Although I'm unused to hearing vox in your works, Keir - you have a good voice. Let's hear a smidge more of it. Think like a producer, though - and when there's a desired elevation in energy of the vocal? Add some production interest - like additional voices (dupes etc ...) that boost the part where you want an energy add (think: chorus/tag lines).
Little too much low energy in this still - and it's causing a blurring of the upper frequencies w/ the masking effect. I'm pretty used to some of your mixes low end blowing my phones out a couple inches from my ears, but you'll need to tame that once you start adding vocal parts.
I do like the phase on the vocal - but again - don't do it because you're timid w/ your vocal. Do it because you want to create an atmospheric effect with it. Once that's the goal, heap it on until you're where you want to be with it.
The lead parts were still a bit under the bed. Leads shine.
