Chasing Sunsets

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The Pie Guy
I wrote this one with my Pal Willie...
I wrote the lyric....he is the musician and vocalist


You can hear it here...click away.......

Chasing Sunsets

Verse 1
Hello old friend it’s been a while
I’ve missed our chats and your easy smile
Been traveling from day to day
Chasing sunsets on the way
Verse 2
How’s the kids, and how’s the wife
How’s the peaceful settled life
Have you seen her, by the way
Did she marry, did she stay?

Chorus
Dark skies fall, I gotta go
Another town, another one man show
Wonder if the choice was right
Chasing sunsets
Chasing sunsets into the night

Verse 3
Been around the world it seems
Following this Minstrel’s dream
Days have come and days have gone
Another night, another sad, sad song
Verse 4
Shadows race from left to right
Up on the stage, another opening night
Conjuring memories of what once was
A different life…sometimes I pause…

Chorus
Dark skies fall, I gotta go
Another town, another one man show
Wonder if the choice was right
Chasing sunsets
Chasing sunsets into the night

(Outro)
Woke up this morning
to another unfamiliar view
Big city skyline…...
Another lonely hotel room
I laid back down and closed my eyes
And waited for the Darker skies

Chorus (slight variance)
Dark skies fall, I gotta go
Another town, another sold out show
Wonder if the choice was right
Chasing sunsets
Chasing sunsets
Chasing sunsets into the night
 
Man, Joro, I can really relate to those lyrics.
The song is good too. I gave it an ear last night.
You write some good stuff, ya know that? ;)

I've been wrong about everything I've guessed about you but I think I'm pretty close this time.
You've tasted the life on the road for a while.

I felt everything that song said.
Woke up in many a motel room and couldn't for the life of me tell anyone what city I was in.
Cost my marriage too.

I like it. Good lyrics, good song.
 
Thanks BG...
Glad you like the tune...

Yup...this one is about me....sort of anyways...
I aint no music star though...so far from it....

A very good writer and also a very dear friend once told me to always write from the heart.....it will never let you down......


Hope things are cool with you and yours man.

C-ya :D
Joe
 
Joro,

I like the theme of that. Through the first lines, I get the mood that the "Wanderer" of the tune has come back to visit his "Pal" from the road. The "Pal" is married and setteled and provides a stability that the "Wanderer" would like to have, but for some reason can't. I like the feeling of picturing the two guys sitting on a beach talking about others and life.

Now I will go listen to the tune. Thanks.

Fangar
 
Cool Tune. Sounded the way I thought it would. Great job.

Fangar
 
Hi Fangar,
you pretty much got it except in my thoughts the Minstrel is on the telephone or writing a letter or e-mail kind of thing.....not actually visiting...

Thanks man,
Joe
 
The phone works too. I picture them together. I really like the imagery though. keep it up.

Fangar
 
I'd rather work on this song, Joro. :eek: :eek: :eek:
This one ranks up there with 3k.
Really good.
 
Hey Joro,

I don't say this often or to many people, but I am impressed with the lyrics here. Excellent use of imagery with the hook and the supporting visuals. The line chasing sunsets made me think, because you're a New Yawker, that you're friend (and the ex-lover) moved out west while you were doing the road thing and now you're constantly reaching out for them just beyond the sunset. I have to say though, where you took it from where it could have gone left me a little let down.

Where did these characters go? You establish your character's journey, then you establish other roles in the story in verse 2, then they disappear and suddenly it's you in Seger's Night Moves. I know this song's finished and you don't want to dicker with it, but I could use some resolution with that girl who got/didn't get married. What about your friends just beyond the sunset? The interplay of those characters, or the supposition of them entering your life again after so many years was what got me excited about this. Maybe if things resolved to either, "maybe I'll reach that sunset and find out myself" or "but I'll never reach that sunset" this wouldn't have the let down it has for me. The lyric is pretty damn close though, or else I wouldn't be writing all this to tell you. :)

That, or you could do what Harry Chapin did with Taxi and just write a Sequel. He pulled it off, so why not Joro?:eek:

good effort Joe. Look forward to hearing you discuss more.

Miles
 
good stuff-very clearly from the heart. reminds me of the way that croce used to tell stories. he, and seger.
 
cool....
Thanks guys....

I am re-writing this slightly to help the Vox meter....

A couple of friends mentioned slight nits and it makes sense to take the tune to the next level.

Willie is gonna re-do the Vox as well...

Sure am glad that I have places like this board for constructive critiques...ya know?

Stoner......gotta sell it before I can write a sequel man....
3:30.....that's what they want....ya know?

Thanks man,
Joe
 
Joro, did you do the lyrics for Right Or Wrong?
I've heard it by Burning River and didn't know you did it.
I just burnt it to a disk earlier today.

Your damn good.
 
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