song review

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I like what you are trying to do but there are some performance issues. The timing sounds off in quite a few places and there are intonation problems with the vocal. In addition, the vocal is a bit buried. A more confident performance would allow you to bring it up front.
 
thanks for the input,thats what i get for not using a metronome
 
yeah, timing is quite an issue in this song. The volume on each instrument is pretty inconsistent, too. They just kinda jump out in a random order. While this might add a cool feel to the song, I'm afraid people will not be able to hear every note clearly. For example, I can only hear a few notes played by the bass when other instruments are playing at the same time.

I like the tune itself tho, a more consistent timing and volume will really make this tune shine.

Al
 
thx...i was trying for a cool effect in the beginning of the song..so when the main part came in it would jump out of the speakers
guess it didnt work...hee..
 
Well, I agree with what everyon'es said so far. I think the verse could benefit from a little housekeeping. There's just too much going on, and I can concentrate on any one vocal part. Be a little more selective with those BG vox. I like the song idea. The structure is a bit odd to me though.
 
thx for the input im working on a new version as we speak..
u guys are really helpful...
 
Hi Derek.

Lots going on here. Some good musical ideas I think. The "computer sounds" were cool, but probably a bit too forward in the mix. I think they'd be a nice effect if they were more subtle.

Yes, some timing issues. You can fix things like that easy enough.

The drums were quite a bit forward - louder than they needed to be. I think that caused you to raise the level of the instruments. This causes everything to obscure the vocals. The words were tough to hear. The song is plenty loud, so I'd start by pulling back all the instruments.

Some pitchiness in the vocals here and there.

Small pops at: :50, :55, 2:12, 2:27, 2:40, 2:42.

In general it seems there is quite a bit of midrange, and to a lesser extent high end to the mix. It gives it a bit of an abrasive sound. Watch that when tracking. You could try EQing some of that out, but I suspect the result wouldn't be all that terrific.

Looks like you're a little new to the board. One piece of advice - try reviewing other people's work with a critical ear. It hones your skills when mixing your own stuff.

Trip....
 
Looks like Trip and the rest pretty much covered it.Not bad for a first post I liked what you were trying to do.Stay original...I like the current direction.
 
Yeah for me mostly it's the top end. The snare has a very harsh bite and the highs on some of the fx are tough on my ears.

I like the overall arrangement style and your acoustic guit line I particularly liked.
 
thx for input ..i have lot to learn about eqing..and mastering...
your suggestions are a good place to start
 
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