College Girl

[Irwin abrigo]

Hi everyone, This is a song I wrote from way back when I was a teenager and over time I did rewrite on rewrite and I must say that I am kinda please of where this song is right now, So I am asking you guys for your feedback. overall. Oh.... I am not good with playing chords as yet this is just the track and me singing.

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College Girl
©2016 Irwin Abrigo

(Verse 1)
I’m in love with a college girl
There’s no other like her in this world
If she loves me I don’t know
I would like her to tell me so
I’ve got joy when I go to sleep
Cause she’s the only girl I will see
I’ll never do her any wrong
If she loves me back so strong-oh

(Chorus)
College girl please don’t let me down
College girl oh baby girl I need you so much
College girl I’ll never bring you down to the ground
College girl you don’t know how much I need your touch
College girl let us be
Let us be

(2nd Verse)
Been looking at you for so long
There is always one thing on my mind
Is that one thing that you may say
You’ll say to me I’m not your kind
I don’t want you to think that way
Because my love for you is true
I know another College school boy
Could be looking at you too-oh

(Chorus)

(Bridge)
When we graduate from college into University
I’ll be at your side and together we will be
Together forever, forever together you and me

But that wouldn’t be a reality
Until you say you’re in love with me
College girl I love you so
I love more than you never know

(Chorus)

 

[Nola]

If you want the truth, the song is not very good.

Your vocals aren't strong enough to carry the tune, and yet the supporting elements like rhythm are so jerky and jarring that they get in the way of the listening experience. Sorry.

I must say that I am kinda please of where this song is right now

That's all that matters in the end.

 

[Irwin abrigo]

Nola,I am very thankful for your critical of my song by telling me the truth because that's all I ask of you. Please feel free to comment on any other song that I may post here. Thanks for the reply.

Irwin