Can you believe a 14-year-old girl did this?

[Greg_L]

I can believe the lyrics were written by a 14 year old.

Yeah, this is a pretty bad song. Bad as in bad, not good.


The recording is okay. The drums sound a little raw for the mix and the timing aint good. The kick is completely MIA during the choruses. It should be driving this song. The snare aint bad, but it's a little flat and has very little snap or air to it. This sounds like and early 80's girly garage pop recording. Like maybe a Go-Go's unfinished demo. Guitars and vocals seem fine to me. I don't really want to understand what she's saying. I'd say get those drums shining and it's done.

 

[PoeticIntensity]

Yeah, this is a pretty bad song. Bad as in bad, not good.


The recording is okay. The drums sound a little raw for the mix and the timing aint good. The kick is completely MIA during the choruses. It should be driving this song. The snare aint bad, but it's a little flat and has very little snap or air to it. This sounds like and early 80's girly garage pop recording. Like maybe a Go-Go's unfinished demo. Guitars and vocals seem fine to me. I don't really want to understand what she's saying. I'd say get those drums shining and it's done.

Hehe... You rock, Greg. I can always count on you for an unfiltered response.

I'll see what I can do with the drums. Thanks for your comment.

 

[jeffmaher]

At 0:34. The chorus. Count 1&2&3&4&. The bold eighth...'and of four'....it's vacant....cuz she's lifting off playing the rythm on the bass and guitar...and there's no grace on the snare. It's a wicked important beat. I think something's gotta be there. Idiomatic to the thing.

One other note I forgot to mention...the hats aren't splashy enough, I think. Splashy, loose hats are common in the style....and add a lot of verve. I think it would kick up the chorus a lot. Maybe as simple as a level-up?

I think it's a good dance song. Not epic...just fun. Like B52's...or 'Metric'

 

[PoeticIntensity]

At 0:34. The chorus. Count 1&2&3&4&. The bold eighth...'and of four'....it's vacant....cuz she's lifting off playing the rythm on the bass and guitar...and there's no grace on the snare. It's a wicked important beat. I think something's gotta be there. Idiomatic to the thing.

One other note I forgot to mention...the hats aren't splashy enough, I think. Splashy, loose hats are common in the style....and add a lot of verve. I think it would kick up the chorus a lot. Maybe as simple as a level-up?

I think it's a good dance song. Not epic...just fun. Like B52's...or 'Metric'

Thanks for the response, Jeff. I'll listen to it again tomorrow at the 34th second. I think I understand exactly what you're talking about now. Thanks for your additional explanation.

...and yeah... I can't help but wanna dance to this song. I love the beat in the chorus. The verses need arrangement help, but the chorus is movin'!

 

[dastrick]

Cool song. I think the vocals are definitely the weakest thing...as far as not being able to hear them. Did you double the vocals or is it the double delay? Whatever it is, I think it's making it hard to understand her words. Maybe make the vocals a little bit drier?

And for 14, I'd say she's off to a good start.

 

[joeym]

She's got a great voice, Jason, lots of character and that's good!
Voice gets lost at times and she sounds like she's singing in Gaelic 'cos I don't understand a word...... Not that I find that a big problem but her voice should stand out more. I would compress the voice to hell or try to double the vocal track and really squash one of them and mix them together.
It's a very good song and I like it a lot. If she keeps this up, she's gonna be an accomplished musician one day.

Joey

 

[VomitHatSteve]

I'd tell her to sing higher and pick up the tempo. Try to sound more like Cruiserweight and less like Cyrus, (Miley).

 

[PoeticIntensity]

Cool song. I think the vocals are definitely the weakest thing...as far as not being able to hear them. Did you double the vocals or is it the double delay? Whatever it is, I think it's making it hard to understand her words. Maybe make the vocals a little bit drier?

And for 14, I'd say she's off to a good start.

Actually, there are 3 tracks of her singing, with a bit of verb and delay added, but the delay is barely audible... To be honest, I'm having a bit of a hard time understanding why people can't "hear" her. To me, her vocals are popping just fine. "Understanding" her is completely legit. I've got 4 songs of hers, and one of them I still have no idea what she's saying, even after hearing it close to 30 times. I've got a new mix coming, and we'll see if this addresses the issues...

She's got a great voice, Jason, lots of character and that's good!
Voice gets lost at times and she sounds like she's singing in Gaelic 'cos I don't understand a word...... Not that I find that a big problem but her voice should stand out more. I would compress the voice to hell or try to double the vocal track and really squash one of them and mix them together.
It's a very good song and I like it a lot. If she keeps this up, she's gonna be an accomplished musician one day.

Joey

Yo, Joey! Thanks for the kudos! Also, thanks for the suggestions. I worked on this two nights ago, and ended up doing *precisely* what you just suggested. There are 3 tracks of her vocals, and I upped the total gain by 1db, and upped the center track a bit more, while compressing it beyond anything I've ever compressed before. I'm gonna re-post it, and see what people think.

I'd tell her to sing higher and pick up the tempo. Try to sound more like Cruiserweight and less like Cyrus, (Miley).

Thanks for listening, Steve! Unfortunately, tempo is set, and she's got her sound the way she likes it.

 

[PoeticIntensity]

New Remix posted here

 

[CIRO]

Voice gets lost at times and she sounds like she's singing in Gaelic 'cos I don't understand a word.....

Well, as my english really sucks and I never understand the lyrics anyway... , this one sounds (melody + voice) pretty good to me.

Serious,excellent, Great job!

Ciro