Welcome rfpd.
Guitar is way boomy in the low end. I mean way too much low end from maybe 250 down.
Start there.
I hear some pitch issues with vocals but you may be able to work that better without the guitars being so flubby.
SOunds like a lot of Kurt Cobain's home demos. Very early 90's grungy!
Didn't read other comments. Someone must like Cobain. lol. Sounds like something you'd hear on the multi-disc demo release.
Not sure why you'd say you don't have a good tone, cause I think you do. It's just fine. Can you bring your voice up 12 steps? If this were to be electric version, would you be able to scream it at the next root interval? The guitar is pretty muddy, so I'd adjust your microphone position and play with it until you get a more rounded, clear sound. Vocal sounded ok, but I think you'd be able to take your music to another level if you could sing higher. Not saying you can't, because this song didn't display higher pitches, just that it would be nice if you could.
I'll tell you this though, if you keep recording this stuff this way, you'll eventually want to move to full-on productions. I'd bet money on it. So, stick around, improve your recordings, work on your vocals, and post here frequently. We're here to help. Nice song and melodies.
It was pretty cool. Nice to hear something that sounds so similar to Nirvana. Where's the tension and release of Nirvana, though? Usually they did a buildup in either the music or the vocal, but I didn't hear anything like that.
The recording was a little tubby, and I think I hear artifact on the vocal (did you tune them?)
.. Next song I want to make something of a mixture between Sufjan Stevens, Jack White and indie folk in general.
Sounds like a Nirvana rip-off, like a monotone Rape Me. Not bad but not at all original. Very repetitive. It just drones on for the entire song. Flesh it out. Write a better chorus and maybe use part of that as an intro. Good luck.