First of all, I like the song... alot.
That being said, I thought that the "lazy" sound in your voice was overdone. Too much of a good thing, perhaps?
It made the song go from having "feel" to just plain whiney.
That's just one man's opinion, though... based on production work I do for local bands and artists.
Your recording level is too low, it needs to be hotter.
The guitar needs to be "fatter".
Stereo-mic'ing was suggested, and that would help somewhat. But what you really need is a better mic... as a matter of fact, you need TWO good mics to bring out the natural sound of that guitar.
I liked the tone of your acoustic, but your mic of choice doesn't compliment it enough.
The same goes for the vocals... sounds like an SM58 to me, but it was hard to tell because I had to keep the volume low since I got a sleeping baby boy in the house.
The song is great, as far as writing goes... (yes, I write, too!)
I'd just like to hear this song's potential "maximized" on the recording end.
As it sits right now, you've got a nice demo.
