My Horse Is Stumblin Right From The Gate...

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ok as usual ..first draft......man i cannot get the vocals to sit right......and ill forwarn you...i sang this AFTER re-singing three other songs im trying to re-master.......sorry:D .....

"strike up the band
here comes the rain
no need to stand
its only my parade"

............called "MY PARADE".....
http://www.nowhereradio.com/mynewhead/singles



THANKS
jamal
 
Vocals seem farther down the line of issues to me. Guitar is way too loud and the drum machine isn't working well for me. The guitar mid-range bulge is taking so much bandwidth that there's little room for anything else to come through well, no wonder you're having trouble getting the vocs to sit well.
 
Yo' Jammin' Jamal, besides what pglewis stated, where's the bottom?? Brutha', U got the workings of cool & energetic tune
but the git's and the machine's snare is hoggin' all the space.
Increase the machine's kick volume,apply some hi-end filter cut
to the snare and ride the fader north on your voc's and I believe
you're there (allow the bass a lil breathing room also)!
This tune shows strong potential in my book and your lyrical flow
shows U possess excellent vocal talent( I wish I had half your voc skillz) and with a minor tweak here & there, this jammie is on POINT!
 
For the most part, I agree with pglewis. Turn the guitars down a bunch and maybe pan them out of the middle to leave some room for the vocals. First though, I'd mute everything except for drums and work on getting a good drum mix for a starting point. There seems to be way to much going on in the high end of the drum mix and no meat to the drum sound. I liked the tune. Good writing. Keep working at it...you'll get it!:D
 
i like the song......right now there are some recording issues that could help..........mainly bass and drums seem to be the key issue...........it needs for bottom end......the song is solid, just needs a little more tweaking........i love the guitar solo and i love the harmonies....nice job
 
ok ..nobody else listen till i fix this.....i had no idea it was so bad..?....but i have to guess at what you all will hear as my "monitors".are home stereo tower speakers....and i played it in my truck and i thought it sounded ok.......but let me see if i can clean it up a bit....sorry:D



jamal..<-----never wanted to be a sound engineer anyway....lol
 
Sunset Eyes is a Great song man.
I wish I wrote it.

The horse song is a little too Third Eye Blind for me but if thats what you were shooting for it came out great. Mixes are nice (IMHO)

Keep it up.
 
Is this the "make fun of me thread"? Ok here goes..

#1..vocals suck

#2..vocals suck

#3..gtrs suck

#4..vocals suck

#5..drums...where are the fukin drums?

#6..vocals suck

#7..bass gtr sucks

8..song sucks

9..mix sucks

10..vocals suck

11..did i miss anything?


































































:D :D :D had ya going eh? No I really liked this jamal. Great vocal style, and the song sounds up to date. Good length also..
 
you don't sound anything like your avatar!!!

gtrs are a little fuzzy, but ok. the bottom end is kinda boomy and the drums (toms particularly) are kinda muffled sounding to me. Vocals cut thru ok for me.

giddy- up!!
 
imhop J, the drums are what make this sound bad... the guits sound fine ... maybe a tad bit too much edge or distortion, but they're workable....

The toms sound like bad upside down tupperware, the kick is non-existent, and the snare sounds like a plastic pistol firing caps... the cymbals are just plain awful; like crinkling cellophane...

Then, the muddy bass comes in... How is the bass being tracked? If you could get a cleaner bass track & some decent drum tracks in there, this mix would jump up in quality... Did you roll off all lows on the snare up to about 2k? Sounds like a twinkie wrapper, or something... ;)

The vox track sounds ok, as do the BGVs. The guitars do sound good, and the level on them is fine (imhop). Vox have a ton of reverb, which could be a good thing... if you have a way to EQ the reverb returns from the VOX, try rolling off the highs above 4k on that (not the vox track itself).

Bass COULD sound better with some definition around 1.5k or even 3600k... (but that's if and only if that CONTENT is in the bass track in the first place... If not, advise retracking).

Panning and levels seem fine.


Chad
 
I like the song. On my end the vocals sounded like the verb was up just a tad too much (of course this is subjective) .... I like the b.g. vocals. The drums sound like they could use a little boost in the mix ... but others can give you way better advice then me...I just enjoy the listen!

The vocals sound like they sit well over here for the most part.

Nice job! :)
 
Definitely going in the right direction, the vocs are sitting and sounding much better. participant hit most of my points... especially the drums and bass sounds. The bass seems to have no attack and is still buried. Don't know what your using equipment-wise since I just stared coming back in here again... how are you tracking?
 
