Best Sounding Thing I have.... maybe

[JFogarty]

Check out the song that I did the day before I left for school, had to use all my toys before I had to leave some of em. I wrote it before though.


Anyway, check it out at nowhere: http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=1864&alid=-1

hopefully that link will work. Maybe not.

Anyway, I know I don't sing so well, so no need to remind me. And I have issues with the snare

Also, its very quiet, sorry....

The song gets boring at the end, its just solos, so feel free to skip it, unless you love organ, piano, and guitar solos....

 

[TripleM]

Well geez, if you're going to point out all the problems what am I supposed to do?

On the vocals, it seems the sections that had harmonies were tighter than those without. Is it because you find it easier to hold the pitch when another voice is present (which would be the opposite of me certainly), or were those sections just easier to sing? Anyway, just something I noticed.

The instruments sounded warm and nice to me. Liked the electric keys part.

The lyrics didn't seem to fit with the genre. "She's way too cool to think I don't suck." is a good line, but it doesn't seem to work here. Just my opinion. I didn't understand the "I wish I was Jazz." stuff. It's probably because I'm thick.

Trip...

 

[JFogarty]

I'm sure there's more wrong stuff than what I know about



I never noticed the vocal thing you mentioned. I sang the main vocal line first, then sang the harmonies over that, so I don't know...

It probably doesn't make any sense to anyone but me, but its all about rejection, low self esteem and unrequited love....


Thanks alot for you comments

 

[wjgypsy]

real sweet man. how old are you? i think that you sing well. what mic/pre-amp did you use on the vocal?

 

[JFogarty]

I know I sound 12, but I'm 20

Its a 4033 and I can't remember if its straight into the digi 001 or into my spirit fx16. I can't really tell the difference anyway...


You and my mom are the only people to have complimented my singing

 

[wjgypsy]

i think that your vocal sounded arould 16 or so. i'm only 14 so my vocie is going through heel, changing and all. my vocal is not realy low mabye mid?

good job on the song away.

listen to one of myne if you have the time:

go to: www.nowhererradio.com and search for a song called:

"come together"




zeke

 

[JFogarty]

Sounds pretty good man. I see what you mean about your voice, but it'll only get better.

Man I think I finally learned to whipe my ass when I was 14

 

[wjgypsy]

thanks!

by the way, was the piano (on your song) electric or real?

 

[JFogarty]

The piano is from my keyboard, which is a Yamaha S80. All the stuff comes from there exept the guitar and the drums. The piano at the ending is two different tones, I recorded the part in midi and put it to audio with two different settings, I just couldn't get it to sound right...

 

[jamal buchet]

first two lines........EXCELLENT!!!!........even the next two...i think the piano sounds great....."im not jazz"...seems to be not very inspired..??..i mean you killed w/ those first lines......the verses are great man...really...you need a better chorus...imho...

the vox are out here and there ..but the harmonies are pretty good..i didnt read this whole thread...drum machine?....sounds pretty good if it is...


overall i give this 7 better chorus...ups the score a ton..

cool

thanks
jamal

 

[JFogarty]

na, the drums are real. You can tell by the off rythmness of them at times

Yeah, I always have a hard time writing more parts to songs. The ending was from a different song (I learned a jazz chord change and just did it alot of times) And I wrote the verse part first, and need something else.