New original tune (Distract) Rock/alternative

[Flyguitarfish]

This was kind of a different one for me. It’s a quick two minute song without a chorus. It’s about my experience witnessing the invention of the internet and its effects on our lives (mostly detrimental). It’s broken into 4 short sections I’m labeling:

1) Discovery and ignorance
2) So far so good
3) Rising problem
4) It’s too late

We’ve all seen good things come from it’s invention, but we’ve probably all seen it damage a lot of people and often our own relationships as everyone is hooked on it and ignoring the things that matter most…including each other. We had no idea the can of worms we opened with this invention and how it would change us and the world.

And of course, mixing thoughts & tips are appreciated!

Lyrics:

Distract

1. Discovery and ignorance

It was circa 1994; we wanted more
A conversation to the other shores; we wanted more
With arms wide open we left open our doors

2. So far so good?

We found old friends
Did you hear what she said?
But progress always did
Break the weakest of us

3. Rising problem

I can see the air like rising tides
I’m alone again they’re all inside
Hasn’t rained but looks like it might try
Watch their eyes as angels cry

4. It’s too late

Degraded, Electrically
It’s so compelling, and controlling
My competition, replaces me
And so connected, but distantly

 

[RFR]

That song is depressing.

And I mean that as a compliment. It’s very good as it conveys the hopeless mess we’ve gotten ourselves into by having unleashed and embraced the monster that we’re all dependent on to a greater or lesser degree.

And that’s depressing. So, good job.

At the same time, your explanation of what the song was about I’m sure helped. It might not have had the same impact without that. Who knows……

Still, good tune.

 

[Bulls Hit]

Really cool melody. Kind of a post punk 90s vibe. Mix is good on headphones, guitars are clear and punchy. I like the composition, good song

 

[Papanate]

Vocals are pretty cool - great vibe - drums seem to be not in tune to the song - you have a good mix balance - well written although its a little stilted.

 

[BTStudio]

Yah nice song. Love the bass line. Muted guitar is nice. Mix seems pretty decent on a good set of buds. I like how it opens up as it progresses
Cheers

 

[Flyguitarfish]

That song is depressing.

And I mean that as a compliment. It’s very good as it conveys the hopeless mess we’ve gotten ourselves into by having unleashed and embraced the monster that we’re all dependent on to a greater or lesser degree.

And that’s depressing. So, good job.

At the same time, your explanation of what the song was about I’m sure helped. It might not have had the same impact without that. Who knows……

Still, good tune.

Awesome, glad I could help you feel depressed through my music! lol!

But really, good to know it translated. I definitely like to keep my lyrics more on the obscure side and open to some interpretation so I knew a little explanation was necessary. It’s more interesting to me to say “A conversation to the other shores” instead of “we chatted on AOL with kids in Maine”
and
“We found old friends. Did you hear what she said?” Instead of “Facebook is great at maintaining old relationships but the gossip and negativity are terrible!” Etc!

Thank you for your comment!

 

[Flyguitarfish]

Really cool melody. Kind of a post punk 90s vibe. Mix is good on headphones, guitars are clear and punchy. I like the composition, good song

I really appreciate the comment and compliments. I decided to not be so lazy and put a mic on my real amps this time (single JB strat>Archer IKON>PRS Archon>Mesa 2x12 recto cab>Audix D2). I also felt it was clearer and punchier. Real amps are just better! Thank you!

 

[Flyguitarfish]

Vocals are pretty cool - great vibe - drums seem to be not in tune to the song - you have a good mix balance - well written although its a little stilted.

Thanks for the comment!

I never tune my drums to a certain key or note: I just make sure they sound good on their own. I should try it some time! I wrote and recorded all the music in a couple hours on Saturday. Tuning drums would take half of that!…probably not if I was good at it!

Is there a specific drum that sounds off to you? Listening back I’m going to guess the rack tom? I could easily EQ a little of the tone out of it and make it a little quieter. Might solve the issue if it’s distracting.

Stilted…great word! I agree it’s a bit choppy and disconnected. Mostly at the transition to the last part. I have an idea that might help. I’ll keep you posted!

Thanks!

 

[Flyguitarfish]

Yah nice song. Love the bass line. Muted guitar is nice. Mix seems pretty decent on a good set of buds. I like how it opens up as it progresses
Cheers

Always appreciate the comments! Any constructive criticism? Thanks BTS!

 

[BTStudio]

Always appreciate the comments! Any constructive criticism? Thanks BTS!

Not really but on the production side of things I wouldn’t mind an instrumental/lead guitar part before the last verse. Something with a little anger in it would work for me lol. That could stretch her out to a few minutes also
Cheers.