Not Gonna Give Up new track by me and PGT

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um can someone delete the other multiple threads? my internet browser gave me a error & i reposted the same thing :confused: over and over
 
the beat and instrumentation are so close to LL's "doing it well" that its a distraction from your lyrics.

the rapper on the first verse needs to do a better job tracking the beat. its better to leave a word out or even make it mumbled than to have it miss the timing. he was doing fine until the verse where he says "...I simply was confused" from that point on there are several spots where he's distracting from the timing.

because you rap harder than the first rapper you need to bring your mix position down to fit within the beat. your guilty of being off timing but not as much as the first verse. the worst phrase is when you say "dont ever give up homie".

also, what's the point in having that rapid fire kick augmented by the gun shots if you aren't going to switch your flow up to fit it? that's one of the best things about Eminem.
 
thanks a lot
the kicks & gunshots were not in my control, so I can't fix that part. I'll fix the timing tonight.
 
"Doing it well" was the first thing I thought when I heard the beat.

But it sound's cool. I think your vocals are a bit too boosted in the highs, I would def. cut some of the highs and maybe run a DeEsser, don't know yet though I'd have to listen through my monitors.

Where do you get your drum samples mindset? I like that snare.
 
I just tested it in the system of my car & I agree that I do need to turn down the high's my de-esser was set at 6dB's on my compressor. oh and the drumset came off a yamaha sy77 synth


here's the same song, without a voice over on my vocals, which was more clearer then the recent one, and it's just a clip of only my vocals....

undubbed K-Lord Verse
lo-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=4254398&q=lo
hi-fi URL: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getplayer.m3u?id=4254398&q=hi


I think it somewhat sounds better then the one i originally posted...

oh and thanks people... here's the lyrics of both our verses, me being K-Lord

PGT
(verse 1)

so many lost minds, trying to find a better day/
pockets hertin' so we searchin' trying to find a better way/
all i can say, is i'm trying to live right/
so i pray, i can at least make it through the night/
every day, another person looses a close friend/
i just can't wait till all this drama just ends/
but in the mean time, i'ma ask god to forgive my sins/
and when i die, lord lemma fly with my peers/
between you and i, you're the only one i fear/
it's only right, that i bow down and worship you/
lord i'm sorry for all them times when i cursed at you/
i didn't have my head on str8 and simply was confused/
but i gotta thank you, for all the people you've blessed/
and for helping my mom through the times when she is stressed/
i can only guess that i'm moving in the right direction/
so i put my trust in the lord, jesus christ, man of perfection/


(chorus)

lord, these times are hard so help me please/
have mercy on ur son, he's down on his knees/
God give me wisdom and strength to deal wit this strife/
But give me only you to make it thru this life..

K-Lord Verse 2
I feel like I'm locked in a cell, with plenty of time to think/
like this world ain't enough to drive a man to the brink/
that I have to feel all the sorrow to keep this pain in sync/
to live life as a message of what your kids shouldn't be/
but after living this life, I realize what comes next/
that hell comes first, and for that reason, comes death/
so maybe it's just me, in my own state of mind/
it's like a crime to live right, so you gotta do the time/
keep your focus on the things that have meaning to you/
cause if you turn your head, you'll never know what you'll loose/
and it's real when the streets come calling your name/
if you answer the game, you'll put your life in a grave/
but on a positive note, there still signs of hope/
even when your broke and you got that 9 on your throat/
don't ever give up homie cuz this life is dope/
take it one step cuz this is beyond the life we chose/
and let em know
 
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