FRESH MEAT!:My first submission

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Results on my not so perfect monitors:

too moch reverb on the snare, it's too distant
Bass seems to be muddy, clashes with the accoustic guitar
I think I don't mind the vocals eventhough they seem a bit "wet" too.
The guitar on the left (I think it's panned to about L35) is a bit boring since it does nearly the same thing all the time.
After the 3 minute mark when you bring the accoustic guitar to the center, it's in front of the vocals and I think it shouldn't be...

Just my opinion and the way I heard it...it's not bad at all over all
:)
cheers
 
great melody.. I like it.. there is waaaay too much reverb on this song though.. the whole song sounds drenched.. I think it would sound a lot better if you dried it off a little, especially the vocals.. I like the synthy solo stuff.. The saturated reverb on the vocals and the drums are giving it a strange sound.. very cool tune acid! I like mood songs like this..
 
Very cool mood going here Guy, It's like psychadelic meloncholy beatles or something. I have to agree with the "drenched in reverb" comments, but it's not as bothersome to me, helps some with the mood, it's maybe just slightly overdone. You have a pretty nice voice. There may be some small timing issues here and there, but overall a good tune Guy :D
 
Excuse me. Pardon me. Harmony police coming through...

Real pretty melody. It'd be a crime if you didn't put pretty harmonies to this. Please tell me you will :D. I liked the little high guitar part. Nice touch. There are some mistakes on that part from about 4:12 - 4:19. There is a missed note or two and some out of tune spots.

I agree with the others, the reverb is too much. Lyrics were kind of so-so. I think the music can make up for it though... if it had harmonies :D

I hope you take some of these suggestions and repost when you're done. Good song.
 
Wow, great tune!

I found the drums mixed kind of low in the mix, and everything else sort of "in your face".

Doug H
 
not too bad

Smashing Pumpkins, Pisces Iscariot sounds quite a bit like this... kind of the sleepy, alt-rock thing going here...

To my ears, the 'verb doesn't sound all bad... matter of taste... it's possible the pre-delay settings could be tightened up a bit... so that they match the tempo of the music, and that would help a bit with clarity... but imo that's a minor issue in this mix.

The snare drum is M.I.A. and the bass gets a bit too much on certain notes... kick needs more... all the drums could come up a bit... otherwise, balances are nice.

Pretty good effort, my man.


Chad
 
AcidRock,

A real interesting sound!
Reading the posts B4 playing this I thought I was in for a verbfest but it wasn't as heavy handed as I expected.
It is kinda heavy on the voice and drums but the guitar licks sound nice with it (IMHO).

As previously stated the drums could come up a bit and gain some space. All the parts are there and just need tweaking. The Bass sounds good. The kick drum gets lost at times.

One more thing................

GO PACKERS !!!!!!!!!!!!
 
Well, it's no "Mr Wilson", but it'll do.;)

Man, this is not what I expected from you. Really original. Great mood. I agree in part with the reverb comments. I noticed that when I got my monitors, I could hear reverb and control it much better. If you want to try a tight delay on the vocals instead of 'verb, FXDelay in Sonar is pretty easy to use.

Although the more I listen to the song, maybe just cut back the reverb. It kind of fits.

I'd like the bass guitar and kick drum up a bit more. Nice snare patch. How about a guitar solo at the break instead of the whistle?

Are the dissonant guitar notes at the end intentional? Leave them in either way.
 
Great effort my friend. Too much verb, just to echo the previous comments (Echo. Ha! Get it?) Actually the balance on the mix ain't too bad.
 
i dig it..i like the intense reverb i think...fits the style.
 
Acidrock, what can I say? After all the joshing we have given you, you finally came through and posted;)
This is what I hear...David Bowie, Space Odessy:) Reading the posts before listening, I had expectations of far too much reverb but although I only heard it on cans (its 5.00am in the morning here so family is still asleep), I didn't get that feeling. It kinda goes with the song.

Good base, drums could come up a bit, but what you could try is a raunchy guitar solo in it. Perhaps after the acoustic guitar at 3.20 something? Laid back in the mix and with reverb but it would prove a counterpoint to the ploppy synth.

