"Heaven" is up for your ears

[Lukesteele]

Pink Floyd influences BEWARE!
https://soundcloud.com/pentultima/heaven-pentultima-original

Comments welcome.

 

[Phrasemaker]

The mix has gotten out of hand. Some of the hard panning is not as effective as it would be if it were more ambient with audible reflection across the opposite channel. You need a good ear to sort this out, maybe back everything off aside from the drum track and then brig the items up a little at a time to get the levels better. It sounds clipped in places, which maybe it is or simply you have strained your available headroom. Musically the composition would benefit from a key change or a perceived resolution of a key to portray more of interest and it would allow the lead guitar to have more mood evoking potential by way of what can be played around the progression. Sounds like you are enjoying yourself though, kind of tempted to have a play with something like this myself lol.

all the best

Tim