Dwarf + Friend Steriotypical emo song

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Me and my mate were boared as shit and noticed alot of emo's, so there was nothing else to do but write a steriotypical emo song /poem...ENJOY we think it's fucking brillant

When you left me for dead
On that cold tuesday eve
I took to the razor
I took to my sleeve

With my sleeves drawn,
And a tear on my cheek.
It dawns upon me,
Weve been apart a week.

Ooh my sorrow
Is blinding
Feel my hatred
Unwinding
The sorrow that lives within me
Taking over my sanity

My razor is now blunt,
From times that i could noT withstand
I gather all my hatred,
With razor in hand

Ooh my sorrow
Is blinding
Feel my hatred
Unwinding
The sorrow that lives within me
Taking over my sanity

Tearing away at the skin
The flesh that keeps me SANE
The razor digging deeper
GOD I LOVE THE PAIN

I HATE YOU!
I FEAR YOU!
I HOLD YOU!
I LOVE YOU!

Ooh my sorrow
Is blinding
FEAR my hatred
Unwinding
The sorrow that lives within me
Taking over my sanity



....Oh yeah it's emo allright :D
 
The sad thing is, it's actually very good...

If you're into that sort of thing
 
mx_mx said:
The sad thing is, it's actually very good...

If you're into that sort of thing
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...yeah we're not into that sort of thing but if it'd make us money we'd do it. We're recording an album based on fag-skater punk on friday.

Nothing but powerchords and a drum kit :cool:
 
That reminds me of that South Park episode where Stan becomes a goth, pretty funyy
 
Man have you read some of the dribble his friends leave?

That's why I don't use myspace...that and I'm on dialup so my basic internet activity revolves around forums with no pictures.

Man my life sucks mabie I'll kill myself via razor I mean I have a shitload and I also have wrists and blood and a couch with a cat.

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Quite an abrupt ending to a post don't you think?
 
Dude,
I know how close we were but I HAVE EVERY RIGHT TO KNOW I care about you but your leaving me in the dark I dont want you to hurt but your not giving me much of a choice if you tell me why then we can go back to the way things were until then just go away...
JEM
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Myspace arguements are funny
 
dont want you to hurt but your not giving me much of a choice
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That will NEVER hold up in court.....god myspace is retarded.
 
dude brilliant song, but i can tell this isnt the first song youve written so im gonna get picky...

in alot of emo songs, they like to "show" rather than just "tell" whats happening...

maybe rather than saying "With my sleeves drawn", you could use an analogy to change away from the story telling mode and make it something much deeper...

take that how u want it, i love the words, and i definately would like to hear it
 
random.hero said:
dude brilliant song, but i can tell this isnt the first song youve written so im gonna get picky...

in alot of emo songs, they like to "show" rather than just "tell" whats happening...

maybe rather than saying "With my sleeves drawn", you could use an analogy to change away from the story telling mode and make it something much deeper...

take that how u want it, i love the words, and i definately would like to hear it
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All it really was, was me and my fiend mucking around and paying out emo's. I don't think that it's worth the effort to change it.

Thanks for the critisism though,
 
dwarf said:
All it really was, was me and my fiend mucking around and paying out emo's. I don't think that it's worth the effort to change it.

Thanks for the critisism though,
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Go to bed.

..
 
Gorty said:
How the hell did you find this ??????

Are you an emo minxy?????? :confused: :confused:
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Shh don't tell anybody, but it's me :o





Actually, I was looking in classifieds for a band member, and this dude was in there. I kept looking.
 
mx_mx said:
Shh don't tell anybody, but it's me :o





Actually, I was looking in classifieds for a band member, and this dude was in there. I kept looking.
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He looks like he would fit in with you and ya mates minxy!! :D :D
 
Gorty said:
He looks like he would fit in with you and ya mates minxy!! :D :D
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Yep, but we wouldn't get much music made, what with being busy killing ourselves and everything
 
mx_mx said:
Yep, but we wouldn't get much music made, what with being busy killing ourselves and everything
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Just take pictures.......I like pictures! :D
 
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