middleman: Thanks a lot, I wish I would have had this advice while I was still working on the song!
I agree about the second verse. I remember wanting to add something but I was out of ideas and/or didn't have the equipment that was required by some of the ideas.
I agree about the ending. It's too abrupt.
As for the snare, I monitor through low quality speakers so I rarely dare touch the EQ. I'm always afraid things will end up sounding worse than what I started with. Hopefully soon I will aquire a pair of decent monitors...
I think I'm pretty much finished with this demo though but if I ever get a chance to do a 'real' recording of this song I'll be sure to keep all that you've said in mind.
Thanks again.