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cheesyrecipe
New member
Hello. Can you give me some advice on how to improve my track? I'm a newbie. Thanks.
It's called 'Give it Back'.
It's called 'Give it Back'.
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billyboy2674
New member
I hate to say this
but this has to be a joke.this has got to be in the top 3 worse songs ive ever heard in my life list.truly shocking.
but this has to be a joke.this has got to be in the top 3 worse songs ive ever heard in my life list.truly shocking.
Lt. Bob
Spread the Daf!
Sorry bro......I don't want you to think I'm critisizing you to be mean but this isn't very good. Certainly you can learn but you'll have to be able to take a little critisism. Here's my thoughts:
1. There's no song or melody or coherence to the music.
2. It's not very well recorded.
3.It starts out like it might be a song and then goes into whatever the hell that was with the different voices saying whatever the hell they were saying.
4. In your other post you said you hoped to make it in the music biz very soon. I hate to tell you but there are lots and lots of talented people out there and none of them are going to make it either. It just doesn't happen. You have to do this for the love of it and if you were to happen to make it, then that's a blessing.
5. If you ask people for their opinions, you shouldn't get offended when they give them.
6. If you bothered to look, you would find plenty of links to other folks songs here and there are , in fact, some very good songs done around here. It's not helpful to get bent out of shape when people give you their opinions. Granted, it isn't helpful to you if people just rag on your work without giving specifics, but don't ask if you don't want to know.
Lastly, if this is not a joke; then it sounds to me as if there is a creative spark going on in your mind but you don't really know much about the music end of things. If that's the case, then keep working and you'll get there. But you are not going to be making it in the music biz if your works at this beginner level. You have to walk before you can run. And you're still at the learning to walk stage.
Good luck, I hope you record something soon that shows a bit more of what you're hoping people will see in your music.
1. There's no song or melody or coherence to the music.
2. It's not very well recorded.
3.It starts out like it might be a song and then goes into whatever the hell that was with the different voices saying whatever the hell they were saying.
4. In your other post you said you hoped to make it in the music biz very soon. I hate to tell you but there are lots and lots of talented people out there and none of them are going to make it either. It just doesn't happen. You have to do this for the love of it and if you were to happen to make it, then that's a blessing.
5. If you ask people for their opinions, you shouldn't get offended when they give them.
6. If you bothered to look, you would find plenty of links to other folks songs here and there are , in fact, some very good songs done around here. It's not helpful to get bent out of shape when people give you their opinions. Granted, it isn't helpful to you if people just rag on your work without giving specifics, but don't ask if you don't want to know.
Lastly, if this is not a joke; then it sounds to me as if there is a creative spark going on in your mind but you don't really know much about the music end of things. If that's the case, then keep working and you'll get there. But you are not going to be making it in the music biz if your works at this beginner level. You have to walk before you can run. And you're still at the learning to walk stage.
Good luck, I hope you record something soon that shows a bit more of what you're hoping people will see in your music.
Toki987
Rock Steady
hehehe, do it again!! I thought it was terrific. A lovely piece of music with generally practised accepted methods, no. But it was kinda cool. I thought that one voice was saying "someone pinched my weenie off" hahahahah it may have been something else but I`m livin with that.
I'd like to hook you up with someone that has ideas similar to yours, if I could. Maybe you`ll run into Maggy South some time. She`s an altime favorite of mine!!!
by the way, the clarity of some of most of it was awesome..
I'd like to hook you up with someone that has ideas similar to yours, if I could. Maybe you`ll run into Maggy South some time. She`s an altime favorite of mine!!!
by the way, the clarity of some of most of it was awesome..
Kramer
Well-known member
Sounds like Pootpie has made his triumphant return!
AlChuck
Well-known member
It's not that hard to understand...
Someone pinched my video...
Give it back...
that's the entire lyrical content of the song...
Someone pinched my video...
Give it back...
that's the entire lyrical content of the song...
Toki987
Rock Steady
satire, is a rose amongst thorns... 
It had quite a "professional" and somewhat familiar flavour to the mix.
It had quite a "professional" and somewhat familiar flavour to the mix.
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cheesyrecipe
New member
My new choon!
Thanks for your kind (and not so kind!) comments about 'Give it Back'. Some of them I'm don't understand!
