
Yonce N Mild
Voice of Sanity
Perfect Time
I won't be able to post any audio for about a week since my mic is at my brother's house. I have (crappy) instrumentation done just need to record vox. Anyway here it be.
He sits and waits alone
with burning eyes and troubled bones
he holds a broken megaphone
with a thousand tales that no one's known
The rhythm in his mind
The rhythm in his mind
it never shows he never shows it
He's keeping perfect time
He's keeping perfect time
but no one knows they never know it
He sings a lonely song
verses of penitence
and summers come and gone
these wounds were open for so long
maybe a better man
could have carried on
The rhythm in his mind
The rhythm in his mind
it never shows he never shows it
He's keeping perfect time
He's keeping perfect time
but no one knows they never know it
He plays an old guitar
Dusty from the road and smoky from the bars
He'll never be a star
but his simple melody can melt the hardest heart
And then she comes along
she sits down next to him and says I love your song
and still the rhythm's strong
She stares into his eyes as he plays on and on
the rhythm in his mind
the rhythm in his mind
he finally shows and now he shows it
He's keeping perfect time
He's keeping perfect time
She really knows she really knows it
I won't be able to post any audio for about a week since my mic is at my brother's house. I have (crappy) instrumentation done just need to record vox. Anyway here it be.
He sits and waits alone
with burning eyes and troubled bones
he holds a broken megaphone
with a thousand tales that no one's known
The rhythm in his mind
The rhythm in his mind
it never shows he never shows it
He's keeping perfect time
He's keeping perfect time
but no one knows they never know it
He sings a lonely song
verses of penitence
and summers come and gone
these wounds were open for so long
maybe a better man
could have carried on
The rhythm in his mind
The rhythm in his mind
it never shows he never shows it
He's keeping perfect time
He's keeping perfect time
but no one knows they never know it
He plays an old guitar
Dusty from the road and smoky from the bars
He'll never be a star
but his simple melody can melt the hardest heart
And then she comes along
she sits down next to him and says I love your song
and still the rhythm's strong
She stares into his eyes as he plays on and on
the rhythm in his mind
the rhythm in his mind
he finally shows and now he shows it
He's keeping perfect time
He's keeping perfect time
She really knows she really knows it
up-fiddler
Taming the World--for now
Here is up-fiddler's......
The link to the music will give you an earful. Your eyeful is in the lyrics below. It is my hope that you don't get a belly full. (Because it's awe-full.)
The Dream
c.Dave Morehouse 2008
He don’t care
Where she’s been tonight…no
The fact that she is there
Makes his world seem right.
And it feels exactly like a dream
Is racing through his head.
She’s so happy
Just to be back home with him…yeah
She cooks his breakfast
While the morning sun’s still dim.
And it feels exactly like a dream
Is racing through her head.
She served her country
A thousand days and nights
He’s deeply grateful
She’s returned all right.
She reads a letter
From a comrade overseas.
He tries to tell her
Bad things always come in threes.
Exactly like the dream
That’s locked up in their heads.
He can’t help her
But he feels that he must try.
He says a soldier
Still has every right to cry.
And it feels exactly like a dream.
She served her country
A thousand days and nights
He’s deeply grateful
That she’s returned all right.
And it feels exactly like a dream
That’s burned into their heads.
Off to sleep now
Time to visit all your dreams.
Of a time when
There will be no death machines.
The world will be exactly like the dream
The world will be exactly like the dream
That’s in their heads.
It's in their heads.
Dave's Blog
Dave's Studio
The link to the music will give you an earful. Your eyeful is in the lyrics below. It is my hope that you don't get a belly full. (Because it's awe-full.)
The Dream
c.Dave Morehouse 2008
He don’t care
Where she’s been tonight…no
The fact that she is there
Makes his world seem right.
And it feels exactly like a dream
Is racing through his head.
She’s so happy
Just to be back home with him…yeah
She cooks his breakfast
While the morning sun’s still dim.
And it feels exactly like a dream
Is racing through her head.
She served her country
A thousand days and nights
He’s deeply grateful
She’s returned all right.
