New Song Up - Tell me what you think!

[DC-XPL]

I was really enjoying the introduction and the nice crisp production - then the vocals kicked in....yikes. That first line comes off horribly underpitch, it made me wince. I can hear as the song progresses that you have a good voice, but the performance isn't there yet and that first line HAS to reel the listener in.

This is a very common, if not a pleasant, chord progression - nothing new here. You don't vary it at all, except to say 'consume me' for a few bars, otherwise the song is too repetitious for my taste. It just doesn't go anywhere. If you are going to keep the same chord progression throughout, then you really have to make that contrasting section stick out more (vocal harmonies, tempo changes, synth pads, etc).

Thanks for sharing, hope this helps.

 

[BJW]

I was really enjoying the introduction and the nice crisp production - then the vocals kicked in....yikes. That first line comes off horribly underpitch, it made me wince. I can hear as the song progresses that you have a good voice, but the performance isn't there yet and that first line HAS to reel the listener in.

I read this and had to kind of chuckle to myself. I CAN'T sing that stupid line in pitch. I don't know how many times I just looped that line of the song when I recorded it and sang it over and over - that's the best take I could get. Maybe I'm never warmed up properly when I record. Funny - If I ever play live, I hit everything in tune (well, almost) - at least, the times I've recorded live stuff my vocals are pretty dang good. In the studio, its a different story.

Thanks for listening.

 

[daryle_ackerman]

Well, I've been listening to this on a few different set-ups, and I have to say the sound of the mix is growing on me. I thought about trying to make some changes, but I think I'm happy with the way it turned out. Any more opinions?

I'd be pretty happy with it too if I were you. I think some of the previous comments might be over-analysing it.

That melody electric guitar line that comes in right at the beginning is great, but I think it needs a little bit of uhmm.. ambience (read reverb - delay) sit it back a bit.

This I agree with. It could use some effects -- not just at the start but throughout the whole piece just to fill the stereo spectrum and set it off a bit. The other guitars seem nice and dry but this one could help the mix if it were "wet".

Daryle