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Well, let me know what you think here. I'm pretty new to this singer songwriter bit, this is the 2nd song I've written & I've only been playing open mics & writing for about 4 months. It's not great YET but I thought I'd get some feedback.

I'm playing my Taylor 314ce & doing main vocals. I have one friend doing the lead bit & another doing the backup vocals. All of this was recorded @ home using a Rhode NT1A, Behringer mixer, Audiophile 2496 & Sonar XL.

Any feedback good or bad would be great!

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=3210&alid=-1

Thanks!!

Cliff
 
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Your acoustic sounds pretty damn good recorded.
I liked the song
The vocal has potential.
You need to keep your relaxed tone while projecting a little more, (if that makes any sense:))
Some of the lyrics were incoherant.

All in all, I'd have to say a pretty decent jumping off point:)
 
Ok, nice accoustic tone. I don't care for your voice but that's just my taste. The lead swell guitar is off in a few notes in the beginning and the delay could be more in tempo or just a bit slower.

Nice mellow song overall.

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I listened again and decided it's not your vocal tone but the pronounciation that bugs me, and it's not horrible.
 
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I wanted to hear more definition in the lead guitar tone, it sounded kind of muddy. Also wished it was more audible during the verse.

Good tone from your Taylor - sounds a lot like mine! Maybe just a tad more bass in the tone would help, but then I'm listening on headphones and they don't give a good representation of how much bass is present in a mix.
 
THANKS for the feedback...

yeah, my voice is my weakness right now... I used to sing in some theatre & musicals but never this sort of thing. Soooo, it's a work in progress.

Any other advice would be great, I'm watching & learning.

Thanks again,

Cliff
 
OK, not bad for a first timer

You need to work on your vocals. You need to learn to bring up the power for the voice up from your gut, that will aid both your tone and your clarity. Watch how you attack words and phrases.

The recording is getting there. Your vocals get lost in the mix. The acoustic sounds fine, the distorted lead doesn't work well with the feeling all the other parts are bringing into the piece. I also heard some timing issues in the playing. Not bad for a beginner--we all had the same problems(and still do :D)

The sound of the voice is OK, you might go for a less gravel--don't be affraid of a clearer tone. Remember singing is as much emotion as it is staying in tune. Don't be affraid to let the emotion come through as you sing.
 
Hey Sloop, I've had comments about my "attack" before... what do you mean exactly & what do you think would improve on it?

Thanks for any nuggets of wisdom

Cliff
 
I can try to answer that..

Sometimes when we are singing it takes a second at the start of each note or word to begin actually singing. So it sounds for just a split second like you are saying rather than singing. Almost like you're finding the note or tone or even musicallity of the word. Try to sing the song a dozen or more times to warm up your voice and concentrate on starting very musically. After a while you will need less warmup but some is always good.

To me it sounds like you need to work on holding a note in a spot a bit as well.
 
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shadow5606 said:
Hey Sloop, I've had comments about my "attack" before... what do you mean exactly & what do you think would improve on it?

Thanks for any nuggets of wisdom

Cliff

On some of the phrasing you are hitting the opening of the words like a hammer, then singing. It is something we all did at one time. There are places for that--but not all the time. I think you are a bit nervous and are just attacking the music too hard. Let your body carry your voice, relax and have fun.
 
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