I thought your vocals were really good, your voice has a hard edge to it, you can hear it peeking through at times, very rock like.

Song was excellent, especially the lyrics. After hearing bits of your other work this week, after you had posted up your other pieces, I was not surprised at this song but overall, none of this is what I had expected from you, as Chuck posted too. I had thought you would be more heavy and guitar focussed. So a pleasant surprise all around. Well done:D
 
Pretty cool tune........I like the vibe. I'm a 'verb hound so it doesn't bother me....it might should come down a bit though. I really like the droning nature of the song. Almost hypnotic. I think everyone else covered the mix pretty much.
Nice work but you've exposed yourself.....you will now be expected to post new songs on a regular basis. get busy! :)
 
too moch reverb on the snare, it's too distant
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like it.. there is waaaay too much reverb on this song though.. the whole song sounds drenched.. I think it would sound a lot better if you dried it off a little, especially the vocals
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Roker1 and Sabbath were both quite correct,I was mixing this and drinkinking until 3:00 in the morning when I posted it.Then when I read their reviews I quickly remixed and updated the file.
At this time I was going to reply but (surprise!) I could'nt get onto the darn site and had commitments till later by that time the reviews had poured in....

There still is a bit much reverb,but I'm going to wait until Iget a clearer idea of what I want to do with this song and I need to put some time/distance between myself and it before I have at it again.

Triple M...
Yes I'm in total agreement with you,I have a friend who unlike me can actually sing and I'm hoping to get some harmonies on the chorus...not quite sure what I want to do on the verse though...

Participant and Jcmm
the drums are loops and maybe my vanity got in the way of putting them where they shoud be...they will be duly remixed!

Chucku....
The dissonant sounds could be considered intentional,I actually had a perfect take but it sounded to sterile.Perfection is not my strong point,I'm lucky to get a song posted at all being a better starter than finisher.
You also nailed the sound as a whistle!

As far as a guitar solo I tried but it was'nt happening for me,all my efforts were coming off as token leads. :(

Paul,Shack and Lt.Bob...

I confess to me reverb is SONIC HEROIN!
The more you use the less you feel it and you got to have MORE!

Perhaps the comments from my fellow forumites will act as a mixing methadone...
Or maybe I can find an effect to take its place?:cool:

All criticisms were warranted and just,I'm only surprised that there were'nt more.:confused:

THANKS!
 
looks like you updated the file? but i'm commenting on the old version i think. i agree with the too wet reverb comments. musically i like the electric guitar line cept i think it fell apart in the end of the song, or did you mean to do that?
 
AR - as promised, here's my take.

First, it's not at all what I expected. Between your screen name and the comments about Eagles/CSN, I'm not sure what I expected. But this wasn't it. :D

It's quite unique and original. However, after a couple of listens what makes it so is: 1) the unusual lead(?) guitar throughout the song, 2) the whistling, 3) the heavy reverb on the vocal and 4) the dissonant guitar at the end. In other words, the song itself is pretty straightforward and quite nice. As for the 4 things that make it unusual, I'm still on the fence as to whether I like them or not - but understand that my personal taste in music runs more toward the tried and true.

Personally I would have started the song like the section around 3:05 - 3:20. IOW just the acoustic and vocal, and then built the other things as the song developed.

The recording quality is good, and all-in-all it's pretty top notch. Probably the best thing I can say is that it didn't remind me of anyone else (and that's a good thing!).
 
Regarding the dissonant guitar....
I had a "perfect take" but to my ears it sounded to
sterile now that may be symptomatic of listening to the song over and over and over.....
It would be easy as hell to cut/copy/paste that part or just play it the right way.
I am going to have to revisit that again when time gives me a fresh perspective.
Dachay,
I had seriously considered arranging the song in exactly the fashion you had stated,but my concern was there being no bridge and all that an already drone like tune would just become to boring.
As far as the whistle,I suppose that was a little rushed just for the sake of finishing the song.
I may address that in the ADD thread along with your other comments.
 
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