I have taken all the advice posted to me here and in the other section (Newbies) and come up with an improvement on 'Give it Back'. I spent all yesterday and most of last night on this (much to my girlfriend's annoyance!).
I got a sample cd yesterday and it has opened up a whole new world for me. I have used sample CD vocals and more attention to detail and overall balance. I will sing myself later on when I have had a few lessons! I am also taking guitar lessons. I have also done all the drum programming myself!
It is inspired by a recent documentary about Tokyo which was on telly recently. It is called 'The Great Wall' and is fairly easy listening and I think it would make good tv music. In fact, I might try and get into the 'tv music' writing business if I don't get signed.
I think it's catchy and has a memorable tune but of course I'm biased! You'll have to decide for yourselves!
As always, comments and advice appreciated.
Enjoy!
Paul.
Thanks for your kind (and not so kind!) comments about 'Give it Back'. Some of them I'm don't understand!
I have taken all the advice posted to me here and in the other section (Newbies) and come up with an improvement on 'Give it Back'. I spent all yesterday and most of last night on this (much to my girlfriend's annoyance!).
I got a sample cd yesterday and it has opened up a whole new world for me. I have used sample CD vocals and more attention to detail and overall balance. I will sing myself later on when I have had a few lessons! I am also taking guitar lessons. I have also done all the drum programming myself!
It is inspired by a recent documentary about Tokyo which was on telly recently. It is called 'The Great Wall' and is fairly easy listening and I think it would make good tv music. In fact, I might try and get into the 'tv music' writing business if I don't get signed.
I think it's catchy and has a memorable tune but of course I'm biased! You'll have to decide for yourselves!
As always, comments and advice appreciated.
Enjoy!
Paul.
Stratomaster
Active member
These are the feel good hits of the spring for me so far...Keep it up, you have the right attitude.
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cheesyrecipe
New member
Wow!
Thanks!
Thanks!
Pedullist
Stop it, I can't breathe
ROTFLMAO!
We should make a top 10 of this stuff, hilarious!
(if you're serious about this, cheesyrecipe....please listen to Lt. Bob)
We should make a top 10 of this stuff, hilarious!
(if you're serious about this, cheesyrecipe....please listen to Lt. Bob)
muzeman
New member
Well if whoever pinched your video hears this,I'm sure you'll get it back!
(Just kidding.)
Sounded real nice in the beggining,then I thought you were going to do a Monty Python.
The synth at the beggining sounds great,and the whistling/voices were cool.
I think if you worked from there and redid the rest,you could have a funny,wac song.
Pete
(Just kidding.)
Sounded real nice in the beggining,then I thought you were going to do a Monty Python.
The synth at the beggining sounds great,and the whistling/voices were cool.
I think if you worked from there and redid the rest,you could have a funny,wac song.
Pete
Blue Bear Sound
New member
Re: My new choon!
1 - position the tape or disk to the start of the track
2 - record-enable all the tracks
3 - hit the REC button
4 - let it record thru to the end of the song
5 - re-mix it with these "new" tracks - you'll find there's a lot more "air" and "spaciousness" to the song
6 - if it's still too sparse for your tastes, find musicians with real talent to re-record the tracks for you
The mix is a little rough -- here's an easy fix:cheesyrecipe said:
1 - position the tape or disk to the start of the track
2 - record-enable all the tracks
3 - hit the REC button
4 - let it record thru to the end of the song
5 - re-mix it with these "new" tracks - you'll find there's a lot more "air" and "spaciousness" to the song
6 - if it's still too sparse for your tastes, find musicians with real talent to re-record the tracks for you
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TripleM
Well-known member
I listened to both of them. Great lyrics . Just kidding.
The first one was just plain weird. Was each part in its own key?
On great wall... More listenable, but did you know it's clipping almost constantly? Nice punchy bass though. Some execution issues in some of the parts.
Keep at it.
. Just kidding.The first one was just plain weird. Was each part in its own key?
On great wall... More listenable, but did you know it's clipping almost constantly? Nice punchy bass though. Some execution issues in some of the parts.
Keep at it.
Pedullist
Stop it, I can't breathe
I love the insane modulation in the solo synth. Makes me laugh hysterically....can't help myself...
mbuster
New member
I feel used