Vampire Superman

[jake-owa]

Man this is waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa....aaaaaaaaa.........aaaaaay too long.

The guitar is making my ears leak fluid right about now.
Is that the twisted thing you were talking about?

 

[Doug H]

No, I meant the lyrics. Thanks for listening, and I agree it needs some trimming.

 

[Lt. Bob]

I agree with everybody!

Nice guitar sound and a nice riff. That was about it though......needs a bridge....and some fills.....and a ride.........or alternatively it could be two and a half minutes long and it wouldn't need any of that stuff.

 

[Doug H]

heh, thanks. It wasn't supposed to be an opus, although I was trying to do the building repitition thing. I was a little chocked when I finally looked at the timer.

 

[joro]

Hey Doug...

OK..I have not read the other comments and here is what I think...
The guit has a nice tone...a little boxed up but, nice
The drums are really good but they are too up front...
the vox is muffled....needs help...even the spoken word...I can't make out the lyric...
Bass seems right on in the mix....

Damn man....this is a long song.....it'll be cool for a club...
it really doesn't change too much throughout either....
ya need a defined chorus riff....perhaps shorten it up a bit too....

lead guitar maybe?? I dunno....ya know?

Take it easy man,
Joe

 

[Doug H]

Thanks for the comments and checking it out. I am thinking about some stuff between versus to break it up a bit.