She reads a letter
From a comrade overseas.
He tries to tell her
Bad things always come in threes.
Exactly like the dream
That’s locked up in their heads.
He can’t help her
But he feels that he must try.
He says a soldier
Still has every right to cry.
And it feels exactly like a dream.
She served her country
A thousand days and nights
He’s deeply grateful
That she’s returned all right.
And it feels exactly like a dream
That’s burned into their heads.
Off to sleep now
Time to visit all your dreams.
Of a time when
There will be no death machines.
The world will be exactly like the dream
The world will be exactly like the dream
That’s in their heads.
It's in their heads.
Dave's Blog
Dave's Studio
cnix
New member
OK, I'm in again and as they say at weddings, for better or worse! My song this month is He's The One and is a song that possibly with some work it could be used in our Praise Band or choir. Now it is just acoustic, but when complete will have bass, couple electric guitars (I can hear ebow on this one) drums and some additional keyboard stuff. Oh yeah, a real singer.
Hopefully this link will get you a listen. This is an updated link.
http://www.songramp.com/mod/mps/viewtrack.php?trackid=64020
Now for the lyrics.
He’s The One
Verse 1
He’s Lord of all Creation and a friend.
He’s the first and last, beginning and the end.
His Mercy flows His Glory shows.
Salvation comes, to all who know.
Chorus
He’s the One
He came to earth as man, The Promise of God’s plan, He’s the One
He’s the One
He came to save the lost, through the power of the cross, He’s the One
He’s Jesus Christ, The Savior, He’s God’s Son
He’s the One
Verse 2
He took the blame, He bore the shame.
The sacrifice for all, who answer His call
His Grace is free, In victory
He is the Open Door, to live forever more
Chorus
Bridge
He broke the chains of every sin, so all can come and enter in.
His Kingdom that forever reigns, Blessed be His Name.
Chorus
Hopefully this link will get you a listen. This is an updated link.
http://www.songramp.com/mod/mps/viewtrack.php?trackid=64020
Now for the lyrics.
He’s The One
Verse 1
He’s Lord of all Creation and a friend.
He’s the first and last, beginning and the end.
His Mercy flows His Glory shows.
Salvation comes, to all who know.
Chorus
He’s the One
He came to earth as man, The Promise of God’s plan, He’s the One
He’s the One
He came to save the lost, through the power of the cross, He’s the One
He’s Jesus Christ, The Savior, He’s God’s Son
He’s the One
Verse 2
He took the blame, He bore the shame.
The sacrifice for all, who answer His call
His Grace is free, In victory
He is the Open Door, to live forever more
Chorus
Bridge
He broke the chains of every sin, so all can come and enter in.
His Kingdom that forever reigns, Blessed be His Name.
Chorus
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ido1957
9K Gold Member
The link to the music will give you an earful. Your eyeful is in the lyrics below. It is my hope that you don't get a belly full. (Because it's awe-full.)
The Dream
c.Dave Morehouse 2008
Good tune Dave. I like this musically and lyrically; the minimal backups (bass/drums) surrounded by lead riffs is cool. I'm not a fan of the current war, so I can identify with the lyrics here. Classic style of verse/chorus/bridge works well.
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ido1957
9K Gold Member
The link takes me to a song called You Are Love, not He's the One....
Can you clarify the link/song/etc and I will listen once He's the One is available.
ido1957
9K Gold Member
Good writing on this one too... The music suits the theme of the song, kind of dark and dangerous. I can smell the candles burning in the candelabra while this is playing....
Great...!
cnix
New member
You guys are gonna have to help me on this. When I click on the link, I go straight to the song, He's The One. Now, this may be because my computer is always logged into the site. If you guys are not getting the song, someone tell me what to do to make it available for everyone.
Thanks
Charlie
cnix
New member
I think I have everything in order now. Did the FAQ and found some answers. Now I know some of you are wishing I did not fix the problem, but I'm here baby, deal with it!!
ido1957
9K Gold Member
Good song cnix. I like the repeating/echoing lines and the harmonies a lot. The lyrics are pretty straight forward - JC is the one! Cool!
