What am i doing wrong here.

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jimmys69 said:
Luck wished! :)
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thank you for the hatred jimmy i need it to get through..... I will send you a something something pretty soon if you know what i mean give me time, I ALSO RECORDED VOCALS FOR THE ONE NU-METAL INSTRUMENTAL HERE COMES SOME SADNESS TO YOUR LIFES MAN.
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HERE is vocals.
I want to understand you
dont have the time for that
i am sorry i am sorry i am sorry
now what i am supposed to do
it seems it fits like it should.
like it matters anymore or anyway.

and its like drunk fights with my mom growing up... from her perspective i think or mine. not too sure. just came to my head.
 
I am back guys with an amazing announcement i have something brand new for you guys coming up pretty soon and i cannot wait to talk to you all again. Good bye for now bye.
 
Phrasemaker said:
"What am I doing wrong here" Firstly you've posted your lyrics with very little introduction or explanation. You might want to get someone to read through them with you, as you have incomplete words and others used in the wrong context, as well as missing articles which means that big parts of your lyrics make no sense, which is not ideal for sparsely written material as statements which actually say something will connect far better. It's not sufficient to shoe horn whatever word fits regardless of its relevance to anything else in the lines. You'll get more response to your video if you put in a little time to get your ten posts so you can embed it, as going on a trek to listen to something based upon what you have posted here is stretching credibility a tad in my opinion.

If you don't feel technically able to respond to posts of more experienced folk then perhaps listen to their work and say honestly what you like or dislike about it in a polite way. Also stating that some say your stuff is brilliant is probably not a great turn on when people are reading your posts, but to be fair you did say that some people complain, which does balance the statement.

It's a two way street working on a forum, if you put a little time in you'll get answers to your questions. You might not like all of them, but people would have given up their own time to provide them.

All the best

Tim
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WOW! Applause !!!!!!
 
ifieiairi said:
Thank you for the weird welcome. I am kinda an emotional person. People know me as the most emotional person, to the point where i avoid judgement and conflict. I hate it. I never judge anyone.
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Your emotional and jimmy is "ignorant", and RAMI's thinks your lyrics come from Ryan Tedder, and Phrasemaster cant work out your lyrics who the only person that thinks somethings wrong with them is you (which is weird by the way) WELCOME TO THE AMAZING WORLD OF HOME RECORDING FORUM!

I always see people who cant write or put words in rhyme thats why they acquire help from a writer/publisher those who do write the lyrics and then ask "what did I do wrong??" uggghhh... who knows?? YOU WROTE IT!!! Its like NASA asking us what happen to the challenger? uugghhh we dont know? YOU LAUNCHED IT!!

My advice if you CAN write you own lyrics and you DO write them, screw who doesn't understand the meaning fully as long as YOU do. Obviously you wrote it so as not be an easy read as some nursery rhyme book. Sometimes deep is good sometime unraveling lyrics as a puzzle is good because it causes you to think, and thinking can causes you to become "emotional". There are millions of songs that are great and most people dont understand everything are anything bout them from the first listen and nor every meaning at...FIRST. But as they hear it a 2nd time, and again, more and more they understand where the artists is coming from its like a light comes on DING! and they understand exactly the meaning. That is what creates fans because that individual has just been drawn into your life through your lyrics and they can understand and now relate to you and what you're saying and that is how you become a star.

(weird that jimmy has become ignorant over the last few post, always admired his advice and saw him as a wether wise fellow...sad)
 
jaynm26 said:
Your emotional and jimmy is "ignorant", and RAMI's thinks your lyrics come from Ryan Tedder, and Phrasemaster cant work out your lyrics who the only person that thinks somethings wrong with them is you (which is weird by the way) WELCOME TO THE AMAZING WORLD OF HOME RECORDING FORUM!

I always see people who cant write or put words in rhyme thats why they acquire help from a writer/publisher those who do write the lyrics and then ask "what did I do wrong??" uggghhh... who knows?? YOU WROTE IT!!! Its like NASA asking us what happen to the challenger? uugghhh we dont know? YOU LAUNCHED IT!!

