The recording sounds nice. The drums are very buried, but my feeling is that it's intentional. The piano works well.
I like the breathy, quirky vocal. Yes, it's a tiny bit pitchy but in an endearing way, not an unlistenable one. To my ear, there are quite a few very tiny breath pops that mar the vocal slightly. It's the "I'm listening to a microphone" effect that is a distraction. A bit more attention with the pop filter/ mic placement would really help this.
Great, thanks for your thoughts Bubba - I agree on your comments re the vocal. I guess this is where I got caught between replicating the original style and trying for something myself. I figured Elliott close miked his vocals - as well as the prominent double tracking) to get that intimate effect, so I did the same which might have reduced the pop shield effectiveness. Then compounded by getting a bit pushy on the processing as there's quite a lot of presence on his version - his is also pretty 'essy' to be honest. I've got yet another cold at the moment (been a constant onslaught since my daughter started nursery) so can't retrack currently, but I made a few changes to the mix on the original link - peeled back some of that pushiness and changed the reverb.
Drums - yeah, I agonised on the levels more than anything else and am still trying to get used to how to get the best out of the software. They're a little buried in the original too, so that was kind of what I went with in the end - because they kind of come in and out of the song at various times anyway, I didn't want those transitions to be too stark. Cheers man
I like the vocal too. It's all well played. The vocal is getting masked when the full arrangement with bass comes in. Whenever that bass comes in, I'm hearing boom and mud. Is the left hand of the piano playing in the same register as the bass? Shouldn't be hard to get this mix sounding clearer. I'd try high passing bass and piano for starters. As Bubba said, the drums are buried. I had to go look up Elliot Smith--never heard of him before.
Thanks a lot Robus. I'm glad someone likes the vocals - took all my willpower not to bury them too! Good spot on the bass/piano clash, I think I'd heard it all too many times to notice. Yes, I think there's some overlap between the two - first song I've done with a piano really carrying the melody throughout, so something new to think about there. The current mix should hopefully clear some, if not yet all of that up.
The drums are a bit messy in sections on reflection and so need some proper attention over the next few days.
The song was a lot of fun to both play and work out the various parts for - there are so many cool little runs and variations, particularly on the bass and piano parts that keep the interest I think. Elliott was pretty big if you were into American alt rock/folk/lo-fi around late 90s/early 00s until he killed himself. One of those formative musicians for me and fortunately had the chance to seem him live a bunch of times. A lot of his stuff was recorded quite low key, but this one was taken from one of his big budget albums on Spielberg's record label - the original itself is still surprisingly lo-fi though.
I like the drum mix for this song - it wasn't meant to be propelled by a drummer, not even nudged.
the vocals are really nice - a couple of ssses and pops that could be treated.
Wll played and captured.
I like the bass but it wouldn't hurt to chop the bottom of it or the piano.
Cool stuff.
Ace, thanks Ray. Hopefully those plosives and esses are a little better now. As I say above it's a funny tune because I think there would be a few things people would pick up on if Elliott had posted his tune in here, which made some judgement calls a little tricky. All those high notes, vocal flourishes and the intensity he sings them with too were a killer, so I'm really pleased if I even got
anywhere near with this. I appreciate your thoughts as ever mate.
As mentioned above, there's a quick update on the original post with some tweaks to piano, bass, drums and vocals. I'll do a proper update mix, but this was just a way to start addressing a couple of things mentioned above and another couple of things that were bugging me. Thanks!