Original song about defying physics to date out of my age range

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I really love this song. Great melody, guitar parts, structure, hook, etc. Really good.

I'm hearing a bunch of distortion and I'm surprised there haven't been any comments. The mix itself isn't clipping, but it sounds like the kick and maybe the snare might be clipping internally somewhere. Not exactly sure where, but I'm hearing distortion.

During the bridge (starting at 2:14) I'm hearing some clicking going on in the "silent" parts.

The rest of the mix issues I think have been well covered.

Did I mention I love the song? Really cool. I'll be humming it on the drive home tonight I bet.
 
Thanks TripleM. I use some pretty distorted instruments, but the drums aren't one of them! I'll have to check that.

Yeah, Jinkos, that is one interpretation of time travel. (The aging backwards thing), but that never really made sense to me, so I ignore that version. :D
 
Sounds good. The vocals sit well. It is a very interesting composition as usual. I like the quirky staccato guitar riffs. The drums sound better than some of your prior offerings but still on the cardboard end of the spectrum I'm afraid. A unique and/or lo fi drum sound would seem to suit your style fine, these just go a bit too far in that direction to my ear. If the drums were cleaned up and tightened up a bit it make make more room for all the other mid-rangey sounds you have going here. Nice work.
 
Thanks.

I'm currently working on drafting an actual drummer into the band. Hopefully, once he's on board, I can get some better drum sounds overall.
 
I'm a little late to the party, so I apologize if these comments have already been floated around...

First, I think it's a great song and nice arrangement...well done! It's catchy and it has a nice hook that's stuck in my head, so that's a good thing. I really like the right side guitar work, cool syncopated rhythms that add a lot to the feel of the track. The breakdown with the stops and "oohs" is sweet. I liked the flanged effect in the back during the breakdown too...what was that instrument? Very cool!

Here are my nits:

The vocals are very good, but I'd like to hear them a little louder/clearer. I'm not sure if it's a volume thing or an issue with too many other instruments playing in the same frequency range, I suspect it may be a little of both, so I'd play around with bumping the vocals up a tad, and maybe see where the vocal sweet spot is in the frequency spectrum and give it a little boost there (emphasize little), and then cut the same frequency in some of the other instruments, especially the ones that are panned dead center. I like my vocals loud, so your mileage may vary, but that was the first thing I noticed. I think the higher vocals in the end chorus come through nicely, so that's about the right level in my opinion.

Besides the drum comments that I saw in a few posts above, the only other nit I have is the double-time high hat in the lift/sub-chorus. I think it's either too loud, or it needs to be panned away from the center. Maybe both :)

Other than that, great job! I really enjoyed listening.

Best Regards,

Dave DeWhitt
 
heh.... Growing up on TMBG, I can't help but hear them in almost everything you write.

Keep it up. You do it well.
 
Dewhitt: Thanks! The flanged instrument during the bridge is actually the randomized drum machine. It's doing the same thing throughout most of the song, but it's pretty well buried elsewhere. When I play it live, that instrument is a lot more prominent.
Yeah, I'm still working on understanding the finer points of optimizing EQ.

PI: Thanks! I strangely don't listen to a lot of TMBG. I think it's happy coincedence more than anything that makes me sound like them. (I think I arrived at this sound by amalgamating Weird Al and the Smashing Pumpkins, actually.)
 
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