Take It To The Grave -Let me know what ya think, thanks

[Patient Dreams]

There’s times when you think you’ve just had enough. Songs just a descriptive feeling. Give a listen and drop a line if you want. Any feedback is appreciated.

Take It To The Grave
@ Lyneva Starbuck 10-21-07
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=664080

Your eyes tell a story
Your lips may never say
You can only hide the truth so long
It’ll come back for you one day

You’re looking on the outside
As another page is turned
Still you search for the next best thing
With all the paths you burn

So you can take it to the grave
All the things you can never say
Were no one could ever hear
All your thoughts now coming true
With so much you want to do
The time has past away, so now, your can take it to the grave

You’ll hear the words I’ll say
And go on with no blame
You’ll live your lies, and die with truth
Without feeling any shame

You’re looking on the outside
As another page is turned
Still you search for the next best thing
With all the paths you burn

So you can take it to the grave
All the things you can never say
Were no one could ever hear
All your thoughts now coming true
With so much you want to do
The time has past away, so now, your can take it to the grave

Thanks for the read. Give a listen
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=664080

 

[heatmiser]

Hey...I checked it out a couple times and am still a bit unsure what I think...

It seems like it is, and should be, sort of powerful, and your delivery of the vocals and some of the guitar playing conveys this, but I'm not sure the bass/drums combo works in this regard. Myabe it is the sound of the drums themselves. I dunno. I think I liked it best when you pushed your voice a bit and it broke up a little. I thought that really worked. There were also some cool licks during the solo.

Thanks for sharing.

 

[Patient Dreams]

Funny thing is that it's the vocals that I feel are the biggest problem if any.