My advice if you CAN write you own lyrics and you DO write them, screw who doesn't understand the meaning fully as long as YOU do. Obviously you wrote it so as not be an easy read as some nursery rhyme book. Sometimes deep is good sometime unraveling lyrics as a puzzle is good because it causes you to think, and thinking can causes you to become "emotional". There are millions of songs that are great and most people dont understand everything are anything bout them from the first listen and nor every meaning at...FIRST. But as they hear it a 2nd time, and again, more and more they understand where the artists is coming from its like a light comes on DING! and they understand exactly the meaning. That is what creates fans because that individual has just been drawn into your life through your lyrics and they can understand and now relate to you and what you're saying and that is how you become a star.

(weird that jimmy has become ignorant over the last few post, always admired his advice and saw him as a wether wise fellow...sad)
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THANK YOU FOR THE WARM WELCOME. I ALWAYS think everything i do is wrong, i constantly 2nd guess thing it is one of my struggles that i have as a person.it EVEN happens when i am working in retail and ppl are like why do you do that. I just was raised that way. i REALLY LIKE JIMMY its just we started talking differently. okay i see what your saying like, i dont write my own lyrics i LISTEN to my music and then like random words come to the song at the given time I do not know how i do it its weird. Okay so i kinda make it like a puzzle in a way so ppl can figure it out. I will do this for now on and not speak bout what my music is about.

WELL WITHOUT FURTHER ADO HERE IS My full grunge industrial song havenormal https://soundcloud.com/fearband/havenormal
ITS NU-METAL 13 completed who ever listened to that song you can just skip to pre chorus happens at 1.09 in

here are lyrics
have you ever forgotten.
i need you more then anything
question your path
ill send you a new way.
i hate you i hate you i hate you
its not certain the second of everyday
if your my i dont feel it
now i feel it walk away.

oh my god
it comes so soon
hidden not for long
I want to feel you


i will never hide
do you understand what i need/mean
signs of hate
seems to overwhelm my mind.
and i know your listening.
oh and but is it true
can you keep a secret
why is it all taboo




at
the now
cant do anything
have the nice
but the beating keeps coming back to me
you where its directed
its right at you and me
but dont ever listen
give it back to them you sya
we never did anything wrong
how could you do this to us
and now its time to break away
and that is my only thought.
 
ifieiairi said:
I dont know how i could bring this with my emotional mind and mix it with those 2 things.
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Just think about the emotions involved in finding animals sexy or realising that you're a woman-robot trapped in a man-robot's body.
 
jonny deep said:
Just think about the emotions involved in finding animals sexy or realising that you're a woman-robot trapped in a man-robot's body.
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I am the manliest man of all man of all mankind. Stop this horrible stuff your talking about. I just like being emotional thats it some people do not like this and others are like oh wow man look at dat.

Sorry if i offended you.
 
Ok, your vocals are way in the back of the mix and covered by the track... and sound like its coming through a toilet pipe. You're hiding the vocals in FX and minimal volume. Don't

And quit whining about offenses. I don't know where you read any offense in Jonny's silly comment, but he's not worked up.

Your next instrumental track is really nice.
 
Yeah, I was just messing about - don't read anything into it.
 
ifieiairi said:
I am the manliest man of all man of all mankind. Stop this horrible stuff your talking about. I just like being emotional thats it some people do not like this and others are like oh wow man look at dat.

Sorry if i offended you.
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First of all, its you're , second of all, you don't LIKE being emotional, nobody LIKES being emotional. Grow up and stop being NAIVE and STUBBORN instead. You'll find that the world is a better place. Jonny wasn't even being that horrible, he's just being silly.
 
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Johnny Darkly said:
Ok, your vocals are way in the back of the mix and covered by the track... and sound like its coming through a toilet pipe. You're hiding the vocals in FX and minimal volume. Don't

And quit whining about offenses. I don't know where you read any offense in Jonny's silly comment, but he's not worked up.

Your next instrumental track is really nice.
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no i barely put any efx on it like everything is minimal on reaper it has something to do with my voice. but im trying to turn it up so my voice can be heard better in it this is a amateur process for me in the first place. thank you by the way
 
DarrenVocal said:
First of all, its you're , second of all, you don't LIKE being emotional, nobody LIKES being emotional. Grow up and stop being NAIVE and STUBBORN instead. You'll find that the world is a better place. Jonny wasn't even being that horrible, he's just being silly.
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i hate rules and thats including stupid word rules as well. I love being emotional its you that does not want me to be emotional. I am a bad ass motherfucker and thats it.
 
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