This Damn Motel

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I probably shouldn't critique this, as I am tanked, and waiting for pizza to cook....but I will.... :D

Good job on the vocals man...they have really nice character to them, and some good depth. This could use some really good drums....wish I could add that, but I'm not that good yet. :o The rest sounds really good, so the drums filling it out would be awesome. Nice keys, and bass sounds. And like I said, good job on vocals. Cool guitar...is that a lap steel, or did you play some slide on regular guitar?

Song is pretty decent man...just needs better drums to fill it out more. :cool:
 
Dogman said:
I probably shouldn't critique this, as I am tanked, and waiting for pizza to cook....but I will.... :D

Good job on the vocals man...they have really nice character to them, and some good depth. This could use some really good drums....wish I could add that, but I'm not that good yet. :o The rest sounds really good, so the drums filling it out would be awesome. Nice keys, and bass sounds. And like I said, good job on vocals. Cool guitar...is that a lap steel, or did you play some slide on regular guitar?

Song is pretty decent man...just needs better drums to fill it out more. :cool:
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thanks Dog for the critique.....it does need drums and I can't play them! The slide was done on my regal fitted with a tele pickup.
 
Wow, I had no idea you sang, very nice job. :cool: A lot different than the previous stuff I have heard of yours. You have the country sound nailed with the vox and arrangement (esp. organ). Piano patch is pretty good, is it your Korg?

Drums are ok, a little thin but fine. Perhaps a tad less reverb on the vocals. Other than that its ready to go. Might not need the synth strings, nothing in here sounds like a synth except them. Very nice. :cool:
 
Thanks for the comments David......yeah...that's my coal fired n364 :D Still a pretty good keyboard after all these years.
 
Cool Jay.....love your voice - it's perfectly suited to the style. The playing is great and the story is well written...Pianos and slide are cool... :cool:

:D :) :D :)
 
Really nice song and very well performed too! And like Ido said, nice story in the lyrics, the drums are not bad at all but could raise the level a bit in the mix. The drums are more of a classic country sound rather than the arena mix that modern country hits you in the face with nowadays.
I think it gives a good live sound that reminds me of a smoky honky tonk atmosphere-been there many times myself as well~ :) Vocals and harmonies sound fine, I think a bit less reverb on the dobro to let a bit more of the high end shine through during the solo-just my opinion though....
 
Ido, Anfontan....thanks for the comments.....think I'll go back and polish this up a bit more. :D
 
I listened to this a year ago while browsing your soundclick.
Liked it then Like it now;) The writing is very good! Not my favorite of yours but a close second:)

I'm listening on cheap headphones at moment so I can't comment tom much.
I can say that I noticed at the begining the right channel comes in a little quick a bit like it's switched on. I think it would sound better with a pretty quick fade in on the right to soften it up a hair.

If I wasn't on phones I doubt I'd have noticed.

Great singing on this. The song as a whole is great!

By way "Old Man Howard" is my favorite:D Listening right now. gonna have to burn it to cd.


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I never noticed the right channel coming in quick but, I don't use cans....maybe I should to hear those little things. Thanks for the listen Freud!!! :D
 
Gorty said:
Your vocals are great here Jay, nice keyboard playing. Perhaps just bring the mids up and the volume on the drums a tad to help bring them into the tune.

Good work! :)
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Thanks Gorty....I'll try that!
 
Really good work - the vocals are spot on.
The intro with the (seemingly) hard panned chords is a little uncomfortable in h/phones. It works once the other stuff is happening - perhaps centre the chords until the right hand comes in & then pull it away.
the synth strings are a little synthie. Treat them heavily or pull 'em back if not replace with a better patch.
Nice piece of pie.
 
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