"Spin you around"... New song critique please!

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Hey guys, I uploaded a new song called "Spin you around" I would appreciate some feedback on the song!, I can always count on you guys for some great advice! =] Thanks for your time, (God myspace really squashes a song lol), Maybe ill post this in the songwriting forum for some songwriting tips as well... thanks


www.myspace.com/bxany "Spin you around"....
 
Nice work, man. I think some gentle malleted cymbal wash would sound nice.....

There's a couple of spots where the bass is not syncing up right with the guitars.

Pretty song.
 
Hey! Thanks for the comment!, thats a great idea about the mallets, I gotta go get some mallets then! lol. Thank you for giving it a listen, I appreciate it. =]

O yeah, And do you guys think the girl speaking at the end is "corny"?. The guitars playing at the end is supposed describe how beautiful the sun was when she was looking at it come up, as that was what she said...
 
Nice work indeed. I agree some cymbal wash would be nice, as well as maybe some other soft percussion (brushed snare?).

Also, you may want to consider cut some of the super-lows when the bass comes in at ~1:33. I'm only listening on Etymotic ER4s right now and it was pretty intense (and these headphones are not bass heavy). I can easily see a playback system with strong bass going nuts with those lows.
 
I was thinking the same thing Santi... But when I played it through my speakers, There wasn't that much bottom to the bass... But when I used my Sony studio heaphones I felt the bottom of the bass just right... So I didn't know what to do =/. I wonder how it will sound on good quality monitors =X. Thanks for listening!
 
Nice job Bryan - lots of auditory and musical "variety" going on. Keeps your interest going. I'd say your arranging and songwriting skills are very good...The stereo spread is working really well here. The girl's voice is good - keep it. I especially like the hipass tone you used there.... :D
 
Hehe, thank you! Well im glad im not the only one who finds the girl speaking at the end to be alright. Thanks again for giving it a listen ido! =]
 
Nice folky song, Bryan.
Very nicely sung, lots of feeling. Very good arrangement, some percussion woukd give it more colour. Neat recording.

Joe :):):)
 
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O man! I didn't even realize 2 more people had responded to this post! thanks for listening guys, I really appreciate the critiques, yeah im working on adding some percussion instruments to the songs, thanks again
 
Reminds me a lil bit of "Jesus" by Brand New (check out their myspace you'd probably dig 'em: http://www.myspace.com/brandnew). Try to mix it resembling something you like. I think it has a really nice, really consistent sound, a few tweaks here and there and it'll be something to reckon with.

Now if I was to give some pointed suggestions (which is not to say the recording is bad at all) I'd say first and foremost, work on tightening up the pitch and rhythm for the vocals, especially during harmonized parts and brightening up the rhythm guitar. It sounds a lil dark... Not sure why, possibly old strings or a crummy sounding room? And obviously, some subtle percussion parts would add a lot to the arrangement.

Big ups braddah. Keep making good music!!!
 
Why on mspace though? Not good quality & it takes an age to load your page.
In fact it's been 4 minutes & the song hasn't played yet.
C'mon your songs deserve better.
Finally!
Nice guitar sound, good voice recording.
the harmonics on the git work well.
B vox are good.
So that makes it good good good.
 
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