This isn't that bad Jamal... I like the rhythm gtr sound you got...
These guys can be hard on you... I've heard this style of music on the radio and Your mix isn't that far off from the norm in this genre. I could be wrong, this isn't my cup of tea but I will try to encourage you a little and say Ive heard far worse from signed bands in this particular style. And they play the shit everyday on the radio-lol
Myx
 
Hey Jamal,

...sounds like a great tune in the works man. Im gonna wait to jump into it til you do your re-mix. ....sounds great so far though.


g
 
ok ok .....look I SWEAR i will get to your comments ...i promise....but i just uploaded a new version that fixes alot of the problems you all brought up..........same file at nowhere.....just sonically enhanced.....:D

THANKS TO ALL WHO ARE BEARING WITH ME!!!




jamal;)
 
fun tune. I really liked it. not much to say about the mix that hasn't already been said. So I'll just leave it at that and know that you've got a fan.
 
I spun this at lunch today, Real Nice tune!!
If this is the version 2.0 I heard the rythm git is still up front pretty well, but not obnoxious. The EXTREME panning left one side kinda bare until the second git came in. Nice tones on both

I have heard enough of your stuff to think you can tighten up the vox in a spot or 2. You did say this was sung after a few retakes so I'll let that be. I know you are capable of tight harmonies.

A definate punky feel. It seems IMVHO to be spread out well but could use some "filling in" from a mix standpoint. Maybe balancing out something or ? Perhaps if the bottom end was brought up (as previously stated) this would help.

You spend alot of time knocking yourself and really you deserve props. This has the makings of a comercial tune, and you should bear down and get it done!!!

Now Hurry up !!! :D

Joel
 
jcmm said:
You spend alot of time knocking yourself and really you deserve props...and you should bear down and get it done!!!

Now Hurry up !!! :D
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I have to defend Jamal here for just a second. I too used to rag him for not trying hard enough, because I think he has great songs, and I think they deserve the best he can give them. However, I have recently learned that the boy is just absolutely retarded when it comes to technology and recording. In other words, it's not for lack of effort. He's one of the few people I know who has been recording for less time than me, and the fact that he actually accomplished the conversion and uploading of his first song onto the internet is a small miracle. In fact, if he is able to read this comment tonight, he has exceeded my current expectations of him. ;) so ease up!!!

Sorry JB - But I didn't want people thinkin' you were lazy. Dumb is MUCH better :D :D

(ok - not dumb... "technologically challenged").
 
ok ok...sorry this took so ling i have been trying to learn a new mixing program with limited success........:rolleyes:

pglewis....yep the first version sucked pretty bad.....but hopefeully and by yer latest comment it sounds abit better now..

misterqc:...thanks for the kind words..i dont remember seeing you in here before??...cool that u could see thru the steaming coil of a mix to the song beneath...lol....thanks

monte:...yeah i know the drums....yuck ...so i just retracked the whole song i think it sounds better.....hope you do ...?....cool to see u in the clinic as well!!!im glad y liked the song tho...

powderfinger.....u call that a solo?!?!?!..lol....thanks i call it search and destroy!!...man i f i could actually PLAY guitar i could probably be good.........lol.....thanks

demensia:..."sunset eyes"..really?.....thanks..that was one of the first songs i wrote before i had any gear or anything.....wow..im glad u liked it..thank you.

david:....u saw that thread huh?....lmao..hope u laughed as much as i did!!>...thanks man...

mixmkr:...what does my avatar sound look like it sounds like ..it ...looks...like..?...im confused.....so by "giddy up"...is that a "i like it"...?....or "get out of town before sundown"..?..thanks

chad:...ok THIS TIME..i played the drums on old couch cushions..and balloons....is it any better..?......i think i cleaned up the bass alot too......but like i said before i need u guys to tell me what it needs as i cant hear all this stuff myself....thanks for all th e info!!!!

boydrj:..."i like the song"....see thats all i need..thank you..sir.

myx62:...ya i know this isnt yer thing thanks for listening anyway..and that was an extremely cool thing to say...really thanks.

guernica:....its up man its up ..new mix ...in all its sorta better glory....lmao...hehehe

jr#97:....cool man thanks so much.....now i just need what ?...like 157,000 more people just like you and i could make alitlle money?......thanks again..

joel:...ya i did this one realy quick.....sorta just one of the songs that pours out of you....and when i tracked vocals my voice was shot .....i will be redoing those as well......and thanks for all the cool things you always say...not just this one!.....


welli guess thats everyone that matters........thanks again people especially those of you who had to suffer thru the first version......please dont hold that against me:D

jamal
 
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jamal buchet said:
ok ok...sorry this took so ling

...cool that u could see thru the steaming coil of a mix to the sing beneath
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SEE what I mean?

Oh, and I was obviously right about him not being able to accomplish the feat of reading my post. I can't say I'm surprised, really...I just had high hopes for the boy this evening.
 
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