Real Love - first take...

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Here's a new song I just wrote, just a quick live take to get it recorded. I'll redo the recording later to add a few more instruments/fills.

Please have a listen and let me know what you think.

The lyrics are shown below and on the song page.

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Real Love

Copyright Gerry Steele 20080311

Well the word’s getting out yeah it’s all over town
They’re talking bout the guy you’ve been hanging ‘round
He’s playing you for a fool and lord I don’t know why

While you’re at home thinking that he rocks your world
He’s out at night messing with all the girls
And when you find out the truth it’s gonna make you cry

CHORUS
Run into my arms, and let me show you what a real love can be
I’m the one who loves you, got to tell you girl you’re everything to me
Don’t listen to his lies, he’ll only break your heart in two
You’ve got to see through his disguise, we can make it me and you
He don’t love you baby, you’ll only get a real love from me

Like a favorite song he’ll only play for a while
Yeah I know it ain’t right but girl that’s just his style
If you keep holding on, he’s gonna bring you pain

When he get’s what he wants won’t have to look too far
To find the shattered pieces of your broken heart
It’s never been hard for him to throw good love away

CHORUS
Run into my arms, and let me show you what a real love can be
I’m the one who loves you, got to tell you girl you’re everything to me
Don’t listen to his lies, he’ll only break your heart in two
You’ve got to see through his disguise, we can make it me and you
He don’t love you baby, you’ll only get a real love from me

BRIDGE
My love it goes beyond infatuation
In my heart I know my love is true
Until we pass into another lifetime
I see my world as being part of you

(BREAK)

BRIDGE
My love it goes beyond infatuation
In my heart I know my love is true
Until we pass into another lifetime
I see my world as being part of you

CHORUS
Run into my arms, and let me show you what a real love can be
I’m the one who loves you, got to tell you girl you’re everything to me
Don’t listen to his lies, he’ll only break your heart in two
You’ve got to see through his disguise, we can make it me and you
He don’t love you baby, you’ll only get a real love from me
He don’t love you baby, you’ll only get a real love from me
He don’t love you baby, you’ll only get a real love from me

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ido1957 - I have listened to your stuff off and on for the last couple of years. In my opinion this is your best songwriting effort yet. Most minor key tunes are slow and not up-tempo like this one. Once you add your classic riffs to this baby it is gonna sound great. The key fits your voice well and the lyrics are sung like they are straight from your heart. Very nice indeed. +10s
 
up-fiddler said:
ido1957 - I have listened to your stuff off and on for the last couple of years. In my opinion this is your best songwriting effort yet. Most minor key tunes are slow and not up-tempo like this one. Once you add your classic riffs to this baby it is gonna sound great. The key fits your voice well and the lyrics are sung like they are straight from your heart. Very nice indeed. +10s
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Thanks Dave, appreciate the kinds words.... Still lots of work to this but I was anxious to get it recorded while it was still fresh. I need to review the exit from the break, not sure that chord's working. Glad you like it...
 
I like this a lot!! even the raw mix sounds great! vocals are sharp and crisp.

"Until we pass into another lifetime
I see my world as being part of you"

got a great message to that special someone who keeps herself just out of arms reach! It makes me feel sorry for her.

good stuff!!! :):)
 
Coughmist said:
I like this a lot!! even the raw mix sounds great! vocals are sharp and crisp.

"Until we pass into another lifetime
I see my world as being part of you"

got a great message to that special someone who keeps herself just out of arms reach! It makes me feel sorry for her.

good stuff!!! :):)
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Thanks Coughmist, that section took a few tries to work out but I'm pretty happy with it. Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment. :)
 
real love

Because it is a quick demo I won't comment on the production.

The song surprised me, because when I read the lyrics I wasn't sure what to expect. Lyrically the song doesn't excite me, because there are many stock phrases in there. The basic theme of "you don't know what you're missing" is not unusual, and when dipping into these waters, you really do need something very special to make it stand out from the others.

However, the song flows along smoothly, and the lyrical content fits pretty well with this flow. Perversely, though, whereas I just listened to a song where sparseness of lyrics created holes, I got the impression of almost too many syllables.

The chord progression reminds me of the structures that Santana uses, and I can hear a funk-latin arrangement happening, with lots of energy and space.
 
Thanks Gecko - Thanks for the listen and the good comments...I'm always trying to improve my lyric writing skills.... The mix is rough at best - just a cassette recording for now. I'm just starting to work on recording this over again on my better equipment....:D
 
up-fiddler said:
Gerry - I believe that when I click the link I am getting the old version? (Which I still like!) All I hear is drums, bass, vox, and rhythm guitar. Perhaps it is early and I am doing something wrong???
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You are getting the right version - it's still not finished. I re-recorded drums, bass, vox, and rhythm guitar and added some effects. I think the vocals came out a little better this version ;) I still have to add a second rhythm, lead and harmonies... I better get started....:D
 
I was just looking forward to your guitar riffs.:D:D The chorus sticks in my head for hours. (That's a very good thing.) I really like this tune and stand by my original evaluation that it is one of your best. ;)
 
Gerry,
this has super potential.
That returning riff is good - I wanted it to come back in all sorts of places.
Good reprise
Good, good song.
 
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